Magnificent
Youth, Imagination and Energy. A winning combination.28 total reviews
Comment from F. William Lester
You've got the seventy-five words nailed. I can see the boy's anticipation, waiting to test his creation. I can hear his glee in the first test run. Nice work. Thanks for sharing it. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2024
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You've got the seventy-five words nailed. I can see the boy's anticipation, waiting to test his creation. I can hear his glee in the first test run. Nice work. Thanks for sharing it. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 22-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2024
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Thanks so much for your review. Glad you enjoyed the read. Yes, all the planning, building and testing paid off. What a feeling.
Take care and have a wonderful day.
Regards
Barry Penfold.
Comment from GWHARGIS
I remember playing with my barbies outside in the back yard. It was fun to imagine them going on an adventure or living off the land. I like the endless possibilities of this kids imagination. Gretchen
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2024
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I remember playing with my barbies outside in the back yard. It was fun to imagine them going on an adventure or living off the land. I like the endless possibilities of this kids imagination. Gretchen
Comment Written 22-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2024
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Gretchen,
Thanks so much for your review. Glad you enjoyed it. Yes, children's imagination is just so pure, so original. You take care and have a wonderful day.
Cheers
Barry Penfold.
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
A very satisfying read in this economic word format. There's nothing like a child's imagination and then to use it to create something of such fun and exhilaration! Nicely done, Barry! Good luck! Debbie
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2024
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A very satisfying read in this economic word format. There's nothing like a child's imagination and then to use it to create something of such fun and exhilaration! Nicely done, Barry! Good luck! Debbie
Comment Written 22-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2024
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Debbie,
Thanks for your review. Glad you enjoyed the read. Let's see how it goes for the contest. Thanks for the best wishes and have a great day.
Cheers
Barry
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
Great job, Barry. You've obviously put a lot of thought into this post. I can see the little boy, perhaps you, drawing out the track of a bicycle trail. Planning for days, drawing it out, executing the ride.
Suggestion: on,leg over,bum - You need spaces after the commas.
Best of luck in the contest,
Rhonda
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2024
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Great job, Barry. You've obviously put a lot of thought into this post. I can see the little boy, perhaps you, drawing out the track of a bicycle trail. Planning for days, drawing it out, executing the ride.
Suggestion: on,leg over,bum - You need spaces after the commas.
Best of luck in the contest,
Rhonda
Comment Written 22-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2024
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Rhonda,
Thanks for your review. Glad you enjoyed the read. Thanks also for the punctuation correction and best wishes.
All the very best.
Barry
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You're welcome. I always make errors, not matter how many times I read and reread. It was great!!
Comment from Wayne Fowler
A beginning, a middle, and an ending in seventy-five words. Quite a challenge. In many cases it's a good thing that the title and the Author's Notes are not factored in.
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2024
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A beginning, a middle, and an ending in seventy-five words. Quite a challenge. In many cases it's a good thing that the title and the Author's Notes are not factored in.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 22-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2024
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Wayne,
Thanks for your review and I am glad you enjoyed the read. I agree that it is good that Authors notes and Title are not factored in. This was a tight squeeze.
Regards
Barry
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
An excellent entry for the 75 Words Flash Fiction contest. There is nothing better than the imagination of a child and the fun it can bring. I good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2024
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An excellent entry for the 75 Words Flash Fiction contest. There is nothing better than the imagination of a child and the fun it can bring. I good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 22-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2024
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Marilyn,
Thanks so much for your review. Glad you enjoyed the read. Yes, children do have wonderful imaginations. Take care and have a wonderful day.
Regards
Barry
Comment from Pamusart
Hi, Barry
This looks like a good entry for the contest. Good luck with that!!
Oh, the joys of childhood. I remember using a tricycle. And bicycle training wheels that was probably my first bicycle and then getting a more adult bike, but it was only one speed and there were a lot of hills around. Of course we lived in a remote area for a lot of my bike riding days but, I was not allowed to go off the property.
It became my main mode of transportation when I lived in Santa Barbara. There are only a couple of places where the hills are too big.
I like the way you wrote it I think it's well written grabs your attention
I'm sorry. I don't know what a bike track is. Do you mind telling me?
I enjoyed reading your story
Good job. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2024
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Hi, Barry
This looks like a good entry for the contest. Good luck with that!!
Oh, the joys of childhood. I remember using a tricycle. And bicycle training wheels that was probably my first bicycle and then getting a more adult bike, but it was only one speed and there were a lot of hills around. Of course we lived in a remote area for a lot of my bike riding days but, I was not allowed to go off the property.
It became my main mode of transportation when I lived in Santa Barbara. There are only a couple of places where the hills are too big.
I like the way you wrote it I think it's well written grabs your attention
I'm sorry. I don't know what a bike track is. Do you mind telling me?
I enjoyed reading your story
Good job. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 22-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2024
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Thanks for your review. Glad you enjoyed the read. Seems as though you do have a long history with bikes. A bike track is something that is constructed on a vacant block of land and has humps, bumps and long stretches.The idea is simply ride whatever bike and have fun. The faster you can go, the better.
Hope that helps.
Take care
Barry Penfold.
Comment from Rene Tyo
Very cohesive story using so few words. There is an excitement that builds from the first few words and into the finale. This is a great example of how a simple idea can be conveyed into a meaningful story, well done.
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2024
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Very cohesive story using so few words. There is an excitement that builds from the first few words and into the finale. This is a great example of how a simple idea can be conveyed into a meaningful story, well done.
Comment Written 21-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2024
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Rene,
Thanks for your review, and I am glad you enjoyed the read. Yes a lot of action in so few words.
Take care
Barry Penfold.
Comment from Sharon Elwell
I like thinking about this moment in a child's life. The first sentence confused me, because I couldn't figure out why the stick was still moving if the path was already cleared. Good work!
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2024
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I like thinking about this moment in a child's life. The first sentence confused me, because I couldn't figure out why the stick was still moving if the path was already cleared. Good work!
Comment Written 21-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2024
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Sharon,
Thanks for your review. Glad you enjoyed the read. Yes, they were good days riding the bike. Take care and have a great day.
Regards
Barry Penfold.
Comment from tfawcus
This just goes to show how much more satisfaction you get from achieving something for yourself rather than having it ready done for you. Great to see a youngster discovering that. I enjoyed your post.
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2024
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This just goes to show how much more satisfaction you get from achieving something for yourself rather than having it ready done for you. Great to see a youngster discovering that. I enjoyed your post.
Comment Written 21-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2024
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Thanks for your review. Glad you enjoyed the read. Doing it yourself can be the best thing. Take care and have a wonderful day.
Cheers
Barry Penfold.