Living On The Edge
Viewing comments for Chapter 6 "Living On The Edge - Chap 6"The blending of good and evil.
21 total reviews
Comment from Ric Myworld
Lord, Lord, Lord, you're taking me in so many directions that I don't know whether to scratch my watch or wind my butt. LOL. But there is never a boring minute with you. Great job! Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2024
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Lord, Lord, Lord, you're taking me in so many directions that I don't know whether to scratch my watch or wind my butt. LOL. But there is never a boring minute with you. Great job! Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 07-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2024
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I'll take that as a very much appreciated compliment, my sweet friend. I told you...making this one a real page turner from start to finish. Sometimes I can't even keep track of the bad guys!
Smiles, Carol
Comment from prettybluebirds
You are going to overload me with excitement. Your story is action-filled and holds this reader's attention. I will be anxiously awaiting the next chapter. Great writing.
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2024
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You are going to overload me with excitement. Your story is action-filled and holds this reader's attention. I will be anxiously awaiting the next chapter. Great writing.
Comment Written 07-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2024
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Guess what? I just posted Chapter 7. Don't feel you have to read it right this minute if you're tired. When you get time, I will appreciate it.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from patcelaw
Again, you have written a lovely chapter and as before all of your sentence structure is your paragraphing is very good. Your overall presentation is great and I really enjoyed listening to it. Have a good day and God bless. Patricia .
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2024
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Again, you have written a lovely chapter and as before all of your sentence structure is your paragraphing is very good. Your overall presentation is great and I really enjoyed listening to it. Have a good day and God bless. Patricia .
Comment Written 07-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2024
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Thank you for continuing to follow the story. I truly appreciate all your time and consideration for my efforts. Thanks again.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from karenina
There are a lot of characters! Maybe because this is a post every day I find I have to stop and reorder my thoughts as to who is (possibly) a good "guy" and which ones are the "goons." It will all come together and make sense ~ your posts always do. Now I don't know about Ryan...(how many motives does he have?)--and of course you leave us with a huge cliffhanger! Was Layla imagining her sister or was this (what do you call it?)-- A video phone chat? It must have been the latter if she (literally) saw the tattoo. I'll tune in tomorrow!
Karenina
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2024
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There are a lot of characters! Maybe because this is a post every day I find I have to stop and reorder my thoughts as to who is (possibly) a good "guy" and which ones are the "goons." It will all come together and make sense ~ your posts always do. Now I don't know about Ryan...(how many motives does he have?)--and of course you leave us with a huge cliffhanger! Was Layla imagining her sister or was this (what do you call it?)-- A video phone chat? It must have been the latter if she (literally) saw the tattoo. I'll tune in tomorrow!
Karenina
Comment Written 07-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2024
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It's been brought to my attention I left that part out about the phone chat...I need to fix it pronto. As for Ryan, he's a nerd who sees the chance to move up the line on Layla's coattails or should that say designer dress hems. LOL He's not someone to worry about.
I'm struggling to figure the plot out and make changes as I go, knowing it all has to come together by the end of the month.... and I'll be leaving for N.C. Duty is calling! I think we have all the characters in play now...but one never knows.
Smiles and hugs, Carol
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I'm seriously praying your trip to N.C. is some sort of rejuvenation for you...
If ever a woman deserves It's you!
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Carissa (my granddaughter and the 3 girls) have a bit of bumpy road at the moment, She is now store leader (training for manager) and of course, Tyson has decided to make her life uncomfortable again. BUT.... she's got days off and we have decided to get a motel or whatever and stay at the beach. My favorite spot!!!
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Ah! You had me at BEACH!
LOL
Comment from Terry Broxson
Carol, this is another good chapter. For some reason, I'm not liking Ryan. I will see how that plays out. I'm a little disappointed an undercover cop could be taken so easily. But we will how that plays out too. Excellent. Terry.
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2024
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Carol, this is another good chapter. For some reason, I'm not liking Ryan. I will see how that plays out. I'm a little disappointed an undercover cop could be taken so easily. But we will how that plays out too. Excellent. Terry.
Comment Written 07-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2024
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She's new and totally out of her league. She got a promotion because someone wanted to shut her up about Sandra's murder case. She's feisty but not prepared to fight the bad guys. But we count her out just yet.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Alyssa is in trouble, but Layla has at least has a small clue. I can't wait to read more of this. Alyssa is our heroine. She has to survive, right? I am really enjoying reading this. Good job.
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2024
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Alyssa is in trouble, but Layla has at least has a small clue. I can't wait to read more of this. Alyssa is our heroine. She has to survive, right? I am really enjoying reading this. Good job.
Comment Written 07-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2024
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Thanks for reviewing and for always enjoying the story. I assume the four was a mistake, I hope.
Smiles, Carol
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I can't envision any reason why I'd ever give you a four. Thank you for bringing to my attention. I have corrected it.
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It was okay if you did, but I'd hope in your kind teacher way, you'd have shown me where I strayed. Have a great day!
Love ya, Carol
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I would have explained everything. NO, it was me making a mistake. My finger likes to roll.
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easy to do! And because I feel comfortable with you, I didn't fear asking. I value our friendship.
Have a great day!
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If you ever again, and I'm sure you will, get a four from me, please bring it to my attention. It was a mistake.
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No problem... All is good with the world...at least between you and me.
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Amen!!!
Comment from Julie Helms
Ugh, a cliff hanger!! :-)
Good development of Layla in this chapter. Tension and mystery continued to build.
Yet tonight it paled to the parties (the idiom needs another word: paled by comparison, paled in comparison, paled next to)
These people had worked long hours and were extremely hard to get to today. (I do not understand the second half of the sentence.)
The last vision was her sister was eyes filled with fear (of her sister)
I think you need to mention that this was a FaceTime call. I was confused for a few sentences as to why Leila could see Alyssa.
Great work! Julie
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2024
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Ugh, a cliff hanger!! :-)
Good development of Layla in this chapter. Tension and mystery continued to build.
Yet tonight it paled to the parties (the idiom needs another word: paled by comparison, paled in comparison, paled next to)
These people had worked long hours and were extremely hard to get to today. (I do not understand the second half of the sentence.)
The last vision was her sister was eyes filled with fear (of her sister)
I think you need to mention that this was a FaceTime call. I was confused for a few sentences as to why Leila could see Alyssa.
Great work! Julie
Comment Written 07-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2024
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Funny how a missing word or two can mess up the whole thing. Thank you as always for setting me straight and I have happily correct my sentences and added what they needed. Always appreciate your keen eye.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
Wow, this story is intense! The tension builds steadily! From the phone call to the tension at Layla's birthday celebration. The pacing is excellent. I greatly enjoyed the story. Love the cliffhanger. It left me craving more! I'm eager to find out what happens next.
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2024
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Wow, this story is intense! The tension builds steadily! From the phone call to the tension at Layla's birthday celebration. The pacing is excellent. I greatly enjoyed the story. Love the cliffhanger. It left me craving more! I'm eager to find out what happens next.
Comment Written 07-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2024
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Good day, Michael.
I'm thrilled to see you today. I've shortened the chapter length. Let me know if you prefer this to the longer ones. It's a big story to get into a month. Glad you are enjoying it. Cliffhangers are my specialty.... Thanks so much.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from royowen
Wow, on her day of days Layla is beset by some uncertainatirecandcsuddenly the day seems to get suddenly worse. After her friend Diane covers for her in the bathroom, with Ryan looking and concerned, a man with a dreaded tattoo, she's uncannily aware of, accosts, what now? Beautifully written, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2024
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Wow, on her day of days Layla is beset by some uncertainatirecandcsuddenly the day seems to get suddenly worse. After her friend Diane covers for her in the bathroom, with Ryan looking and concerned, a man with a dreaded tattoo, she's uncannily aware of, accosts, what now? Beautifully written, blessings Roy
Comment Written 07-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2024
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Like fireworks being set off and and the rain poured down...what a fizzle! LOL People don't know which way to go....Thanks so much for the review.
Smiles, Carol
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Most welcome
Comment from BethShelby
Wow! another of cliff hangers. Don't keep us waiting long. I love you stories. You can build excitment like no one else out there. Have a wonderful day and keep writing.
Beth
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2024
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Wow! another of cliff hangers. Don't keep us waiting long. I love you stories. You can build excitment like no one else out there. Have a wonderful day and keep writing.
Beth
Comment Written 07-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2024
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Thank you, Beth...You are forever kind. Did you prefer the shorter chapter or is it still too long? It seems as if I am on a roll in writing, but my followers are thinning. Is it the story, the length or something else?
Have a great day and thank you for reading.
Smiles, Carol
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As far as I'm concerted, the longer the better. I think everyone much be behind with full in boxes. i can't get caught up but I read your's first.
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I feel so special. Thank you!
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I agree...it's like reading a book. If I'm hooked at the end of a chapter, I want to turn the page and read more.