Living On The Edge
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Comment from Julie Helms
You better not get abducted to Mars overnight or anything. You cannot leave us hanging!
The Priest watched his friend walk away (priest)
Their visits had eased the pain of lying in bed when he much rather be on the streets (he'd much rather)
or for you athletic buffs, feel free to use the gym, the jogging path, or tennis courts are available for your enjoyment. (Re-read this sentence. It went awry)
And that ride of yours, well, that baby is going to mine." (Going to be)
Keep on writing!
Julie
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2024
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You better not get abducted to Mars overnight or anything. You cannot leave us hanging!
The Priest watched his friend walk away (priest)
Their visits had eased the pain of lying in bed when he much rather be on the streets (he'd much rather)
or for you athletic buffs, feel free to use the gym, the jogging path, or tennis courts are available for your enjoyment. (Re-read this sentence. It went awry)
And that ride of yours, well, that baby is going to mine." (Going to be)
Keep on writing!
Julie
Comment Written 11-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2024
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Fixed. I hope!
I wish I'd get abducted to somewhere. My family is going nuts again. So what else is new,,,lol Thanks for the review and the help. Smiles, Carol
PS Working on Chap 14 as we speak
Comment from royowen
So now Jake is working with Layla to find out where Alyssa, if only Alyssa knew where she was, but it's just as well as Troy knows. Alie might fall for him, and when she finds out...? Well done, I've got the baddies and the goodies sorted out now, beautifully written, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2024
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So now Jake is working with Layla to find out where Alyssa, if only Alyssa knew where she was, but it's just as well as Troy knows. Alie might fall for him, and when she finds out...? Well done, I've got the baddies and the goodies sorted out now, beautifully written, blessings Roy
Comment Written 11-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2024
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Good job! And the action begins....who is going to get whom.
Thanks for the review and I hope you enjoy the ride.
Smiles, Carol
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Most welcome
Comment from LJbutterfly
The suspense continues. Frankie's guys are ready. Jake is ready, but Layla is the wind card. Her inexperience could lead her into all kinds of dangerous directions. In addition to his job, Jake now has to worry about Layla getting herself killed.
I love the mystery you added about Alyssa beginning to remember small things. How will she react when she realizes who Troy is?
You really keep us on the edge of our seats. This book will be better than any you've written in the past. It has to be the contest winner.
Typo: with Jake, it felt different. I felt right. (It felt right.)
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2024
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The suspense continues. Frankie's guys are ready. Jake is ready, but Layla is the wind card. Her inexperience could lead her into all kinds of dangerous directions. In addition to his job, Jake now has to worry about Layla getting herself killed.
I love the mystery you added about Alyssa beginning to remember small things. How will she react when she realizes who Troy is?
You really keep us on the edge of our seats. This book will be better than any you've written in the past. It has to be the contest winner.
Typo: with Jake, it felt different. I felt right. (It felt right.)
Comment Written 11-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2024
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Cross the t and dot the i! lol Fixed and thank you!
Wow! Do you really like this one better than anything I've written? I thought it was good, but then I'm a bit bias. I can't believe I've posted 29,266 words in eight days...blows my mind. Guess we will be over 30,000 easily. Wish me luck when the time comes.
Thanks, Lorraine for the review and the kind comments. Off to finish the next chapter.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I wish I could give you a six for every chapter, Carol, I don't know how you hold it all together and write one or two chapters a time! Incredible. Now it looks to me as is both Jake and Layla and Troy and Allie are both stuck with women, sister's at that, and both men are worried the women will leave them by forces unknown ... or not. I think that Layla would use the knife if push comes to shove. I would, anyway. This is another excellend story, my dear friend. Love and hugs. Sandra xx
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2024
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I wish I could give you a six for every chapter, Carol, I don't know how you hold it all together and write one or two chapters a time! Incredible. Now it looks to me as is both Jake and Layla and Troy and Allie are both stuck with women, sister's at that, and both men are worried the women will leave them by forces unknown ... or not. I think that Layla would use the knife if push comes to shove. I would, anyway. This is another excellend story, my dear friend. Love and hugs. Sandra xx
Comment Written 11-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2024
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Truth be known, I don't know what has me so fired up...except not sleeping, but that's because I want to get up and write. I wasn't sure about this story at first and the contest, but it grabbed me and away we went. Counted last night 29,266 words..... guess I don't have to worry about that 30,000 mark. lol First post was Mar 3rd. Crazy!
Glad you are enjoying it. Smiles, hugs and love, Carol
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You have 21 days left. Will you make it? That is an awesome amount of words! Well done, my clever friend. xxxx
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With what's going on here, I might leave earlier than planned. I should wrap it up by the end of the week....maybe.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
No!! You can't leave wanting to know what's going to happen. There are so many bad guys, it's hard to keep them straight. I really like this story.
He laughed, "They have no shame." (laughed.)
Layla interrupted him. "You're (him,)
Layla laughed, "Not bad at all. (laughed.)
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reply by the author on 11-Mar-2024
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No!! You can't leave wanting to know what's going to happen. There are so many bad guys, it's hard to keep them straight. I really like this story.
He laughed, "They have no shame." (laughed.)
Layla interrupted him. "You're (him,)
Layla laughed, "Not bad at all. (laughed.)
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Comment Written 11-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2024
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Fixed - thank you!
Don't like where I ended it? I'm sorry! But glad that you are enjoying it. The end is getting closer. Not sure how many chapters but I hit 29,266 words today in 8 days. My first post was on the 3rd. Hard to believe! But it was easier than I thought when the story started rolling. Though I think when it's done I need to go back and add more description into it. I was so worried about not being able to do it..that I lost a few things. I counted last night and was shocked.
Thanks again, Barbara. You're always there to catch me.
Have a great day!
Smiles, Carol
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You're doing great!!!
Comment from patcelaw
Again, as of the other chapters, this is very well written it flows very well when it's read aloud, and it's an enjoyable, listening to it. I wish you the very best with the book and IAgain, as of the other chapters, this is very well written. It flows very well when it's read aloud and it's an enjoyable, listening to it. I wish you the very best with the book and I hope that it turns out just exactly like you want it to be. Patricia.
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reply by the author on 11-Mar-2024
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Again, as of the other chapters, this is very well written it flows very well when it's read aloud, and it's an enjoyable, listening to it. I wish you the very best with the book and IAgain, as of the other chapters, this is very well written. It flows very well when it's read aloud and it's an enjoyable, listening to it. I wish you the very best with the book and I hope that it turns out just exactly like you want it to be. Patricia.
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Comment Written 11-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2024
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Thank you for your review, Patricia. I appreciate it very much. Have a great day.
Smiles, Carol