Timeless Space
Surviving a day alone and doing it in style11 total reviews
Comment from Patrick Bernardy
Hey Jesse!
I thoroughly enjoyed your journal entry (?) piece about how you spent your Christmas. I learned a lot about you, something I always enjoy with my fellow members of the community.
You actually taught me a new word with this work: "qualia." I actually had to look it up and discovered that it is the quality of something without it actually being the object with the property. This reminds me of Plato and essentialism where forms are discussed like "horseness" or "treeness." It is the actual fact of the quality, rather than thing itself. Awesome! Thank you!
---"A wondrous feeling like no other, where time doesn't matter, and you allow yourself to enjoy doing nothing at all." --I have no doubt this is liberating, and done well, can actually change your frame of mind, as it looks as if this experience did for you. I am a solitary person myself in physical space, although I do enjoy my connections with others through the computer. Loneliness can be conquered by adopting your outlook.
---It is SO FUNNY that I just reviewed Jessica Wheeler's short story "All Alone" (which I highly recommend reviewing if you have the time) and her conclusion about solitude mirrors you own. Fascinating how this topic cropped up twice in an hour for me!
---I absolutely LOVE Yes. I listen to the album "Classic Yes" as often as I can. "Fragile" is also good. My favorite songs by them are "And You and I" and "Heart of the Sunrise." I am also a HUGE Beatles fan, and while I like all four of them, I would probably say John is my favorite.
I hope you don't mind me helping you a bit with your commas. There were just a few. And unlike most writers, they are all commas that need to be removed rather than added:
---"since David left for a place he now[,] calls home." --This comma doesn't need to be here.
---"But that day[,] I slipped into relaxation mode[,] every time the spirit moved me." --Neither of these commas need to be here.
---"silence of a peaceful day with no one around[,] and nothing to do but[,] chill." --These two as well should be removed.
This is an awesome short piece about your emotional growth. I really enjoyed reading it and getting to know you better. Talk to you again soon!
Patrick
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Hey Jesse!
I thoroughly enjoyed your journal entry (?) piece about how you spent your Christmas. I learned a lot about you, something I always enjoy with my fellow members of the community.
You actually taught me a new word with this work: "qualia." I actually had to look it up and discovered that it is the quality of something without it actually being the object with the property. This reminds me of Plato and essentialism where forms are discussed like "horseness" or "treeness." It is the actual fact of the quality, rather than thing itself. Awesome! Thank you!
---"A wondrous feeling like no other, where time doesn't matter, and you allow yourself to enjoy doing nothing at all." --I have no doubt this is liberating, and done well, can actually change your frame of mind, as it looks as if this experience did for you. I am a solitary person myself in physical space, although I do enjoy my connections with others through the computer. Loneliness can be conquered by adopting your outlook.
---It is SO FUNNY that I just reviewed Jessica Wheeler's short story "All Alone" (which I highly recommend reviewing if you have the time) and her conclusion about solitude mirrors you own. Fascinating how this topic cropped up twice in an hour for me!
---I absolutely LOVE Yes. I listen to the album "Classic Yes" as often as I can. "Fragile" is also good. My favorite songs by them are "And You and I" and "Heart of the Sunrise." I am also a HUGE Beatles fan, and while I like all four of them, I would probably say John is my favorite.
I hope you don't mind me helping you a bit with your commas. There were just a few. And unlike most writers, they are all commas that need to be removed rather than added:
---"since David left for a place he now[,] calls home." --This comma doesn't need to be here.
---"But that day[,] I slipped into relaxation mode[,] every time the spirit moved me." --Neither of these commas need to be here.
---"silence of a peaceful day with no one around[,] and nothing to do but[,] chill." --These two as well should be removed.
This is an awesome short piece about your emotional growth. I really enjoyed reading it and getting to know you better. Talk to you again soon!
Patrick
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Comment Written 11-Jan-2025
