Red Geraniums
Free Verse Narrative: Fading into the darkness. .54 total reviews
Comment from brightside1099
This is a lovely piece. I'm sorry I missed it the first time around, but glad I found it now. I love geraniums, too. A friend of mine did a watercolor of the red ones and it's the first thing that came to mind as I read this. Very nice work. A special tribute to your mother. I'm sure she'd love it.
BB
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This is a lovely piece. I'm sorry I missed it the first time around, but glad I found it now. I love geraniums, too. A friend of mine did a watercolor of the red ones and it's the first thing that came to mind as I read this. Very nice work. A special tribute to your mother. I'm sure she'd love it.
BB
Comment Written 18-Jul-2008
Comment from jclark
I loved this! You wrote from your heart and you captured the experience 100%. A loving tribute to your Mother and very well written.
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I loved this! You wrote from your heart and you captured the experience 100%. A loving tribute to your Mother and very well written.
Comment Written 18-Jul-2008
Comment from rama devi
Sweetheart, I am sorry for your loss and the suffering preceding it. My dad passed away from the same problem in April of 2007, so of course I can fully relate to this well written poem.
This stanza is the pivotal point of the work that makes it truly poignant:
Well, hello there. So good of you to visit.
Will you be staying long? I must have dozed off. Tea?
Why, yes, I'd love some. I've been planting geraniums
all day long. Aren't they lovely? Red geraniums.
Pots and pots of red geraniums. For my husband.
You know, my husband loves red geraniums
in crocks with trailing ivy. . .
Bravo and blessings,
rama devi
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2008
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Sweetheart, I am sorry for your loss and the suffering preceding it. My dad passed away from the same problem in April of 2007, so of course I can fully relate to this well written poem.
This stanza is the pivotal point of the work that makes it truly poignant:
Well, hello there. So good of you to visit.
Will you be staying long? I must have dozed off. Tea?
Why, yes, I'd love some. I've been planting geraniums
all day long. Aren't they lovely? Red geraniums.
Pots and pots of red geraniums. For my husband.
You know, my husband loves red geraniums
in crocks with trailing ivy. . .
Bravo and blessings,
rama devi
Comment Written 18-Jul-2008
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2008
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Hello Friend! So pleased that you enjoyed my offering. Thank you for your kind and thoughtful review. diane
Comment from Jer4Clarity
Mrs. KT,
A stunning work of art. You've captured the heart within this story with grand imagery and chanting memories in line and verse. A grand tribute.
Congrats on this being selected to be in the Poem of the Month Contest!
Jer
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2008
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Mrs. KT,
A stunning work of art. You've captured the heart within this story with grand imagery and chanting memories in line and verse. A grand tribute.
Congrats on this being selected to be in the Poem of the Month Contest!
Jer
Comment Written 17-Jul-2008
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2008
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Hello Friend! So pleased that you enjoyed my offering. And thank you for your kind review! diane
Comment from Rdfrdmom2
Mrs KT, the hardest part of aging for me was watching my parents age, become disabled, and then die. My father was alert to the very end but my mom began to resemble your poem the last couple of months. This is an extremely poignant piece for everyone who has known and loved anyone suffering from dementia, Parkinsons, Alzheimers or similar disease. I am so sorry for your loss. Good luck in the contest. Congratulations on being selected for the Poem of the Month Competition.
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2008
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Mrs KT, the hardest part of aging for me was watching my parents age, become disabled, and then die. My father was alert to the very end but my mom began to resemble your poem the last couple of months. This is an extremely poignant piece for everyone who has known and loved anyone suffering from dementia, Parkinsons, Alzheimers or similar disease. I am so sorry for your loss. Good luck in the contest. Congratulations on being selected for the Poem of the Month Competition.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2008
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2008
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Hello! Thank you for your kind and thoughtful review. I am deeply honored and humbled by your review and the nomination. Have been gone from the site for awhile - on vacation. I need to start wrting again! Take Care!!! and Thank You Again! diane
Comment from Eleiece K.
What a sweet and lovely tribute to your mother and your endless patience and love for her. I liked the easy gentleness of the rhythmn of the poem, almost felt like a casual wandering walk down to join her on that wooden bench.
I wish you well in the contest.
Best regards,
Eleiece K.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2008
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What a sweet and lovely tribute to your mother and your endless patience and love for her. I liked the easy gentleness of the rhythmn of the poem, almost felt like a casual wandering walk down to join her on that wooden bench.
I wish you well in the contest.
Best regards,
Eleiece K.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2008
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2008
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So pleased that you enjoyed my offering, Eleiece! Thank you for your kind and thoughtful review! diane
Comment from mtngalofnc
Hi Diane,
It is so hard to watch a parent or grandparent go through these ills. You've done a wonderful job of telling this story. The flow is nice and you have painted a very vivid scene. I can easily visualize her sitting in the garden surrounded by the Geraniums and trailing ivy. Thank you for sharing this lovely poem. God bless and best wishes!
mtngalofnc
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Hi Diane,
It is so hard to watch a parent or grandparent go through these ills. You've done a wonderful job of telling this story. The flow is nice and you have painted a very vivid scene. I can easily visualize her sitting in the garden surrounded by the Geraniums and trailing ivy. Thank you for sharing this lovely poem. God bless and best wishes!
mtngalofnc
Comment Written 14-Jun-2008
Comment from D. Longo
To the heart, Mrs. KT . . . to memories and sadness; to love, to earth, to life. Such a bittersweet poem, Diane. Tenderly presented in eloquence, paced in patience, and imagery that includes us as participants on this red geranium and ivy day. Your talent shines in this work, my Friend - dogwoods shimmering in setting sunlight. D.
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2008
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To the heart, Mrs. KT . . . to memories and sadness; to love, to earth, to life. Such a bittersweet poem, Diane. Tenderly presented in eloquence, paced in patience, and imagery that includes us as participants on this red geranium and ivy day. Your talent shines in this work, my Friend - dogwoods shimmering in setting sunlight. D.
Comment Written 11-Jun-2008
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2008
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Hello Friend! Much appreciation. I was attempting to show the duality of emotions between the two individuals - and hopefully, the progression of the daughter from her being slightly annoyed because she wanted to visit, to just cherishing the moments left to her and her mother......Thank you for your kind review. I am, again, deeply honored....diane
Comment from naslund
Hi, Mrs. KT
I'm sorry for your lose.
You have done a wonderful and respectful poetic verse of remembrance for your dearly loved mother.
Your poem glows with the love you have for her.
Very intelligently stated.
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Hi, Mrs. KT
I'm sorry for your lose.
You have done a wonderful and respectful poetic verse of remembrance for your dearly loved mother.
Your poem glows with the love you have for her.
Very intelligently stated.
Comment Written 11-Jun-2008
Comment from Nescher Pyscher
Oh, how I wish the rating would stand for what I feel bout the poem.
But the powers that be insist I fill this little box with meaningless dialogue.
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Oh, how I wish the rating would stand for what I feel bout the poem.
But the powers that be insist I fill this little box with meaningless dialogue.
Comment Written 11-Jun-2008