Blazing Inferno
My first childhood memory.20 total reviews
Comment from Esther Brown
Interesting first memory. I was left hanging wondering about the reason you marked that episode as the day you stopped communicating with her. You wrote "it was determined". Who determined it? Did it come out in counseling during the difficult time? I think the alluding to a difficult time you were going to go though in the future may be reworded or cut...and maybe you can re-create the feeling of rejection you must have felt being blamed for your brother's actions.
It is hard to go back in time and sort the memory in your own head from the stories told by the family about the event. You tell a very interesting story and I look forward to more chapters. Esther
reply by the author on 20-May-2024
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Interesting first memory. I was left hanging wondering about the reason you marked that episode as the day you stopped communicating with her. You wrote "it was determined". Who determined it? Did it come out in counseling during the difficult time? I think the alluding to a difficult time you were going to go though in the future may be reworded or cut...and maybe you can re-create the feeling of rejection you must have felt being blamed for your brother's actions.
It is hard to go back in time and sort the memory in your own head from the stories told by the family about the event. You tell a very interesting story and I look forward to more chapters. Esther
Comment Written 20-May-2024
reply by the author on 20-May-2024
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Thank you for stopping by taking the time to review my work and leaving such a nice comment. This was a very difficult time in my life and it was one that imprinted on my brain very clearly what happened that day. Even as a little girl of 3 1/2 years old I was aware of what was going on. Not only was aware of what was going on, but I did not know where my twin brother was, and that added to my fear.
Comment from jim vecchio
I am truly sorry if this were a true factual account. My wife's family suffered through an intense fire when she was young. I know how terrible it is. Thank you for posting this believable and well-written account of a frightening chapter.
reply by the author on 20-May-2024
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I am truly sorry if this were a true factual account. My wife's family suffered through an intense fire when she was young. I know how terrible it is. Thank you for posting this believable and well-written account of a frightening chapter.
Comment Written 20-May-2024
reply by the author on 20-May-2024
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Thank you so much for taking the time to review my work. I did put it in the nonfiction category. Patricia .
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So sorry to hear of your horrifying experience.
Comment from RJ Heritage
This sounds very traumatic and real. It is a well written narrative. If it is an account of a real experience, perhaps you may wish ti put it under Biographical Non-Fiction instead.
As parents we always have to be mindful of the fragility of a child's mind.
Wel done.
RJ
reply by the author on 20-May-2024
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This sounds very traumatic and real. It is a well written narrative. If it is an account of a real experience, perhaps you may wish ti put it under Biographical Non-Fiction instead.
As parents we always have to be mindful of the fragility of a child's mind.
Wel done.
RJ
Comment Written 20-May-2024
reply by the author on 20-May-2024
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Thank you so very much for your very kind words. I appreciate it. I agree with you that as parents we need to be very careful about the words that we speak to our children because they can damage them even at a very early age. I also believe that as we raging our children, we need to give a good balance of encouragement, along with a good amount of proper correction.
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You?re welcome
Comment from royowen
I don't think you really did anything wrong, sometimes mothers seem to feel the girl is responsible for the misadventures of the boy, but they're not, beautifully written, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 20-May-2024
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I don't think you really did anything wrong, sometimes mothers seem to feel the girl is responsible for the misadventures of the boy, but they're not, beautifully written, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 20-May-2024
reply by the author on 20-May-2024
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Thank you so much for your very kind review. I appreciate it very much.
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Most welcome
Comment from Wendy G
I am so glad she got the animals out in time, and that your brother was not hurt. I understand too how this terrible incident affected your relationship with your mother. In reality all the animals owe their lives to you and your quick alert.
Wendy
reply by the author on 20-May-2024
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I am so glad she got the animals out in time, and that your brother was not hurt. I understand too how this terrible incident affected your relationship with your mother. In reality all the animals owe their lives to you and your quick alert.
Wendy
Comment Written 20-May-2024
reply by the author on 20-May-2024
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Thank you so much for taking the time to review my work. I appreciate it very much.
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
Your recollection of your first memory turned into a well written and enjoyable first chapter. The imagery of the barn fire and the emotions surrounding it (fear and confusion) are right on the surface. Your reflection on how this event influenced your relationship with your mother later in life adds an unexpeted layer to the story. I think many can relate to that because often there is long-term consequences of childhood trauma. Well done.
reply by the author on 20-May-2024
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Your recollection of your first memory turned into a well written and enjoyable first chapter. The imagery of the barn fire and the emotions surrounding it (fear and confusion) are right on the surface. Your reflection on how this event influenced your relationship with your mother later in life adds an unexpeted layer to the story. I think many can relate to that because often there is long-term consequences of childhood trauma. Well done.
Comment Written 19-May-2024
reply by the author on 20-May-2024
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Thank you for taking the time to review my work. It?s just very much appreciated.
Comment from AP Apgar
What a excellent poem -and picture presentation supporting- the story is well written and tells a frightful tale of a moment in you childhood that effected your life and your mother's there after - very sad - Bless AP
reply by the author on 20-May-2024
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What a excellent poem -and picture presentation supporting- the story is well written and tells a frightful tale of a moment in you childhood that effected your life and your mother's there after - very sad - Bless AP
Comment Written 19-May-2024
reply by the author on 20-May-2024
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Gratitude in my heart I wish to thank you for a very nice review.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This trauma caused a rift between you and your Mother that never mended Patricia and we all have some significant event that changed our way of thinking. A poignant post and I am so glad your brother was unharmed in this fire. How sad this traumatic scene is and so very frightening for a child, thank you for sharing this with us, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 19-May-2024
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This trauma caused a rift between you and your Mother that never mended Patricia and we all have some significant event that changed our way of thinking. A poignant post and I am so glad your brother was unharmed in this fire. How sad this traumatic scene is and so very frightening for a child, thank you for sharing this with us, love Dolly x
Comment Written 19-May-2024
reply by the author on 19-May-2024
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Thank you so much for your very kind review. I appreciate it very much. I wish you the very best with all of your writing. And I wish for you a very good week.
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You have a good week too Patricia, bless you x x x
Comment from kahpot
That must be a terrible feeling and memory to live with, after all you were not the main culprit in this disaster, and not being able to talk to your mother must have been an added burden, an excellent read and chapter, I look forward to reading more****kahpot
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reply by the author on 19-May-2024
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That must be a terrible feeling and memory to live with, after all you were not the main culprit in this disaster, and not being able to talk to your mother must have been an added burden, an excellent read and chapter, I look forward to reading more****kahpot
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Comment Written 19-May-2024
reply by the author on 19-May-2024
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Thank you so much for reading my story and leaving such a nice comment. I will not be posting more of the book here on fan story I had only mentioned it in a review and somebody asked me to write the story so I decided to put it on paper. Patricia, but the story is in my book and is available through Amazon if you go to Amazon go to Patricia Lawrence and the title of my book and it?ll come right up.
Comment from lyenochka
I remember your story about burning the barn. It's awful how your mother put that burden on you as both of you were the same age. She was very hard on you all your life. Nevertheless, you became a loving mother unlike your own mother. Thanks for sharing.
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reply by the author on 19-May-2024
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I remember your story about burning the barn. It's awful how your mother put that burden on you as both of you were the same age. She was very hard on you all your life. Nevertheless, you became a loving mother unlike your own mother. Thanks for sharing.
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Comment Written 19-May-2024
reply by the author on 19-May-2024
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Thank you so much for taking the time to review my work and to leave such a nice comment. I appreciate it very much. Patricia .