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Dawn of Chaos

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Comment from Dolly'sPoems
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We like to be clear of the facts before giving advice and we always seek the truth. Many situations these days are hidden by lies and deceit as the news we received is manipulated. I appreciated the sentiment in this poem, love Dolly x x x

 Comment Written 11-Oct-2024

Comment from lancellot
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Nope, I won't lie to you, this reads too hectic and random to gain a full understanding of what the author is trying to convey. One could guess, but never really know. The sentence structures are no cohesive enough. I recommend a different approach.

 Comment Written 11-Oct-2024

Comment from royowen
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We live in a very sick world, there is so much trouble, and only troubled people to fix those problems, many healthy people, in their minds are needed, and too few in supply, well done, Blessings Roy

 Comment Written 11-Oct-2024

Comment from Patty Mazzurco
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This passage presents an intriguing metaphor comparing life to a broken puzzle, suggesting that understanding and advising on life requires more than just knowing facts. The concept that merely gathering pieces doesn't complete the picture is thought-provoking and underscores the complexity of true understanding.

 Comment Written 20-Aug-2024


reply by the author on 21-Aug-2024
    The things, in this place, are far beyond the tiny leaks of truth: which escape. I have witnessed acts, by non-flesh entities, able to run to explode cars and gas station. Also, to crawl on the walls as in The Mummy. I saw one two feet in front my face. A big coming reality about our existence: unfolding it's reality. Thanking you for all.
Comment from Julie G1
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So well expressed. This poem provides the reader with an apt response to the prompt. The language and imagery vividly conveys the poet's message. Overall, worked well for this reader. Good luck with the contest.

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 Comment Written 20-Aug-2024


reply by the author on 21-Aug-2024
    Glad certain aspects of this write were captivating to your interests. Thanking you for your generous rate and welcomed thoughts.