thoughts and feelings in poetry
Viewing comments for Chapter 54 "A stroll through the zoo"poems reflecting my thoughts and feelings
23 total reviews
Comment from jake cosmos aller
a nicely done narrative poem about a trip to the zoo. You express your memory of that event in short sharp focused word capturing the mood of the moment.
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2024
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a nicely done narrative poem about a trip to the zoo. You express your memory of that event in short sharp focused word capturing the mood of the moment.
Comment Written 01-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2024
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Thank you for your review. I do appreciate it.
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
This sounds so credible and sincere, it might well be true. An insight into the negligence in the care of these beautiful animals and an afterthought about the glory of a monkey's path to freedom, sadly curtailed. I enjoyed reading your little story, skilfully conveyed in rhyming verse. Well done and good luck! Debbie
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2024
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This sounds so credible and sincere, it might well be true. An insight into the negligence in the care of these beautiful animals and an afterthought about the glory of a monkey's path to freedom, sadly curtailed. I enjoyed reading your little story, skilfully conveyed in rhyming verse. Well done and good luck! Debbie
Comment Written 01-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2024
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Thank you for your review, I am glad it was not a real experience for me. I love going to the zoo with my grandchildren. That is why I purchased a yearly pass. Have a good day.
Comment from karenina
Is this a true story? I can picture it truly occurring! I love a humans and have been to a number of zoos in disrepair...
Sometimes I think the animals ought to be free and some inept and irresponsible zookeeper caged!
Karenina
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2024
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Is this a true story? I can picture it truly occurring! I love a humans and have been to a number of zoos in disrepair...
Sometimes I think the animals ought to be free and some inept and irresponsible zookeeper caged!
Karenina
Comment Written 01-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2024
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Thank you for your review, I do appreciate it. No this is fictional. I love the Jacksonville Zoo. It is one of my favorite places to go to with my grandchildren. Hope you have a good day.
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What a fun story! Thanks for sharing!
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Great entry for the Rhyming Poem contest.
Good entry for the Rhyming Poem contest.
The rhyme doesn't sound forced.
That sound sounds terrible.
Well done!
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novali
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2024
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Great entry for the Rhyming Poem contest.
Good entry for the Rhyming Poem contest.
The rhyme doesn't sound forced.
That sound sounds terrible.
Well done!
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novali
Comment Written 31-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2024
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Thank you for you review, and kind comments. I really appreciate it.
Comment from Brenda Strauser
I like this poem. It is very creative and interesting poem. The monkey is a good idea to use in a poem. The rhyming is very good.i like the picture.
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2024
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I like this poem. It is very creative and interesting poem. The monkey is a good idea to use in a poem. The rhyming is very good.i like the picture.
Comment Written 31-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2024
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Thank you for taking the time to review and kind comments. I appreciate it. I am glad you liked it, Hope you have a good night
Comment from gansach
This is a good entry for the rhyming poem competition. Your zoo sounds a lot more exciting than my zoo when you get to become a part of the action. Nice presentation and rhyme. Great job!
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2024
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This is a good entry for the rhyming poem competition. Your zoo sounds a lot more exciting than my zoo when you get to become a part of the action. Nice presentation and rhyme. Great job!
Comment Written 31-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2024
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Thank you so much for your review and kind words. I really do appreciate it.
Comment from Begin Again
You told the story well with yur words in the poem, showing the fun and enjoyment, then the heroics, and finally the sadness that the animals were not properly cared for, people were endangered, and the joy was gone.
Smiles, Carol
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2024
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You told the story well with yur words in the poem, showing the fun and enjoyment, then the heroics, and finally the sadness that the animals were not properly cared for, people were endangered, and the joy was gone.
Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 31-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2024
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Thank you for your review and comments. I do appreciate it.
Comment from jessizero
This story as a rhyming poem was both fun and a little bit sad at the same time. I enjoyed your rhymes, though. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2024
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This story as a rhyming poem was both fun and a little bit sad at the same time. I enjoyed your rhymes, though. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 30-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2024
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Thank you for taking the time to review and comment. I really do appreciate it.
Comment from SimianSavant
This sounds like it might be a real story. The rhyming schematic works. The metering, well, that could use some work but it wasn't part of the contest requirements. I live very close to a zoo by the way, and am buddies with the late Harambe, who shall rise again.
Thanks for the read,
SS
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2024
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This sounds like it might be a real story. The rhyming schematic works. The metering, well, that could use some work but it wasn't part of the contest requirements. I live very close to a zoo by the way, and am buddies with the late Harambe, who shall rise again.
Thanks for the read,
SS
Comment Written 30-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2024
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Thank you for taking the time to review and comment. I do appreciate it.
Comment from Pamusart
Hi, s,m,
This looks like a good entry for the contest. Good luck with that!!
Well, you're a hero for that little boy. Did you get bit?
One time at the San Francisco zoo I think it was a tiger escaped and mauled a little boy. He may have been a teenager
He had been throwing rocks at a tiger and hit the tiger a few times. And then he moved onto another exhibit.
But the tiger knew that he had been the one throwing the rocks and because of his adrenaline, he was able to jump over his enclosure and he didn't hurt anybody else. He went straight after the boy, and I forget whether he was euthanized or whether he was just taken back to his enclosure. More than likely he was euthanized even though that was the only person the tiger hurt
First off, they should make sure the tigers can't get out of their enclosures because it's very dangerous when tigers are running around in the zoo
And then the parents should've controlled the boy who was throwing the rocks. The zoo should've pressed charges because I think they could in a situation like that have him arrested.
And the poor tiger died because of the idiot boy
Your poem effectively showed what happened and how you felt about it
You seem to be a good man to have around and your poem has a good rhyming scheme
Hopefully your free pass was transferable since I don't blame you for not wanting to go to the zoo again
Here. Did you mean pen?
"A large tree in the monkey pin had overgrown."
I enjoyed reading your poem
Good job. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2024
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Hi, s,m,
This looks like a good entry for the contest. Good luck with that!!
Well, you're a hero for that little boy. Did you get bit?
One time at the San Francisco zoo I think it was a tiger escaped and mauled a little boy. He may have been a teenager
He had been throwing rocks at a tiger and hit the tiger a few times. And then he moved onto another exhibit.
But the tiger knew that he had been the one throwing the rocks and because of his adrenaline, he was able to jump over his enclosure and he didn't hurt anybody else. He went straight after the boy, and I forget whether he was euthanized or whether he was just taken back to his enclosure. More than likely he was euthanized even though that was the only person the tiger hurt
First off, they should make sure the tigers can't get out of their enclosures because it's very dangerous when tigers are running around in the zoo
And then the parents should've controlled the boy who was throwing the rocks. The zoo should've pressed charges because I think they could in a situation like that have him arrested.
And the poor tiger died because of the idiot boy
Your poem effectively showed what happened and how you felt about it
You seem to be a good man to have around and your poem has a good rhyming scheme
Hopefully your free pass was transferable since I don't blame you for not wanting to go to the zoo again
Here. Did you mean pen?
"A large tree in the monkey pin had overgrown."
I enjoyed reading your poem
Good job. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 30-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2024
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Thank you for taking the time to review and comments on this I do appreciate it. I did go back and made the correction on pin.