The Coyote Boys
Viewing comments for Chapter 11 "Different Kinds of Fishing"Story about two brothers who change their destiny.
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Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
This just gets better and better, Gretchen! The tension is so skilfully crafted that I find myself holding my breath. It's built to a crescendo and then you let it quietly simmer in Strait's memory to be used at a later date. I hate that man and am willing the deed to be done!
Small edit: but they won't see (the) second one.
Well done and a virtual six from me! Debbie
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2024
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This just gets better and better, Gretchen! The tension is so skilfully crafted that I find myself holding my breath. It's built to a crescendo and then you let it quietly simmer in Strait's memory to be used at a later date. I hate that man and am willing the deed to be done!
Small edit: but they won't see (the) second one.
Well done and a virtual six from me! Debbie
Comment Written 24-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2024
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Thank you, Debbie. I'm so glad you enjoyed this chapter. Thank you for the edit. Gretchen
Comment from Ric Myworld
Yes, so many times children lie in their rooms and listen, afraid to fall asleep, afraid to get up, dreading what might come. But children grow up and fear subsides. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2024
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Yes, so many times children lie in their rooms and listen, afraid to fall asleep, afraid to get up, dreading what might come. But children grow up and fear subsides. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 24-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2024
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Thank you so much, Ric. Very perceptive review. Gretchen
Comment from patcelaw
This is very well Written and is easy to listen to. I wish you the very best with your writing. Your sentence structure your paragraphing and your overall presentation is very good. Have a very blessed day. Patricia.
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2024
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This is very well Written and is easy to listen to. I wish you the very best with your writing. Your sentence structure your paragraphing and your overall presentation is very good. Have a very blessed day. Patricia.
Comment Written 24-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2024
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Thank you, Patricia. I'm glad you found this entertaining. Gretchen
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
Good grief Herbert! That sure packed a wallop. That was grand storytelling. You already had me firmly entrenched in your story, but whammo! You are bracing us for a humdinger! Karen
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2024
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Good grief Herbert! That sure packed a wallop. That was grand storytelling. You already had me firmly entrenched in your story, but whammo! You are bracing us for a humdinger! Karen
Comment Written 24-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2024
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Thanks, Karen. Your review was very entertaining. Lol. It will, indeed, be a humdinger. Thank you for the six. Gretchen
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You wrote that exceedingly well. I had to say so or, my lips might fall off! Karen :-)
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Excellent plot development. Nicely written, too.
Dewey might be a bit more cerebral in this chapter than he is developed to be, but it's plausible.
Best wishes.
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2024
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Excellent plot development. Nicely written, too.
Dewey might be a bit more cerebral in this chapter than he is developed to be, but it's plausible.
Best wishes.
Comment Written 24-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2024
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Thanks, Wayne. Dewey is pushing back. I'm glad you enjoyed this. Gretchen
Comment from BethShelby
This is excellent writing. Huck lives in dread because he understands his brother and what he is feeling and he knows there is something cooking in his mind that at some point will happen. He probably isn't sure of the outcome or whether it will be Dewey or the father that will be the victim.
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2024
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This is excellent writing. Huck lives in dread because he understands his brother and what he is feeling and he knows there is something cooking in his mind that at some point will happen. He probably isn't sure of the outcome or whether it will be Dewey or the father that will be the victim.
Comment Written 24-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2024
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You understand this exactly as I intended. Thank you for this. Gretchen
Comment from iDri.Luv.Jesus
Wow, a lot to take, I like your story a lot! It moved me, and I enjoy reading from beginning to the end, and it's a clear, easy straight story to understand. Too bad that I have only 5 star, and your work I think it worth "exceptional" 6 star review.
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2024
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Wow, a lot to take, I like your story a lot! It moved me, and I enjoy reading from beginning to the end, and it's a clear, easy straight story to understand. Too bad that I have only 5 star, and your work I think it worth "exceptional" 6 star review.
Comment Written 24-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2024
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Thank you. I appreciate your kind words. I hope you continue to follow along. Gretchen
Comment from Wendy G
The tension here was palpable - you've created it perfectly through your characters. Huck is right, and I dread to think of the imminent confrontation between their father and Dewey. Dewey is not a simpleton, despite the shovel, and the father will push one step too far, and then it will be on for one and all. And he won't forgive Huck either for being a "smart-ass". Very well written, superb.
Wendy
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2024
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The tension here was palpable - you've created it perfectly through your characters. Huck is right, and I dread to think of the imminent confrontation between their father and Dewey. Dewey is not a simpleton, despite the shovel, and the father will push one step too far, and then it will be on for one and all. And he won't forgive Huck either for being a "smart-ass". Very well written, superb.
Wendy
Comment Written 24-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2024
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Matthew strait is a horrible character, but the boys are ticking time bombs. Thank you for this. Gretchen
Comment from Pamusart
Hi, GW
I like it. I don't like the fact that the father beats the kids, but I like the way the kids think and that Dewey standing up to his father. He may be sorry, but he is standing up to him.
It sounds like daddy is having an affair with someone in town. That's why he disappeared last night and why he disappeared tonight. Probably a good thing for everybody. I don't know if momma gets violence from him. Too often if the kids are beaten the momma is too.
But, he is the breadwinner so their lives could be worse if he dies or goes to his new girlfriend and divorces. That's why Dewey
can stand up to him because his mind is on whatever girl he has in town
I enjoyed reading your book ppchapter
Good job. Thank you for sharing.
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reply by the author on 24-Jul-2024
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Hi, GW
I like it. I don't like the fact that the father beats the kids, but I like the way the kids think and that Dewey standing up to his father. He may be sorry, but he is standing up to him.
It sounds like daddy is having an affair with someone in town. That's why he disappeared last night and why he disappeared tonight. Probably a good thing for everybody. I don't know if momma gets violence from him. Too often if the kids are beaten the momma is too.
But, he is the breadwinner so their lives could be worse if he dies or goes to his new girlfriend and divorces. That's why Dewey
can stand up to him because his mind is on whatever girl he has in town
I enjoyed reading your book ppchapter
Good job. Thank you for sharing.
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Comment Written 23-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2024
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Thank you so much. Especially for detailing what resonated with you. I appreciate that. Gretchen
Comment from Rachelle Allen
Ohhhh, man. I am getting such a sick feeling in the pit of my stomach. So now the title makes sense, and I'm waiting on tenderhooks for it to come to fruition. Like you said last chapter in answer to my review: in this saga, there's no happy ending. Somebody's going to end up worse off than when the story began. Oy.
You are a masterful storyteller. xoxo
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reply by the author on 24-Jul-2024
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Ohhhh, man. I am getting such a sick feeling in the pit of my stomach. So now the title makes sense, and I'm waiting on tenderhooks for it to come to fruition. Like you said last chapter in answer to my review: in this saga, there's no happy ending. Somebody's going to end up worse off than when the story began. Oy.
You are a masterful storyteller. xoxo
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Comment Written 23-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2024
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Thank you. This one is so heavy and dark, that writing Detour is keeping me sane. I prefer comedic writing, but sometimes those darker stories just refuse to stay dormant. Thank you for this. Gretchen
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This is true.
Detour is keeping me quite buoyant, as well.