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Comment from GoWiSt
"Reginald Carey Harrison" Must ALL your characters really have three names? Wouldn't plain ol' Reggie do? Or even just Reginald Harrison? So affectedly formal.
"I needed attention all the time," Wife/woman of the year, sure to attract lots of men--ahem.
"His new mistress was already waiting for him." And can one blame the poor guy?
"Her current boyfriend" Ah, touche, mon cherry.
A feisty female plays both father and son, and gets away with all their wealth--so you.
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2024
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"Reginald Carey Harrison" Must ALL your characters really have three names? Wouldn't plain ol' Reggie do? Or even just Reginald Harrison? So affectedly formal.
"I needed attention all the time," Wife/woman of the year, sure to attract lots of men--ahem.
"His new mistress was already waiting for him." And can one blame the poor guy?
"Her current boyfriend" Ah, touche, mon cherry.
A feisty female plays both father and son, and gets away with all their wealth--so you.
Comment Written 12-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2024
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Too bad, It's not real life. I could use the dough. Thanks for the read.
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Never think you can pull the wool over a woman's eyes and get away with it. I like her spunk! Well done on another of your imaginative stories of revenge! Take care Debbie.
Para starting "When you begged me to marry you...inverted commas need to be after the dialogue, not at the end.
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2024
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Never think you can pull the wool over a woman's eyes and get away with it. I like her spunk! Well done on another of your imaginative stories of revenge! Take care Debbie.
Para starting "When you begged me to marry you...inverted commas need to be after the dialogue, not at the end.
Comment Written 12-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2024
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I edited it. thank you Karen
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Remind me to avoid these people.
Isn't that true, She asked?" - Isn't that true?" she asked.
"Yes honey, but this is different, this is family," He said. - lower case 'he'. The same with the next paragraph.
...fixing his latest pile of mess." "And ... - oops
Glad to see you're back. Hope the move wasn't too unsettling.
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reply by the author on 12-Aug-2024
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Remind me to avoid these people.
Isn't that true, She asked?" - Isn't that true?" she asked.
"Yes honey, but this is different, this is family," He said. - lower case 'he'. The same with the next paragraph.
...fixing his latest pile of mess." "And ... - oops
Glad to see you're back. Hope the move wasn't too unsettling.
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Comment Written 12-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2024
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Someone told me the opposite. ???? I have 3 boxes left, then organizing and Picture hanging. Karen
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Here's an example of the opposite: He said, "You should do it this way." (correct)
Or: "You should do it this way," he said. (correct)
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:-)
Comment from Douglas Goff
Well done!
This part:
When you begged me to marry you, I told you I needed attention all the time, I did not like being alone.
So...you're saying she's a woman? Wait....did I say that out loud? Ha!
Very good.
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reply by the author on 12-Aug-2024
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Well done!
This part:
When you begged me to marry you, I told you I needed attention all the time, I did not like being alone.
So...you're saying she's a woman? Wait....did I say that out loud? Ha!
Very good.
D
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Comment Written 12-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2024
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You are a stinker. Thank you. Karen
