Twisted Pathways
Battling the Mind19 total reviews
Comment from Wendy G
I wondered whether this was death, or a ghastly trip down memory lane. Whichever, it is very eerie, and has the qualities of a nightmare from which one cannot awaken. But the last sentence expresses something positive. Well done!Very descriptive.
Wendy
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2024
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I wondered whether this was death, or a ghastly trip down memory lane. Whichever, it is very eerie, and has the qualities of a nightmare from which one cannot awaken. But the last sentence expresses something positive. Well done!Very descriptive.
Wendy
Comment Written 18-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2024
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I somehow got inside my brain...a nasty place at times... and got lost for a few thousand words...luckily I found a way out. That's why I'm writing warm and fuzzy at the moment. LOL
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Julie Helms
I love how you took the prompt down the metaphorical pathway of a journey through your mind. You used vivid and compelling descriptions. You stoked emotion. Unique and very well done!
A typo:
striking **a** one terrifying blow after another
Julie
:-)
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2024
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I love how you took the prompt down the metaphorical pathway of a journey through your mind. You used vivid and compelling descriptions. You stoked emotion. Unique and very well done!
A typo:
striking **a** one terrifying blow after another
Julie
:-)
Comment Written 17-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2024
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I climbed out of my skin and into my mind...what a terrifying event that was. Glad I finally found the right door to get back out. Thanks for reading and reviewing.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
Not your usual cup of tea. Glorious picture Marilyn picked. It made me kinda depressed, which I guess was the whole point. I am going to have to go to Pinterest and watch laughing babies for a while. Good work though. Karen
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2024
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Not your usual cup of tea. Glorious picture Marilyn picked. It made me kinda depressed, which I guess was the whole point. I am going to have to go to Pinterest and watch laughing babies for a while. Good work though. Karen
Comment Written 17-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2024
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No, it most certainly was not...I was asked to give it a shot and that's what I did. Climbed out of my skin and into my mind... some real dark corridors in there. Lucky for me I found a way back out.
Smiles, Carol
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Good writing. But stark. -
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I know...I had a review from someone who said she was a professional and that she couldn't believe how real and true I had written the feelings of a psychotic.... Made me wonder if I've been hiding the real me in a closet... LOl
smiles, Carol
Comment from Douglas Goff
Oh my! This had a very creepy feel to it. A haunting environment to titillate one's mind.
Hopefully we are all opening doors to a better place.
Bless you!
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reply by the author on 17-Sep-2024
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Oh my! This had a very creepy feel to it. A haunting environment to titillate one's mind.
Hopefully we are all opening doors to a better place.
Bless you!
D
Comment Written 17-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2024
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Thanks, Doug! This was totally out of my genre but my friends started the new club and I was asked to write..Horror - the blood and guts kind - isn't me so I went another way with the horror of depression in the mind. I hope it came across that way. And I would never have guessed it was worthy of a six...Awesome! Thank you so much.
Smiles, Carol
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It deserved a sixer!
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I am so humbled. thank you!
Comment from Cindy Decker 3
Carol,
The hopelessness you at first create in your story is so well done. Your story can be a metaphor for dying and emerging into the Light but, more likely, an allegory of someone fighting the throes of depression.
I hope I was right with either of these.
Wonderful writing, Carol.
Best wishes,
Blessings,
Cindy
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2024
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Carol,
The hopelessness you at first create in your story is so well done. Your story can be a metaphor for dying and emerging into the Light but, more likely, an allegory of someone fighting the throes of depression.
I hope I was right with either of these.
Wonderful writing, Carol.
Best wishes,
Blessings,
Cindy
Comment Written 17-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2024
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Yes, ma'am you are...and I am thrilled because this is not my norme genre and I was so afraid no one would understand my meaning...because they would be looking for horror - blood and guts. My horror was in the mind. Thank you so much.
smiles, Carol
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Comment from royowen
I like the thought of almost a dreamlike consciousness, where I was living a nightmare, but like a source of hope was there to fulfil a happy ending to what I was going through, like a tunnel lined with horrors, delivering to that distant light, beautifully written Carol, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2024
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I like the thought of almost a dreamlike consciousness, where I was living a nightmare, but like a source of hope was there to fulfil a happy ending to what I was going through, like a tunnel lined with horrors, delivering to that distant light, beautifully written Carol, blessings Roy
Comment Written 17-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2024
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Exactlu...I was so afraid that no one would get it. The club said horror but I didn't want blood and guts horror. I went for horror in the mind but finding a ray of light at the end of the tunnel. Thank you, Roy.
Smiles, Carol
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Bless you, only you could think of that, well done.
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I remember how dark it was for me for a long time...I am so blessed to be feeling the sunshine.
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You deserve it
Comment from patcelaw
This is so very well written it holds the attention of the reader very well. Your sentence structuring your paragraph and your punctuation all are very good and it makes for a very smooth. Read when it's read aloud. Thank you so much for such a nice story. Patricia.
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2024
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This is so very well written it holds the attention of the reader very well. Your sentence structuring your paragraph and your punctuation all are very good and it makes for a very smooth. Read when it's read aloud. Thank you so much for such a nice story. Patricia.
Comment Written 17-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2024
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Thank you, Patricia! This is most definitely out of my normal genre but I was asked to try and I hope I did a decent job. I appreciate your time and your comments.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this club entry with us. I would say you're getting ready for Halloween with this entry. Thank you for sharing. You did a great job writing the tension felt.
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reply by the author on 17-Sep-2024
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Thank you for sharing this club entry with us. I would say you're getting ready for Halloween with this entry. Thank you for sharing. You did a great job writing the tension felt.
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Comment Written 17-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2024
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Thanks, Barbara... I'm not very good at this stuff, but when I thought about depression and trying to undertand one's mind and dark thoughts, this is what I got.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
What in the world!!! Where did that come from? Don't you tell me you don't like dark stories. WOW.
...their twisted forms not of wood but of the intricate, tangled nerves in my mind.... I loved this!
What an unexpected take on that picture. Completely unique and unnerving. Great job, Carol! I am so excited for this club! We are seeing all kinds of surprises come out of it so far.
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reply by the author on 17-Sep-2024
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What in the world!!! Where did that come from? Don't you tell me you don't like dark stories. WOW.
...their twisted forms not of wood but of the intricate, tangled nerves in my mind.... I loved this!
What an unexpected take on that picture. Completely unique and unnerving. Great job, Carol! I am so excited for this club! We are seeing all kinds of surprises come out of it so far.
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Comment Written 17-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2024
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It came from a thought long long ago when I wrote about my own moments of depression and how I struggled to find what was going on in the corridors of my mind. To me...not much else can be darker. I wasn't sure that it fit in what you and Patrick were looking for, but I gave it a shot.
I appreciate your ocmments. The relief is overwhelming. LOL
smiles, Carol