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Two very real women in not so real situation.

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Comment from Begin Again
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I am going to be upfront and tell you that I am jumping in after you've already been busily writing other chapters. It's my loss, for sure. I couldn't stop laughing at the girls. City life is definitely different from growing up in the country.

I was five when we moved to the family home my father built...thank heavens; it had indoor plumbing. My aunt and uncle lived next door, and they did not, so yes, I saw the Sears Catalog and other papers. There was no corn cob, though.

I enjoyed your style of writing and the story. Thanks for sharing and I hope to continue reading.
smiles, Carol

 Comment Written 15-Jul-2024


reply by the author on 15-Jul-2024
    Welcome aboard!! We're so happy to have you along on our adventure!!
Comment from Mark D. R.
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Rachelle,

A bit long for my typical review, but it is a funny story you have penned. The Amish community is worth visiting and certainly sampling their food is a delicious treat. Apparently, you were unaware of ALL their customs LOL

My guess is that at your current home there are Amish or Mennonites in your locale. We have the Shakers in my Albany area. Besides the brooms and furniture, they created the seed packets.

Glad to hear about your earlier barefoot life (-; Did you serenade the livestock in your former times? Ha ha!

Mark

 Comment Written 15-Jul-2024


reply by the author on 15-Jul-2024
    Yes, you're right: Menonites!

    I did practice every day with the windows open, except in winter, so they were privy to that. None joined in, though, sadly.
Comment from Cindy Decker 3
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Rachelle,
I like your comical story with Amish country as your backdrop. I love Amish culture, because I'm a hoarder of things, and they sacrifice and do without a lot of modern appliances, etc. they put me to shame with my numerous, full surge protectors!
You have great description in your work.
Nice chapter,
Best wishes,
Cindy

 Comment Written 15-Jul-2024


reply by the author on 15-Jul-2024
    Yes, they definitely practice what they preach! Thanks for this lovely review. xoxo
Comment from Wendy G
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Lol. Congratulations on this hilarious chapter! I have a grin from ear to ear! Fascinating that your background was in fact on acreage. I knew you'd have problems with the pork, and now it will be interesting to see how you handle this delicate matter!!
Wendy

 Comment Written 14-Jul-2024


reply by the author on 14-Jul-2024
    Stay tuned!! But thank you for the very nice review!! xoxo
Comment from Daylily
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So entertaining! Just the right blend of offering both a sad family loss and the total chaos of the belly laugh department.

I wish I had grown up on a farm. I did, however, spend many of my childhood summers going barefoot. And I have had several encounters of the outhouse kind.

I am really enjoying this story! XO Lily

Note the double I I: I don't see why not," she says, though I I worry she's just being polite

 Comment Written 14-Jul-2024


reply by the author on 14-Jul-2024
    Oh, thank you for that eagle-eye catch!!! I appreciate it very much!!

    It's always wonderful to receive your reviews, Lily! xoxox
Comment from judiverse
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I rememger those terrible outhouses. Only we didn't use corncobs of old cloth. It was a Sears-Roebuck catalog. When touring Amish country in Parke County, I noticed they had a Port-a-Potty in front of their greenhouse for the public to use. I hope Rachelle was at least able to salvage some jewelry, she'd have something to adorn her Amish clothes. I like that you blended in some pathos with the story of Rebekah offering her late mother's clothes to the narrator to wear. Interesting story about Rachelle's farm upbringing. You've come a long way, Baby! I hope they will soon be back to civilization where Rachelle can buy some new, stylish clothes. Great story. I have a feeling she will undergo some changes after spending time with the Amish. Fun bit about the scrapple. judi

 Comment Written 14-Jul-2024


reply by the author on 14-Jul-2024
    You are now the third reviewer to mention the Sears and Roebuck catalog as a toileting essential! Thanks for the delightful review and also for the additional star. So very appreciated. xoxox
reply by judiverse on 14-Jul-2024
    Definitely worth a six. I truly enjoyed it. You're welcome. A good way to recycle the old Sears roebuck catalogs. judi
reply by judiverse on 14-Jul-2024
    Definitely worth a six. I truly enjoyed it. You're welcome. A good way to recycle the old Sears roebuck catalogs. judi
Comment from prettybluebirds
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I love your footnotes. They are hilarious and add a lot to the story. When I grew up in the fifties, all we had was an outhouse. However, we didn't use corn cobs; we used old Sears Roebuck catalogs.

 Comment Written 14-Jul-2024


reply by the author on 14-Jul-2024
    That sounds way more comfortable!!
Comment from lyenochka
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I vaguely remember something from your book that you had a big move at one point in your childhood. What a commute for your parents to have to go to the city while living in the country.
Of course, I loved all your humor about the assumption about the corn cobs. This would be a handy tip for those of us during TP insecurity times of the pandemic!

 Comment Written 14-Jul-2024


reply by the author on 14-Jul-2024
    Yessss!! Good point, Helen!! xoxo
Comment from patcelaw
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Very well written was a pleasure to listen to. Your paragraphing and your sentence structure and your overall presentation is wonderful. I wish you the very best with all of your writing and I also wish you a very good week. God bless and stay safe. Patricia.

 Comment Written 14-Jul-2024


reply by the author on 14-Jul-2024
    thanks for all of that and this warm review. xoxo
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
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Hahaha..... I love your sense of humor. I'm trying to visualize the corn cobs to clean the behind... lol and what you did with them.

Excellent imagery, for example... "gleaming like snub-nosed rocket ships."

Another excellent chapter, so entertaining and well written!
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Check these, maybe they are intentional but just in case......

[Fanstory won't let me copy symbols, so I will use regular letters]

"ponytail, .... sections (aAA) one for each corn cob curler (aAA)"

"There is an all-but-palpable ..... the mikvah (aAA) the ritual Jewish bath (aAA)"

"I don't see why not," she says, though ( I I ) worry ....."

"I'm (a) acclimating to my circumstances (aAA)" (aAA)"..... and (b)"
...... What'd you do (aAA)"
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Well done,
Gypsy hugs

 Comment Written 14-Jul-2024


reply by the author on 14-Jul-2024
    Yes, thank you; they're gremlins that form whenever I type space, dash, space. So thanks for the eagle-eye catches. I thought I'd taken care of those already, though. Now I'll go back through and check. Thanks, Gypsy! xo
reply by Gypsy Blue Rose on 15-Jul-2024
    those darn gremlins are annoying and it happens to all of us