Love Out of the Darkness
Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "Love Out of the Darkness Part 2"Grief has its stages.
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Comment from Michael Ludwinder
I thought this was well written. Your imagery is excellent and I could picture this all in my head. The darkening sky and the rain beautifully mirrors Lesha's internal turmoil. The way you convey her struggle and the pull towards the cemetery is so powerful. Great job.
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I thought this was well written. Your imagery is excellent and I could picture this all in my head. The darkening sky and the rain beautifully mirrors Lesha's internal turmoil. The way you convey her struggle and the pull towards the cemetery is so powerful. Great job.
Comment Written 06-Jul-2024
Comment from Liz O'Neill
Storms can be used for excellent foreshadowing for passionary tales. We'll see if that hint said anything here. I had a boo-boo toe also and fortunately it has healed so I can put my sneakers on and go outside and do things. If it weren't so hot i could go slogging with my cat It's been 80 and 90 here so no slogging he hardly even stays out at all himself. Sending healing to your toe.
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Storms can be used for excellent foreshadowing for passionary tales. We'll see if that hint said anything here. I had a boo-boo toe also and fortunately it has healed so I can put my sneakers on and go outside and do things. If it weren't so hot i could go slogging with my cat It's been 80 and 90 here so no slogging he hardly even stays out at all himself. Sending healing to your toe.
Comment Written 06-Jul-2024
Comment from Pamusart
Hi A.Myers. I hope you are well
This looks like a good entry for the contest. Good luck with that!!
I hope your toe is better. I've had several broken toes, but, when my doctor moved all my tenants and ligaments around on the top of my foot. It was very painful. In fact, some of it never healed. There's always perpetual swelling.
In the story, it appears that she keeps going in circles. I got the impression that when she left where she was staying she was afraid and she wanted to get away. I'm not sure what the significance is for her not taking her coat or umbrella. Perhaps there's some subtle thing there that I'm missing.
And then it looks like her feet take her right back. Pardon me if I'm wrong I believe this is the first I've seen of this story.
I enjoyed reading your story
Good job. Thank you for sharing.
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Hi A.Myers. I hope you are well
This looks like a good entry for the contest. Good luck with that!!
I hope your toe is better. I've had several broken toes, but, when my doctor moved all my tenants and ligaments around on the top of my foot. It was very painful. In fact, some of it never healed. There's always perpetual swelling.
In the story, it appears that she keeps going in circles. I got the impression that when she left where she was staying she was afraid and she wanted to get away. I'm not sure what the significance is for her not taking her coat or umbrella. Perhaps there's some subtle thing there that I'm missing.
And then it looks like her feet take her right back. Pardon me if I'm wrong I believe this is the first I've seen of this story.
I enjoyed reading your story
Good job. Thank you for sharing.
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Comment Written 06-Jul-2024
Comment from patcelaw
The silence is slow so it's going to be a very compelling story. I enjoyed listening to it very much and it moves along very well. I wish you the very best with all of the writing. May you have a wonderful weekend and may God bless you. Patricia.
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The silence is slow so it's going to be a very compelling story. I enjoyed listening to it very much and it moves along very well. I wish you the very best with all of the writing. May you have a wonderful weekend and may God bless you. Patricia.
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Comment Written 06-Jul-2024