2024 Japanese Poetry
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17 total reviews
Comment from royowen
I enjoyed the prose and the tragic story of you losing your mum at such a very young age, it doesn't seem fair, it's way too young for a child to be left without a parent, particularly your favourite people in the world, beautifully written, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2024
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I enjoyed the prose and the tragic story of you losing your mum at such a very young age, it doesn't seem fair, it's way too young for a child to be left without a parent, particularly your favourite people in the world, beautifully written, blessings Roy
Comment Written 27-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2024
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.
Gypsy
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Pleasure
Comment from Mike Stevens
Another fine write, Gypsy. Man that must have been rough. I remember when I was little that was my biggest fear, to suddenly be faced with what happened to you. That's a lot for a kid to deal with.
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2024
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Another fine write, Gypsy. Man that must have been rough. I remember when I was little that was my biggest fear, to suddenly be faced with what happened to you. That's a lot for a kid to deal with.
Comment Written 27-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2024
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Thank you very much, Mike. Yes it hard. I appreciate your exceptional six stars review and kind words
Gypsy
Comment from lyenochka
I don't like the smell of chrysanthemums but they are a hardy flower blooming until the first frost. They are a funeral flower in several cultures. I like how you share about how it impacted you and the brief moment that there was hope that your mom was alive. And we know she's more alive than we are - in Heaven!
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2024
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I don't like the smell of chrysanthemums but they are a hardy flower blooming until the first frost. They are a funeral flower in several cultures. I like how you share about how it impacted you and the brief moment that there was hope that your mom was alive. And we know she's more alive than we are - in Heaven!
Comment Written 26-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2024
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Thank you very much, big sister. She is in my heart and I know the spirit never dies.
Love
Marival
Comment from tfawcus
A haibun! Mountaineriter's favourite form, I think. We don't see many of them on site these days. I thought this one particularly effective, with the highly emotive prose element being so succinctly summarised in the haiku. Greatly enjoyed and well-worthy of a sixth star, but sadly ...
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2024
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A haibun! Mountaineriter's favourite form, I think. We don't see many of them on site these days. I thought this one particularly effective, with the highly emotive prose element being so succinctly summarised in the haiku. Greatly enjoyed and well-worthy of a sixth star, but sadly ...
Comment Written 26-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2024
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Thank you very much, Tony.
Gypsy
Comment from Rachelle Allen
Omigoodness, Gypsy; I had no idea you had suffered such a trauma at such a tender age. You wrote about it with such clarity and expression that it was all but palpable. xoxo
I did find this teeny spag:
overwhelming that **(it)** made me sick.
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2024
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Omigoodness, Gypsy; I had no idea you had suffered such a trauma at such a tender age. You wrote about it with such clarity and expression that it was all but palpable. xoxo
I did find this teeny spag:
overwhelming that **(it)** made me sick.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2024
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Thank you, Rachelle, I always appreciate help with grammar. I'm grateful that you took the time to read and review my poem. Good night (*÷*)
Gypsy
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I always appreciate it when people help me, too. How else do we get what we hope achieve!! xoxo
Comment from Esther Brown
Gypsy, that story was deeply moving. Brings me to tears. We have smells and sounds that carry emotion with them. You were so young to lose mom at 10. Thanks for sharing. Esther
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reply by the author on 27-Jun-2024
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Gypsy, that story was deeply moving. Brings me to tears. We have smells and sounds that carry emotion with them. You were so young to lose mom at 10. Thanks for sharing. Esther
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Comment Written 26-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2024
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I'm grateful that you took the time to read and review my poem. Good night (*÷*)
Gypsy
Comment from GWHARGIS
So beautiful and moving. You captured the feeling of losing one's parent. I lost my father at 13 years-old. I remember the smell of the funeral home to this day. Your haiku was stunning. The drooping mums, they represented the lost hope. Its tough to lose someone that important. This was beautiful. Gretchen
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reply by the author on 27-Jun-2024
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So beautiful and moving. You captured the feeling of losing one's parent. I lost my father at 13 years-old. I remember the smell of the funeral home to this day. Your haiku was stunning. The drooping mums, they represented the lost hope. Its tough to lose someone that important. This was beautiful. Gretchen
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Comment Written 26-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2024
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Gretchen, I was thinking about you when I wrote this because you always encourage me to write. It's short but I need practice. I'm grateful that you took the time to read and review my poem. Good night (*÷*)
Gypsy