Experiencing love
A free verse poem12 total reviews
Comment from GoWiSt
Interestingly different image in that pcture artwork.
" tears
of Joyfulness that tugs at the heartstrings," tug--not tugs.
"firstborn daughters' eyes" daughter's--not daughters'
Very good metaphoric imagery expressed throughout the piece.
So many instances of interpretation of love--all well presented. Good luck in the contest!
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reply by the author on 15-May-2024
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Interestingly different image in that pcture artwork.
" tears
of Joyfulness that tugs at the heartstrings," tug--not tugs.
"firstborn daughters' eyes" daughter's--not daughters'
Very good metaphoric imagery expressed throughout the piece.
So many instances of interpretation of love--all well presented. Good luck in the contest!
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Comment Written 15-May-2024
reply by the author on 15-May-2024
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Thank you.
Comment from Jewell Danette
I felt most stanzas as if they were my personal recollections! I'm not sure I understood the connection between "like a lofting basketball" and "abundant radiating warmth that makes all things grow." I was reminded, however, of a young man who played basketball from sun up to sundown, because he wanted to make it to the NBA. Were you going to capitalize the whole word "joyful"? Anyway, I still smiled. Your specificity made me reflect on what is important. Very nice! Thank you.
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reply by the author on 15-May-2024
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I felt most stanzas as if they were my personal recollections! I'm not sure I understood the connection between "like a lofting basketball" and "abundant radiating warmth that makes all things grow." I was reminded, however, of a young man who played basketball from sun up to sundown, because he wanted to make it to the NBA. Were you going to capitalize the whole word "joyful"? Anyway, I still smiled. Your specificity made me reflect on what is important. Very nice! Thank you.
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Comment Written 15-May-2024
reply by the author on 15-May-2024
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I appreciate your reflections.