CSP: A Collection of Poems
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Comment from GentleWind
Theme is universal and I enjoyed the piece. My favorite was the line: these meanings pose threat to a new light. The imagery was real and brought my emotions out for a breather. Good job
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2008
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Theme is universal and I enjoyed the piece. My favorite was the line: these meanings pose threat to a new light. The imagery was real and brought my emotions out for a breather. Good job
Comment Written 01-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2008
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GentleWind, I thank you for this great review. And mostly that you liked it. I also appreciate your highlighting the line you liked most. With regards, Sue
Comment from giftid3
Thanks for sharing your thoughts, view and concepts. It is not easy to share of depression or to express it in a way that others are able to grasp it well, but you have done a fine job. The darkness and confusion comes through your words, and so too does the erratic behaviours, uncontrollable emotions and the suppression of hope, not at the hands of others but internal. Loss of control takes the drivers seat and all hell breaks loose.
Thanks for sharing and many blessings to you
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2008
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Thanks for sharing your thoughts, view and concepts. It is not easy to share of depression or to express it in a way that others are able to grasp it well, but you have done a fine job. The darkness and confusion comes through your words, and so too does the erratic behaviours, uncontrollable emotions and the suppression of hope, not at the hands of others but internal. Loss of control takes the drivers seat and all hell breaks loose.
Thanks for sharing and many blessings to you
Comment Written 01-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2008
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'suppression of hope" - very well defined! And very internal, yes. That is the essence of the poem...the viscious circle, webs woven by self...so, I'm glad you could see it all there. Thanks for your excellent review and comments. With regards, Sue
Comment from TamaraTel
this is a great acrostic. You have spoke of the all the aspects of depression and worded it in a way that flowed and sounded great. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2008
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this is a great acrostic. You have spoke of the all the aspects of depression and worded it in a way that flowed and sounded great. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 01-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2008
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Tamara, thank you for your review and your specific comments, which are always good to see. With regards, Sue
Comment from demelzadreamer
Believe me. Depression is not fun. I've gone through it a couple of times. Especially right after my grandmother died. It was pretty bad. But that poem really stood out to me, because it really speaks the truth. Great job. Keep righting. You obviously really have a knack at acrostics. Mine don't ever turn out to well. but more power to you. Good luck with all of your writing.
Yours, most sincerely,
DemelzaDreamer
P.S.
Deserves 6. But I ran out.
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2008
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Believe me. Depression is not fun. I've gone through it a couple of times. Especially right after my grandmother died. It was pretty bad. But that poem really stood out to me, because it really speaks the truth. Great job. Keep righting. You obviously really have a knack at acrostics. Mine don't ever turn out to well. but more power to you. Good luck with all of your writing.
Yours, most sincerely,
DemelzaDreamer
P.S.
Deserves 6. But I ran out.
Comment Written 01-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2008
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DemelzaDreamer, I thank you very much for your generous review and comments. And thank you for your well-wishes. (I'll take the 5 - ha!) With warmest regards, Sue
Comment from Firefly54
This poem certainly catches the true meaning of depression, and the picture depicts both the illness and the poem, with its darkness and webs. Good luck!
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2008
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This poem certainly catches the true meaning of depression, and the picture depicts both the illness and the poem, with its darkness and webs. Good luck!
Comment Written 01-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2008
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Firefly, thanks for reading and for your very kind review. Much appreciated and with regards, Sue
Comment from Jewell McChesney
This is a perfectly written acrostic which presents the message and experience of depression. You are a prolific writer who definately deserves this place on the top ten today!
Awesome!
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2008
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This is a perfectly written acrostic which presents the message and experience of depression. You are a prolific writer who definately deserves this place on the top ten today!
Awesome!
Comment Written 01-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2008
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VP777, I thank you for you very kind review and comments. I am very glad you enjoyed this piece! With regards, Sue
Comment from guerillapoet
This is a nice piece. I like the word choice. The style works and expresses a dark tone in a somewhat light-hearted way, with help from some well crafted wordplay.
Overall this is a tight piece with well built imagery and fun wordplay.
Thanks for the read,
GP
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2008
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This is a nice piece. I like the word choice. The style works and expresses a dark tone in a somewhat light-hearted way, with help from some well crafted wordplay.
Overall this is a tight piece with well built imagery and fun wordplay.
Thanks for the read,
GP
Comment Written 01-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2008
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GP, thanks very much for reading this work and for your very kind review. I'm glad you liked it. And thanks for your very specific comments. Regards, Sue
Comment from Jim Lorson Sr
excellent acrosstic about this very damaging disease. your format in the syllable meter is very good.
very good artwork for this poem. great piece of writing.............regards,,,jim
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2008
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excellent acrosstic about this very damaging disease. your format in the syllable meter is very good.
very good artwork for this poem. great piece of writing.............regards,,,jim
Comment Written 01-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2008
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Jim, thanks so much for your very kind review and specific comments. I really appreciate it. With regards, Sue
Comment from SteveI
The picture matched the feelings of depression as I have seen that painting many times before on the walls of my own mind. You also speak of trying not to feed the demands that come with depression.
Extremely insightful poem.
Steve!
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2008
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The picture matched the feelings of depression as I have seen that painting many times before on the walls of my own mind. You also speak of trying not to feed the demands that come with depression.
Extremely insightful poem.
Steve!
Comment Written 01-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2008
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Therein lies the viscious circle. It makes you feel bad; you feel bad; then you tell yourself you are bad; then that makes you more depressed!! Argghhh!!!!! Yes, that is what I mean in trying not to "feed its demands". And the end line is my ray of hope that I will not yield. Thank you for reading my poem and I appreciate your most kind review. With warmest regards, Sue
Comment from cheyennewy
I do hope this acrostic is not autobiographical. So many suffer from depression...I know I did after my husband passed away. I didn't even know it until my doctor told me I wasn't having a heart attack but was depressed. You wrote this very well as it certainly speaks of depression. Good luck in the contest....blessings....chey
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2008
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I do hope this acrostic is not autobiographical. So many suffer from depression...I know I did after my husband passed away. I didn't even know it until my doctor told me I wasn't having a heart attack but was depressed. You wrote this very well as it certainly speaks of depression. Good luck in the contest....blessings....chey
Comment Written 01-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2008
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Chey, it does creep up on people and they don't even know that is what is keeping them down. Glad you got the help you needed and my condolences to you on the loss of yours husband. Thank you for your kind review. With my warmest regards, Sue