Panpipes
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Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
What a cliff-hanger, Tony! As ever, your well researched story reveals the complex financial issues Ayesha is facing in her efforts to set up a trust fund. Now she is complicating things by her attraction to Steve and putting them both, unknowingly, in danger. Your excellent story romps along, always entertaining, always immersing the reader in the seedy world of corruption. Well done! Debbie
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2024
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What a cliff-hanger, Tony! As ever, your well researched story reveals the complex financial issues Ayesha is facing in her efforts to set up a trust fund. Now she is complicating things by her attraction to Steve and putting them both, unknowingly, in danger. Your excellent story romps along, always entertaining, always immersing the reader in the seedy world of corruption. Well done! Debbie
Comment Written 13-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2024
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Thanks for these most encouraging remarks, Debbie. Always appreciated. So glad you are continuing to be engaged by the story. All good wishes, Tony.
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Hopefully, for Ayesha that hunky Steve is genuine. This was a great chapter Tony, emotional and dramatic and with more fear and drama to come for Ayesha. Well written, a great read.
cheers,
valda
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2024
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Hopefully, for Ayesha that hunky Steve is genuine. This was a great chapter Tony, emotional and dramatic and with more fear and drama to come for Ayesha. Well written, a great read.
cheers,
valda
Comment Written 13-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2024
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Thanks so much, Valda. I'm delighted that you're enjoying the story. All good wishes, Tony.
Comment from royowen
Ayesha is a strong and purposeful woman, but obviously needs a a professional and a man who is personable, (or attractive) and capable of handling himself, but what I can hear, you've been busy with your research, great episode Tony, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2024
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Ayesha is a strong and purposeful woman, but obviously needs a a professional and a man who is personable, (or attractive) and capable of handling himself, but what I can hear, you've been busy with your research, great episode Tony, blessings Roy
Comment Written 13-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2024
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Thanks for these affirming comments, Roy. Greatly appreciated. All good wishes, Tony.
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Well done
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Oh, that's not good! I just hope Steve really can handle himself, because I think he's going to need to seeing as they are going to the bank. I feel so sorry for Ayesha, all her problems are mainly from liars and thugs. I hope the police here are honest. Well done, Tony. Excellent chapter. :) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2024
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Oh, that's not good! I just hope Steve really can handle himself, because I think he's going to need to seeing as they are going to the bank. I feel so sorry for Ayesha, all her problems are mainly from liars and thugs. I hope the police here are honest. Well done, Tony. Excellent chapter. :) Sandra xx
Comment Written 13-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2024
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Thanks for your review, Sandra. It sounds as though Ayesha might do well to leave the country! I thought the main danger in Sydney was from Funnel-web spiders. Perhaps I was mistaken! LOL
Comment from lyenochka
Oh no! But they might be headed to the police station now. And what if she finds out that the DNA of that hand found really did belong to her husband? Whoever is tailing Ayesha seems to be a real threat. Hope she can get back to Thailand soon.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2024
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Oh no! But they might be headed to the police station now. And what if she finds out that the DNA of that hand found really did belong to her husband? Whoever is tailing Ayesha seems to be a real threat. Hope she can get back to Thailand soon.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2024
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Thanks, Helen. It's certainly beginning to seem like Thailand might be safer, particularly now that Major Suttikul is behind bars. All good wishes, as always, Tony.
Comment from Sankey
Wow! A dramatic chapter. I actually looked for you, last night and here you are! This story is doing well. I hope Steve gets her where she wants to go. Keep up the great work.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2024
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Wow! A dramatic chapter. I actually looked for you, last night and here you are! This story is doing well. I hope Steve gets her where she wants to go. Keep up the great work.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2024
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Thanks, Geoffrey. I appreciate your continued encouragement and the sixth star. I hope you are faring well. All good wishes, Tony
Comment from Jacob1395
It really does seem as though things are heating up. Whoever Ayesha seems to turn to, it seems that more obstacles are put in her way. I could really sense her frustration in this piece, and it really was a tense moment when she had a panic attack. Another excellent chapter Tony, I really enjoyed reading it.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2024
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It really does seem as though things are heating up. Whoever Ayesha seems to turn to, it seems that more obstacles are put in her way. I could really sense her frustration in this piece, and it really was a tense moment when she had a panic attack. Another excellent chapter Tony, I really enjoyed reading it.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2024
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Thanks, Jacob. I appreciate your continued encouragement, and I'm glad you're still enjoying the story. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Ulla
Hi Tony, this is a great continuation to the story. Steve and Sarah are really helpful and appear to be on her side.
I only have one suggestion. I think some indication is needed for the change of scene: Jimmy noticed ... It took me a moment to understand we were suddenly somewhere else.
I'm looking forward to reading more. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2024
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Hi Tony, this is a great continuation to the story. Steve and Sarah are really helpful and appear to be on her side.
I only have one suggestion. I think some indication is needed for the change of scene: Jimmy noticed ... It took me a moment to understand we were suddenly somewhere else.
I'm looking forward to reading more. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 13-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2024
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Thanks, Ulla. I appreciate your continued encouragement, and I'm glad you're still enjoying the story. I've now added 'Across the street,' to indicate the change. Thanks for the suggestion. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from barbara.wilkey
And the Police Station is exactly where Ayesha is headed. I had really liked her with Bapit, but now I think I like her better with Steve. I can't wait to read more.
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reply by the author on 13-Mar-2024
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And the Police Station is exactly where Ayesha is headed. I had really liked her with Bapit, but now I think I like her better with Steve. I can't wait to read more.
Steve continued. 'A charter sets out how a charity operates. (continued,)
Comment Written 13-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2024
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Thanks, Jacob. I appreciate your continued encouragement, and I'm glad you're still enjoying the story. Yes, the comma is better. I've changed it. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from phill doran
Hello Tony,
I trust all is well with you. Thank you for the latest in the Ripping Yarn; much enjoyed.
I see you have used til
"...rather pleased with herself up til now...."
I think it is 'til (with an apostrophe) if you mean until (as in 'up to'), but then there's also "till" (as in 'to') which you may have meant but you've missed off the final l.
Everything else is dandy and I wouldn't change a word.
cheers
phill
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2024
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Hello Tony,
I trust all is well with you. Thank you for the latest in the Ripping Yarn; much enjoyed.
I see you have used til
"...rather pleased with herself up til now...."
I think it is 'til (with an apostrophe) if you mean until (as in 'up to'), but then there's also "till" (as in 'to') which you may have meant but you've missed off the final l.
Everything else is dandy and I wouldn't change a word.
cheers
phill
Comment Written 13-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2024
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Thanks, Phill. I appreciate your continued encouragement, and I'm glad you're still enjoying the story. Thanks, too, for the extra star and the extra 'l'. Best wishes, Tony