Too Sleepy to Write
I keep falling asleep at the computer.27 total reviews
Comment from jake cosmos aller
a good poem about insomnia. This is something I can relate to. I often have bouts of insomnia usually at 0 dark hundred when I find myself awake as my mind goes down dark rabbit holes until the dawning sun blasts me awake.
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2024
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a good poem about insomnia. This is something I can relate to. I often have bouts of insomnia usually at 0 dark hundred when I find myself awake as my mind goes down dark rabbit holes until the dawning sun blasts me awake.
Comment Written 12-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2024
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Thank you. From the reviews I am learning I'm not the only one who falls asleep at the computer.
Beth
Comment from jim vecchio
Our minds are on the same wavelength. No sleep and I just posted a poem before I read this about wanting to write with no clear vision or meaning. Wish I had that extra star!
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2024
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Our minds are on the same wavelength. No sleep and I just posted a poem before I read this about wanting to write with no clear vision or meaning. Wish I had that extra star!
Comment Written 12-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2024
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Thank Jim. I think from the reviews that many people are having the same problem with the sleep issue.
Beth
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Well, at least I got to watch "Casablanca" a few times.
Comment from Brett Matthew West
Not sure but almost seems "but here's my rhyme" breaks the rhyme scheme???
Otherwise, poem very descriptive and accurate of the daily routine of many writers.
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2024
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Not sure but almost seems "but here's my rhyme" breaks the rhyme scheme???
Otherwise, poem very descriptive and accurate of the daily routine of many writers.
Comment Written 12-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2024
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Thank you, Brett. The lines are all eight syllables. the last to lines are four syllables making eight if read line as if on the same line. It's not the normally done that way but there are no rules.
Comment from Jim Wile
I loved it, Beth. This poem describes me almost to a tee of late. Whereas I don't have problems falling asleep, I have problems getting back to sleep when I wake up. That's when I get up and write--in the wee hours of the morning. But later during the day, the sleep deprivation catches up with me, and I can't keep awake.
This usually happens when I'm writing a novel and improves when I've finished writing it. Then I need a break before I start the next one. I'm starting to sleep better now that I've finished writing my current novel that you're reading. Interesting the way that works.
This was a very well-written rhyming poem that stuck to the meter perfectly. Great job.
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2024
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I loved it, Beth. This poem describes me almost to a tee of late. Whereas I don't have problems falling asleep, I have problems getting back to sleep when I wake up. That's when I get up and write--in the wee hours of the morning. But later during the day, the sleep deprivation catches up with me, and I can't keep awake.
This usually happens when I'm writing a novel and improves when I've finished writing it. Then I need a break before I start the next one. I'm starting to sleep better now that I've finished writing my current novel that you're reading. Interesting the way that works.
This was a very well-written rhyming poem that stuck to the meter perfectly. Great job.
Comment Written 12-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2024
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Thank you, Jim. I guess I'm not the only one who has this problem.
Beth
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi Beth,
This happens to all of us. Sometimes its the opposite for me. I can't sleep because I have a poem idea running through my mind. I need to get up and write the idea or the whole poem down before I can sleep again.
Maybe coffee or chocolate can help.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Have a nice day.
Joan
P S Just to let you know I just had a book published It is available on Amazon. If you are interested it is called The Interloper (and other stories in prose and poetry) by Joan Pechter
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2024
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Hi Beth,
This happens to all of us. Sometimes its the opposite for me. I can't sleep because I have a poem idea running through my mind. I need to get up and write the idea or the whole poem down before I can sleep again.
Maybe coffee or chocolate can help.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Have a nice day.
Joan
P S Just to let you know I just had a book published It is available on Amazon. If you are interested it is called The Interloper (and other stories in prose and poetry) by Joan Pechter
Comment Written 12-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2024
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Thank you, Joan, I appreciate you review. I'm glad I'm not the only one nodding off. Congratulation on getting another book published.
Beth
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My pleasure, Beth.
Joan
Comment from Wayne Fowler
I absolutely love it - "Write a rhyming poem."
Well there! Sign it and go to sleep.
Nice picture, too. Perfect for your poem.
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2024
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I absolutely love it - "Write a rhyming poem."
Well there! Sign it and go to sleep.
Nice picture, too. Perfect for your poem.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 12-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2024
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Thank you, Wayne. I'm pleased you like my version of rhymed poem.
Beth
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
I can't speak to the meter, but I like the rhymes. My answer for sleeping better - get away from the computer. Your "deadlines" are imagined, no one is paying you to write for these contests.
I've read that our devices keep us awake. Just a suggestion, as this is what I do: 1 hour of reviewing in the morning or afternoon (no more), and 90 minutes to 2 hours of writing (no more). I think it helps your thinking - and your sleep - to get away from the electronics.
But since you wrote this - good luck in the contest:-)
xo
Pam
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2024
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I can't speak to the meter, but I like the rhymes. My answer for sleeping better - get away from the computer. Your "deadlines" are imagined, no one is paying you to write for these contests.
I've read that our devices keep us awake. Just a suggestion, as this is what I do: 1 hour of reviewing in the morning or afternoon (no more), and 90 minutes to 2 hours of writing (no more). I think it helps your thinking - and your sleep - to get away from the electronics.
But since you wrote this - good luck in the contest:-)
xo
Pam
Comment Written 12-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2024
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You are right. The pressure is just something I challenged myself to do, but for me that has always been where pressure comes from because I don't like letting myself down. I think my desire to sleep comes as a result of a two-hour workout in water-aerobics and then a meal. If I don't keep challenging myself I'll vegetate. I appreciate the review. My cat has been waking me up taking a leap and landing on me in bed. Last night I locked her out of my room.
Beth
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LOL, I hate it when my cat does that! A couple of nights outside the room should do it.
Comment from Tom Horonzy
A rhyming challenge you met so well. Anyone reading it can surely tell...
that you stayed awake long enough to write about stuff that many do along with you. Isn't life a befuddlement?
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2024
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A rhyming challenge you met so well. Anyone reading it can surely tell...
that you stayed awake long enough to write about stuff that many do along with you. Isn't life a befuddlement?
Comment Written 12-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2024
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Thank you, Tom. I like your rhymed response.
Beth
Comment from Sue Smith
The sentiments in this poem really made me smile. Something we can all relate to. I particularly liked the enjambment (running over) between the 3rd and 4th lines of the first verse. It really moves that verse along. The rest of the poem is very accomplished anyway but it would have been great to see more of that. With most of the lines flowing so well I did stumble a bit with the 3rd line of the third verse. I'm not sure why - it might because I really wanted to put an 'a' before REM, or it might be the word lapse - possibly fall would be easier to say. And at the end of that verse did you mean won't rather than want? But great rhythm and rhyme which really makes the whole thing bounce along
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reply by the author on 12-Sep-2024
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The sentiments in this poem really made me smile. Something we can all relate to. I particularly liked the enjambment (running over) between the 3rd and 4th lines of the first verse. It really moves that verse along. The rest of the poem is very accomplished anyway but it would have been great to see more of that. With most of the lines flowing so well I did stumble a bit with the 3rd line of the third verse. I'm not sure why - it might because I really wanted to put an 'a' before REM, or it might be the word lapse - possibly fall would be easier to say. And at the end of that verse did you mean won't rather than want? But great rhythm and rhyme which really makes the whole thing bounce along
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Comment Written 12-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2024
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Thank you Sue. I appreciate you pointing out the word I accidentally spelled wrong an the spot where you stumbled. I glad my poem made you smile.
Beth
Comment from karenina
Let's face it. The darn muse is an imp!
However can we go from inspired to "so tired" in a millisecond!
This happens to me too, so you brought a smile!
In this line:
"with looming deadlines which want wait."
Did you mean "won't" wait?
Some days I think the one who needs a freshly charged battery is ME...
Not my laptoo!
Karenina
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2024
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Let's face it. The darn muse is an imp!
However can we go from inspired to "so tired" in a millisecond!
This happens to me too, so you brought a smile!
In this line:
"with looming deadlines which want wait."
Did you mean "won't" wait?
Some days I think the one who needs a freshly charged battery is ME...
Not my laptoo!
Karenina
Comment Written 12-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2024
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Thank you, Karenina. I spelled it wrong. I've corrected it. I need my battery charged too. I just had lunch so I'm sure I'll be falling asleep soon.
Beth
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I'm the QUEEN of typos! Have a nice post lunch nap!
