The Coyote Boys
Viewing comments for Chapter 6 "The Debt"Story about two brothers who change their destiny.
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Comment from Liz O'Neill
This for shadowing points to a cautionary tale slowly developing: "Dewey looks me in the eye. "No, he's gonna hurt someone real bad. I know it." The reader isn't quite sure which way this is going to go. But they do know it won't be pretty. I bet she saw the father peeking in. This is quite suspenseful well done. No I'll have a third book on my list of yours to read.
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2024
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This for shadowing points to a cautionary tale slowly developing: "Dewey looks me in the eye. "No, he's gonna hurt someone real bad. I know it." The reader isn't quite sure which way this is going to go. But they do know it won't be pretty. I bet she saw the father peeking in. This is quite suspenseful well done. No I'll have a third book on my list of yours to read.
Comment Written 02-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2024
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Please do read and give me feedback. Lol. Thank you for this. I appreciate it. Gretchen
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Comment from Rachelle Allen
Oy. My stomach just dropped a hundred floors. I know who it is, and I know what's up because of Dewey's foreshadowing. Oy. I am too invested to stop reading, but the chickenshit side of me wants to. You've doing such a great job with this, Gretchen. xoxo
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2024
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Oy. My stomach just dropped a hundred floors. I know who it is, and I know what's up because of Dewey's foreshadowing. Oy. I am too invested to stop reading, but the chickenshit side of me wants to. You've doing such a great job with this, Gretchen. xoxo
Comment Written 02-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2024
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Thank you, Rachelle, and thank your invested side for not letting your chickenshit side stop. Lol. I really appreciate this incredible review and the extra star. Gretchen
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My pleasure! xo
Comment from Neonewman
Maybe it was the abusive father who was peeking in Lynn's window. This is a great chapter in your book. I don't understand the whole abuse thing; some folk's brains are tainted, I suppose.
God bless,
Steve
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2024
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Maybe it was the abusive father who was peeking in Lynn's window. This is a great chapter in your book. I don't understand the whole abuse thing; some folk's brains are tainted, I suppose.
God bless,
Steve
Comment Written 02-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2024
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I don't understand it, myself, but I can understand the emotions of their victims. I'm guessing almost every moment of the day is high alert flight or fight instincts. Thank you so much for this. Gretchen
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My pleasure, Gretchen.
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Another excellent chapter with heart-breaking detail about the abuse on Dewey. There is real, palpable anger and lust for revenge building up in the boy now and Huck is needed to try and calm everything down. Love the transition from the coloured glass to Huck's happier memories and away from the darkness of the family situation. One small edit: I though(t) I saw someone peekin' in the winda...
Well done, Gretchen! Debbie
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2024
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Another excellent chapter with heart-breaking detail about the abuse on Dewey. There is real, palpable anger and lust for revenge building up in the boy now and Huck is needed to try and calm everything down. Love the transition from the coloured glass to Huck's happier memories and away from the darkness of the family situation. One small edit: I though(t) I saw someone peekin' in the winda...
Well done, Gretchen! Debbie
Comment Written 02-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2024
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Thank you so much. I love your reviews because you get to the meat and potatoes of the writing. And thank you for the edit. Gretchen
Comment from patcelaw
This is a very nicely written chapter for your book and I wish you the very best with your book. The wording moves along very smoothly and your satin structure and your paragraphing is excellent. May you have a very good day and a very good month. Patricia.
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2024
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This is a very nicely written chapter for your book and I wish you the very best with your book. The wording moves along very smoothly and your satin structure and your paragraphing is excellent. May you have a very good day and a very good month. Patricia.
Comment Written 02-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2024
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Thank you, Patricia. I appreciate your review and time. Gretchen
Comment from royowen
People like.the boy's dad make my blood boil, they are are mean, bad tempered l violent miscreants that don't belong in this world, but they may pick on the wrong person one day, and Dewey could be it, hate needs an outlet, and perhaps their dad will come a cropper, beautifully written Gretchen, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2024
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People like.the boy's dad make my blood boil, they are are mean, bad tempered l violent miscreants that don't belong in this world, but they may pick on the wrong person one day, and Dewey could be it, hate needs an outlet, and perhaps their dad will come a cropper, beautifully written Gretchen, blessings Roy
Comment Written 02-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2024
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Their dad is a blight on society. Thank you, Roy for this awesome review. Much appreciated. Gretchen
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I agree
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Nicely written.
You left us with a great cliffhanger. What, or who did Lynn see? Is she in danger? Is there a major plot point coming?
Best wishes.
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reply by the author on 03-Jul-2024
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Nicely written.
You left us with a great cliffhanger. What, or who did Lynn see? Is she in danger? Is there a major plot point coming?
Best wishes.
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Comment Written 02-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2024
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Major plot points to be sure. Thank you so much for this. Gretchen
Comment from BethShelby
I'm sure someone is going to get hurt and I don't know if it is Miss Lynn or Huck or at some point Dewey is going end up killing his daddy. This is a situation that is sure to blow up at some point.
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reply by the author on 03-Jul-2024
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I'm sure someone is going to get hurt and I don't know if it is Miss Lynn or Huck or at some point Dewey is going end up killing his daddy. This is a situation that is sure to blow up at some point.
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Comment Written 02-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2024
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Your intuition is on point. Thank you for this. Gretchen