CSP: A Collection of Poems
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Comment from RapturedHeart
Wow, Sixteezkid, this is extremely powerful. Love how you've mirrored two together - fits with the whole broken glass conceit. How very true - words wound deeply and can be even more painful than a blow. Think this is the best one I've read yet. All the best in the contest,
Heather
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Wow, Sixteezkid, this is extremely powerful. Love how you've mirrored two together - fits with the whole broken glass conceit. How very true - words wound deeply and can be even more painful than a blow. Think this is the best one I've read yet. All the best in the contest,
Heather
Comment Written 28-Nov-2008
Comment from Winslow
Dear Sixteezkid,
Words can indeed hurt and wound, and unlike a sword can never be withdrawn. I like the metaphor of shards cutting and wounding. Very good tetractys poem.
Warm regards,
Winslow
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Dear Sixteezkid,
Words can indeed hurt and wound, and unlike a sword can never be withdrawn. I like the metaphor of shards cutting and wounding. Very good tetractys poem.
Warm regards,
Winslow
Comment Written 28-Nov-2008
Comment from E. W. Crowe
Good stuff, 60's kid. I like this poem, it has a nice style and words that are all so true. Yet, we do lash out with tongues more than guns, don't we? Good Job.
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Good stuff, 60's kid. I like this poem, it has a nice style and words that are all so true. Yet, we do lash out with tongues more than guns, don't we? Good Job.
Comment Written 28-Nov-2008
Comment from thickwig
Ouch! Yes, words - those intangible sounds do really pack a powerful punch. They can bring the spirit down and bring it up again. Wonderfully put here.
Keep writing. I thank you for introducing me to this new form :)
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Ouch! Yes, words - those intangible sounds do really pack a powerful punch. They can bring the spirit down and bring it up again. Wonderfully put here.
Keep writing. I thank you for introducing me to this new form :)
Comment Written 28-Nov-2008
Comment from Scribbelini
Great poem this is a wonderful metaphorfor the things we say to hurt.
Listen as the cuts penetrate our souls
down to the core
as we flinch
from their
sounds.
Love this part the most -- Well done
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Great poem this is a wonderful metaphorfor the things we say to hurt.
Listen as the cuts penetrate our souls
down to the core
as we flinch
from their
sounds.
Love this part the most -- Well done
Comment Written 28-Nov-2008
Comment from Popcorn69
"Cuts that pentrate our soul." I like this line. This flows very well and your verses connect good together. The picture and layout of this poem looks great. In keeping with the tetracty form you did well. I do not see any changes that I would make. Job well done, thanks for sharing.
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"Cuts that pentrate our soul." I like this line. This flows very well and your verses connect good together. The picture and layout of this poem looks great. In keeping with the tetracty form you did well. I do not see any changes that I would make. Job well done, thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 28-Nov-2008
Comment from wazzo
My friend this is just an excellent piece of work I do not think you had to compromise the poem to the restrictions of the Tectractys. Well done. Blessings Albert.
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2008
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My friend this is just an excellent piece of work I do not think you had to compromise the poem to the restrictions of the Tectractys. Well done. Blessings Albert.
Comment Written 28-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2008
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wazzo, I am hoping on top of hope that I got back to you on this most generous review.
I was cleaning out my inbox and saw where this poem got a 6-star rating by you. If I missed the opportunity to thank you, I apologize so much! Do not know how I could possibly have missed it!
But I do thank you for your most kind words. As I am new at writing poetry, this is most encouraging!!
Many thanks to you,
Sue
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Sue...I like this particular poetry form and especially like this one. I think the wounds we sustain from cruel words is so devastating. I remember as a child I would much rather get a spanking than a bawling out. You wrote this very well and I enjoyed every word....blessings....chey
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Hi Sue...I like this particular poetry form and especially like this one. I think the wounds we sustain from cruel words is so devastating. I remember as a child I would much rather get a spanking than a bawling out. You wrote this very well and I enjoyed every word....blessings....chey
Comment Written 28-Nov-2008
Comment from NightWriter
"In Shatters" is a creative poem that reads very smooth and so perfect from beginning to end. There is perfect rhythm and good flow. Well done.
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"In Shatters" is a creative poem that reads very smooth and so perfect from beginning to end. There is perfect rhythm and good flow. Well done.
Comment Written 28-Nov-2008
Comment from yachtworknz
Sixteezkit-What a nice piece.
I particularly liked this bit-
For once spoken,
shards may be removed, yet the burn still seethes
Very true.
Cheers
Scott
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Sixteezkit-What a nice piece.
I particularly liked this bit-
For once spoken,
shards may be removed, yet the burn still seethes
Very true.
Cheers
Scott
Comment Written 28-Nov-2008