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Comment from Kayte Ray
I had a little trouble with the rhythm of your poem. It is well written and conveys clear images to the reader. I like how you have brought the reader through the shift of the season to the coming spring.
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2024
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I had a little trouble with the rhythm of your poem. It is well written and conveys clear images to the reader. I like how you have brought the reader through the shift of the season to the coming spring.
Comment Written 05-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2024
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Yeah, the break in the line doesn't seem to be falling in all the same spot. I agree with with that. I also appreciate your time and for pointing it out, too me. I need deliver it in a respectful way of which all of writers appreciate! Thank you so much for expressing your thoughts and ideas and your time too along with your great rating, enjoy your evening.Thanks again!
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Yeah, the break in the line doesn't seem to be falling in all the same spot. I agree with with that. I also appreciate your time and for pointing it out, too me. I need deliver it in a respectful way of which all of writers appreciate! Thank you so much for expressing your thoughts and ideas and your time too along with your great rating, enjoy your evening.Thanks again!
Comment from EILEEN LAW
Fantabulous
The sky she cries her steamy wail
gripping cold knowing it will fail
life bursts free from frozen coil
Pushing forth from the cracked soil
The evidence of earth deities life
The coldest sin does its strife
You will loose your frosted grip
The warmth of sun you did sip
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2024
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Fantabulous
The sky she cries her steamy wail
gripping cold knowing it will fail
life bursts free from frozen coil
Pushing forth from the cracked soil
The evidence of earth deities life
The coldest sin does its strife
You will loose your frosted grip
The warmth of sun you did sip
Comment Written 05-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2024
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Lovely! Thank you so much! Really glad you enjoyed this entry! I appreciate your well done poetic words! Have a great night!
Comment from Nicki.B
This is a beautiful poem! I love nature poems and especially those about flowers, this depicts the circus to be powerful, pretty and plenty! I loved the incorporated rhyme, it reads wonderfully. Great job, good luck with the contest!
Best Wishes
Nicki
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2024
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This is a beautiful poem! I love nature poems and especially those about flowers, this depicts the circus to be powerful, pretty and plenty! I loved the incorporated rhyme, it reads wonderfully. Great job, good luck with the contest!
Best Wishes
Nicki
Comment Written 05-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2024
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Hi Nicki!
Thank you for a great review.I appreciate it so much! Happy to hear your thoughts and feelings about the poem gives me great information always important for the writer to understand the reader. Thank you for your time and your great rating. Your kind words I hope you have the best evening!
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You're very welcome Lea! X
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
You brought the magical scene here of the crocus breaking through the snow in order to bloom with colour and display delicate petals, I enjoyed your inventive and warm poem about the joys of spring when the crocus presents its frilly skirt of colour, love Dolly x x x
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2024
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You brought the magical scene here of the crocus breaking through the snow in order to bloom with colour and display delicate petals, I enjoyed your inventive and warm poem about the joys of spring when the crocus presents its frilly skirt of colour, love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 05-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2024
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Thank you so much.I'm so glad you like this! I appreciate your thoughts and your time for stopping in for a read. Thanks again!
Comment from jake cosmos aller
a great personification poem about the life and times of the humble Corcus flower. You captured the life of the humble flower and its death in the end. i like the image chosen
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2024
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a great personification poem about the life and times of the humble Corcus flower. You captured the life of the humble flower and its death in the end. i like the image chosen
Comment Written 05-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2024
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Hi, thank you so much! I'm glad you like my poem. I very much appreciate you stopping in for a read, thank you! Thank you for reading and rating and for your time. I hope you and yours have a great evening!
Comment from pome lover
well, I gave you a five, but I have to say, I didn't understand all of this poem, though you did express the harsh conditions of the "birth" of the crocus. I just didn't get the first "not once, but twice, and then, at the end, "Spring will come, not one but two." also the "mighty fall" bit. Maybe I just don't know enough about the crocus.
Katharine
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2024
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well, I gave you a five, but I have to say, I didn't understand all of this poem, though you did express the harsh conditions of the "birth" of the crocus. I just didn't get the first "not once, but twice, and then, at the end, "Spring will come, not one but two." also the "mighty fall" bit. Maybe I just don't know enough about the crocus.
Katharine
Comment Written 05-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2024
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Hi
That line that you mentioned in the poem. There not once but twice, it describes the struggle of it trying to crack through the ice, so it takes more than one hit to get through. It wasn't instant for the crocus to come out of the snow, so we had they crack it twice if that makes any sense, just my perception every poem like this is open to interpretation. I certainly appreciate yours. I certainly appreciate you. Reading and offer me is fine rating and offering some interesting things to think about. I thank you for that.I also hope you have an amazing evening!
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Thank you! I guess not living where there's snow and ice and crocuses, the information in your poem was new to me :)
Comment from Rachelle Allen
I love the way, with your poetry, very often you personify your plant-based subjects. This one was particularly graphic and exciting as we are taken to envisioning a robust crocus defying the odds set against it and rising, like a phoenix, from the ashes of a spent season to blossom again, doubled in number.
I especially liked the description "grape face." You have a knack for clever imagery like that. Good luck to you in the contest!!!xoxoxxo
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2024
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I love the way, with your poetry, very often you personify your plant-based subjects. This one was particularly graphic and exciting as we are taken to envisioning a robust crocus defying the odds set against it and rising, like a phoenix, from the ashes of a spent season to blossom again, doubled in number.
I especially liked the description "grape face." You have a knack for clever imagery like that. Good luck to you in the contest!!!xoxoxxo
Comment Written 04-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2024
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Thank you so much! Wow!
Comment from DonandVicki
I think that the deeper we get into winter, the more we look forward to the warmth of spring. The crocus bulbs hibernate and divide to promote there species. Well done.
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2024
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I think that the deeper we get into winter, the more we look forward to the warmth of spring. The crocus bulbs hibernate and divide to promote there species. Well done.
Comment Written 04-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2024
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Thank you, Dolly, I'm glad you like it! Crocuses are good sign of spring, they're always the first up. For us anyway, it could be different in other areas. I appreciate you.Stopping it for a rating, talking your thoughts.Thank you very much, have a great night!
Comment from kahpot
So beautifully presented, I will have to look up this plant, though your words describe it and its actions wonderfully, I am presuming they are in full bloom until the sun comes "Giving sun the petals fly" your rhyme is excellent, very well written, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2024
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So beautifully presented, I will have to look up this plant, though your words describe it and its actions wonderfully, I am presuming they are in full bloom until the sun comes "Giving sun the petals fly" your rhyme is excellent, very well written, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
Comment Written 04-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2024
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Thank you very much.I'm so glad you like it! I'm glad you enjoyed the rhyme too.My message came across clearly. I always appreciate your reviews. And the time on your great insight. I hope you have an awesome night!
Comment from Cecilia A Heiskary
This is a wonderful Spring poem. Crocus' are a beautiful flower and a sure sign that spring is right atound the corner. The picture compliments the poem quite nicely. I can almost hear the river bubbling.
Well done and good luck in the contest.
Cecilia
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reply by the author on 04-Dec-2024
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This is a wonderful Spring poem. Crocus' are a beautiful flower and a sure sign that spring is right atound the corner. The picture compliments the poem quite nicely. I can almost hear the river bubbling.
Well done and good luck in the contest.
Cecilia
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 04-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2024
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Thank you Cecilia! I'm glad you like it.Thank you for your well wishes! I always appreciate the reader's perspective. If I know it's good and what's not so good, I take it all this information. Thank you so much again.I hope you're having a wonderful evening!
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You're welcome
Cecilia