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cardiologist falsely accused of wrongful death
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Comment from
HealingMuse
Hi Cardio,
Nice write! I can't wait to read the connection between the two families / children.
Only a couple of suggestions:
"had decided to like (DELETE SPACE) wise abstain from alcohol."
"hard-core" should be hyphenated.
Thanks for sharing!
Happy New Year,
Jan
Comment Written 01-Jan-2008
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2008
HI HM---thank you---I made corrections---hope you will read more--two chapters will be posted today.----Doug
Comment from
sassy777
This was a very good chapter, it was well written and very informative, there was very little grammar error that I could find so why even mention them, I thank you for sharing this with us and wish you a happy new year.
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Comment Written 01-Jan-2008
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2008
Hi Sassy---Thanks for nice comments---hope you'll read more--two chapters will be posted tonight.----Doug
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