From My Perch
Destination Darkness41 total reviews
Comment from sunflowermum
Very interesting!
I like the way you write. I'm new to the site, and plan on reading alot more of your stuff.
Bizarely interesting! x
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2008
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Very interesting!
I like the way you write. I'm new to the site, and plan on reading alot more of your stuff.
Bizarely interesting! x
Comment Written 17-Apr-2008
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2008
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thank you...dklrd
Comment from shy1250
Haunting is an excellent description for this artful piece. I had to stop to read the first stanza about three times. No typos or punct probs that I could see (although punct in poetry remains challenging for me). "The howling you hear is my voice" has to be my fave line, although many competed for this honor. One of the finest crafted dark pieces I have read (EAP is my fave poet, so rest in fine company!) Thanx for sharing this and GB, shy
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2008
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Haunting is an excellent description for this artful piece. I had to stop to read the first stanza about three times. No typos or punct probs that I could see (although punct in poetry remains challenging for me). "The howling you hear is my voice" has to be my fave line, although many competed for this honor. One of the finest crafted dark pieces I have read (EAP is my fave poet, so rest in fine company!) Thanx for sharing this and GB, shy
Comment Written 17-Apr-2008
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2008
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thank you so very much for such a fine review, I do appreciate it...dklrd
Comment from AbigailDavid
I love Gothic poetry, but you would never think to look at me. I'm the pinkest Goth you'll ever meet, heehehehe ^_^
Loved the poem. You have created just the right tone for this genre. Haunting and menacing. I like it!!!
No suggestions for improvement. It flows well and the publishing choices complete a very smooth poetic package.
Thanks for the kewl read, Abby
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2008
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I love Gothic poetry, but you would never think to look at me. I'm the pinkest Goth you'll ever meet, heehehehe ^_^
Loved the poem. You have created just the right tone for this genre. Haunting and menacing. I like it!!!
No suggestions for improvement. It flows well and the publishing choices complete a very smooth poetic package.
Thanks for the kewl read, Abby
Comment Written 17-Apr-2008
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2008
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thank you so very much for this fine review, coming from you, it means the world to me...dklrd
Comment from babylonia
made me smile. :P
easy to read and follow. no spaggies do i see. imagery is excellent. stanzas are well written. internal rhyme is good. definitely keep up the good work~
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2008
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made me smile. :P
easy to read and follow. no spaggies do i see. imagery is excellent. stanzas are well written. internal rhyme is good. definitely keep up the good work~
Comment Written 17-Apr-2008
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2008
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thank you so very much...dklrd
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you are very welcome~
babylonia
Comment from Moira's Amethyst
Nice work. You've presented here a wonderful write and an enjoyable read. I found that the formatting was a butt different than what I'm used to but effective. I have nothing to critique and noticed no spag issues. I thank you for sharing. Please, take care.
Poetry's Protege
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2008
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Nice work. You've presented here a wonderful write and an enjoyable read. I found that the formatting was a butt different than what I'm used to but effective. I have nothing to critique and noticed no spag issues. I thank you for sharing. Please, take care.
Poetry's Protege
Comment Written 17-Apr-2008
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2008
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thank you so very much...dklrd
Comment from Earthwriter
nice piece of spiritual verse i reall liked the message you conveyed in this piece very well written no spags that i could find
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2008
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nice piece of spiritual verse i reall liked the message you conveyed in this piece very well written no spags that i could find
Comment Written 17-Apr-2008
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2008
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thank you so very much...dklrd
Comment from giftid3
I like the imagery you have painted in this that gives two messages, one of the deep darkness of life and the other giving the hope of something else, something that draws out fear to touch, in case it brings change in ways that one does not want to commit to, because then the world we've created for ourselves will come crashing down. Although this poem gives more of the cold and colourless blandness of life, this side of the message paints hidden agendas still unapparent to the one who sits perched above, in smug complacency and authority. Further meditation I believe will bring other concepts forth.
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2008
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I like the imagery you have painted in this that gives two messages, one of the deep darkness of life and the other giving the hope of something else, something that draws out fear to touch, in case it brings change in ways that one does not want to commit to, because then the world we've created for ourselves will come crashing down. Although this poem gives more of the cold and colourless blandness of life, this side of the message paints hidden agendas still unapparent to the one who sits perched above, in smug complacency and authority. Further meditation I believe will bring other concepts forth.
Comment Written 17-Apr-2008
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2008
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thank you so very much...dklrd
Comment from Paradox Tremors
A bit scary and foreboding. Before entering, one best be straight with the good lord or else the guidance will not be there to steer you from this inescapable dread.
Had a eerie feel to it as if someone was truly peering over your shoulder. Great write; anything that can stir emotions of any kind is well written and thoughtout. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2008
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A bit scary and foreboding. Before entering, one best be straight with the good lord or else the guidance will not be there to steer you from this inescapable dread.
Had a eerie feel to it as if someone was truly peering over your shoulder. Great write; anything that can stir emotions of any kind is well written and thoughtout. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 16-Apr-2008
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2008
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thank you very much for the kind review...dklrd
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you're most welcome.
Comment from Fish
I think line 3 should state "by which" not "in which"
because that makes no sense.
From there the poem seems to proceed into some
scary proselytized rhetoric from which I can make
neither heads nor tails.
Fish
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2008
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I think line 3 should state "by which" not "in which"
because that makes no sense.
From there the poem seems to proceed into some
scary proselytized rhetoric from which I can make
neither heads nor tails.
Fish
Comment Written 16-Apr-2008
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2008
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thank you very much...dklrd
Comment from Kentucky Sweet Pea
Darkness is often the last destination until we hit our knees. It's a pretty grand design, if you ask me. Everything we suffer from our own hand or another's lead us right back to God's arms. All we have to do is fall into them.
Good post.
Pea
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2008
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Darkness is often the last destination until we hit our knees. It's a pretty grand design, if you ask me. Everything we suffer from our own hand or another's lead us right back to God's arms. All we have to do is fall into them.
Good post.
Pea
Comment Written 16-Apr-2008
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2008
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great review, thanks for sharing with me. I am glad that you visited my work...dklrd
