Where the Sun Falls
A free verse33 total reviews
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi Jessica,
This tells of the sun and the moon creating light for day and night and also human love as it grows and matures. There is always a light in the eyes of a love one that leads you to them and yourself.
Congrats on placing third in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Have a great day.
Joan
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2024
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Hi Jessica,
This tells of the sun and the moon creating light for day and night and also human love as it grows and matures. There is always a light in the eyes of a love one that leads you to them and yourself.
Congrats on placing third in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Have a great day.
Joan
Comment Written 19-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2024
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Thanks so much, Joan!
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You are most kindly welcome, Jessica.
Joan
Comment from jaded831
Very poetic, your poem created deep emotion. You painted a picture of romance. Every word flowed into the next eloquently. The picture added a special touch, but your poem stands alone.
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2024
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Very poetic, your poem created deep emotion. You painted a picture of romance. Every word flowed into the next eloquently. The picture added a special touch, but your poem stands alone.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2024
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Thank you, I truly appreciate it! Xo
Comment from bob cullen
Words fail me. This is nothing short of brilliant. Your words flow together with an almost perfect rhythm. Jessica, I just wish I could write this well. I'm envious.
To me, this is a fabulous poem that defines love in a most exquisite tone.
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2024
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Words fail me. This is nothing short of brilliant. Your words flow together with an almost perfect rhythm. Jessica, I just wish I could write this well. I'm envious.
To me, this is a fabulous poem that defines love in a most exquisite tone.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2024
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Bob, I am thrilled you enjoyed it! Thank you so much for your review!
Xo
Jess
Comment from Pearl Edwards
This is a lovely free verse, Jessica, both sensual and romantic about an evening on the shore at sunset. A good use of descriptive alliteration through out. I loved it, and wish you well in the contest.
cheers,
valda
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2024
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This is a lovely free verse, Jessica, both sensual and romantic about an evening on the shore at sunset. A good use of descriptive alliteration through out. I loved it, and wish you well in the contest.
cheers,
valda
Comment Written 19-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2024
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Thanks so much, Valda! Xo
Comment from Robert Zimmerman
The imagery is clear in your poem. It is romantic and quite descriptive. The language is clear and you relate the emotions in text that can be understood and appreciated.The poem is well written and enjoyable to read.
Z
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2024
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The imagery is clear in your poem. It is romantic and quite descriptive. The language is clear and you relate the emotions in text that can be understood and appreciated.The poem is well written and enjoyable to read.
Z
Comment Written 18-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2024
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I appreciate that so much, thank you!
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You're welcome. Z
Comment from Thesis
Your words tell a love story that could be interpreted in several ways. I like how you leave it to the reader to envision the scene as they please. It was a good read. Quite thought provoking.
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2024
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Your words tell a love story that could be interpreted in several ways. I like how you leave it to the reader to envision the scene as they please. It was a good read. Quite thought provoking.
Comment Written 18-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2024
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Much appreciated! Xoxo
Comment from ESOSTINE
This beautiful poem is well penned with lots of imagery. It is very intense and passionate, yet perfectly rendered with great word play without raising dust. A very creative piece, dear Jessica. Well done, and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2024
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This beautiful poem is well penned with lots of imagery. It is very intense and passionate, yet perfectly rendered with great word play without raising dust. A very creative piece, dear Jessica. Well done, and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 18-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2024
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I am so grateful for your encouraging words, thank you very much!
Xo
Jess
Comment from Jim Wile
Such a beautiful love poem, rich in imagery and with a great accompanying photo, Jess. Your free verse is so much better than most because it has a rhythm to it, which I think is all to the good.
Wonderfully sensual and picturesque, as these lovers meet at the dying of the day. Are his eyes troubled because he's not sure if she's coming?
The final few lines are exquisite as she prefers to watch the final light of the day reflected in her lover's eyes.
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2024
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Such a beautiful love poem, rich in imagery and with a great accompanying photo, Jess. Your free verse is so much better than most because it has a rhythm to it, which I think is all to the good.
Wonderfully sensual and picturesque, as these lovers meet at the dying of the day. Are his eyes troubled because he's not sure if she's coming?
The final few lines are exquisite as she prefers to watch the final light of the day reflected in her lover's eyes.
Comment Written 18-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2024
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Jim, you might be the first to pick up on that. And it does not surprise me one bit! Thank you so much, MM!
Xo
Jess
Comment from Katiemae1977
Wow. This is really intense and an excellent entry into the contest. This is a spectacular free verse that flows smoothly.
You have some really good poetic lines. I like the stanza that starts out with "The I melt like liquid gold for him...."
Beautifully done!
Luv&stuff
Katiemae1977
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2024
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Wow. This is really intense and an excellent entry into the contest. This is a spectacular free verse that flows smoothly.
You have some really good poetic lines. I like the stanza that starts out with "The I melt like liquid gold for him...."
Beautifully done!
Luv&stuff
Katiemae1977
Comment Written 17-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2024
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I really appreciate that, Katie!
Comment from Debi Pick Marquette
Wow, is this what I am going to see and feel as we are out on the patio this evening watching the eclipse of the moon, on the eve of my hubby's birthday?
(And what would have been my father's birthday) yes, I married a man who had the same birthday as my dad. Scary, huh?
This was so beautiful. And I love your free verse. Nobody does it like you.
I hope you know that I would love to give you a six but I have one left that was promised out. So please accept my virtual ten!! You deserve it.
Then I melt
like liquid gold for him,
to spread across
the sea, This is my favorite part. So glad I saw this.
Gorgeous!!!!! Love, Debi
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2024
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Wow, is this what I am going to see and feel as we are out on the patio this evening watching the eclipse of the moon, on the eve of my hubby's birthday?
(And what would have been my father's birthday) yes, I married a man who had the same birthday as my dad. Scary, huh?
This was so beautiful. And I love your free verse. Nobody does it like you.
I hope you know that I would love to give you a six but I have one left that was promised out. So please accept my virtual ten!! You deserve it.
Then I melt
like liquid gold for him,
to spread across
the sea, This is my favorite part. So glad I saw this.
Gorgeous!!!!! Love, Debi
Comment Written 17-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2024
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Your words are always worth more thank any amount of stars, Debi! Thank you, love ya!
Xoxo