At Home in Mississippi
Viewing comments for Chapter 3 "A Desire For Something More"Growing up in the 40 and 50 in MIssissippi
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Comment from patcelaw
This is a very well written story and I enjoyed listening to it. It just points out the difficulties that people had in those days in the 1930s when we were still in the best of depression. I am sure that we on this family as well. Patricia.
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2024
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This is a very well written story and I enjoyed listening to it. It just points out the difficulties that people had in those days in the 1930s when we were still in the best of depression. I am sure that we on this family as well. Patricia.
Comment Written 02-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2024
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Thank you Patricia. I'm so glad you like my story.
Beth
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
This chapter is well constructed, fitting neatly into a very readable word count. The characters are coming to life nicely and credit to your excellent dialogue for contributing to that. Also, the dream-like sequence provides a pleasing contrast to the factual detail preceding it. I like Lucille, especially when she stands up to Bully Boy! Small edit - She would just have to start praying about (i)t. An excellent read, Beth. Debbie
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2024
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This chapter is well constructed, fitting neatly into a very readable word count. The characters are coming to life nicely and credit to your excellent dialogue for contributing to that. Also, the dream-like sequence provides a pleasing contrast to the factual detail preceding it. I like Lucille, especially when she stands up to Bully Boy! Small edit - She would just have to start praying about (i)t. An excellent read, Beth. Debbie
Comment Written 02-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2024
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Thank you Debbie. I'm so glad you like this. Yes, it is good thing Lucille can stand up to Glover. Otherwise she would have had a miserable 62 years with him. LOL
Comment from damommy
Glover sounds like a control freak. I can't imagine what will happen when he finds out Lucille is pregnant. I like the way she learned to drive on her own. It shows she has a mind of her own.
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2024
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Glover sounds like a control freak. I can't imagine what will happen when he finds out Lucille is pregnant. I like the way she learned to drive on her own. It shows she has a mind of her own.
Comment Written 02-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2024
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You are right he was a control freak. It would be a bone of contention for them but Lucille was going to allow her self to be totally controled.
Beth
Comment from Ben Colder
I think in those days people had various names for unusual births and how babies looked when born. My mother was what they call a blue baby, Blue as the sky some said. I like your take of the older birth days. It seems to make it more appreciative. Good one, Beth
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2024
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I think in those days people had various names for unusual births and how babies looked when born. My mother was what they call a blue baby, Blue as the sky some said. I like your take of the older birth days. It seems to make it more appreciative. Good one, Beth
Comment Written 02-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2024
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Babies do look pale or flue before they start breathing air that turned their bloor read. The two grandchildren I say as they were born looked that way too. I thought they dead until people startedf rubbing them and got them breathing. They had a midwife rather than a doctor and the baby came before she got there for the last one.
Comment from Jeano
I really liked this, and especially the time frame. Your characters are likable and you capture their personalities very well. With movies and books, I prefer historical non-fiction, and I'm enjoying this chapter of your story. I see you refer to this as 'likely the third chapter'. Will you be posting more of this story or is this a stand alone entry?
I noticed a typo in the line that begins with "I'm just saying.... you have Pspa for Papa. I hope you accept 'editing' and are not offended. Not my intention. Looking forward to more of your writing.
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2024
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I really liked this, and especially the time frame. Your characters are likable and you capture their personalities very well. With movies and books, I prefer historical non-fiction, and I'm enjoying this chapter of your story. I see you refer to this as 'likely the third chapter'. Will you be posting more of this story or is this a stand alone entry?
I noticed a typo in the line that begins with "I'm just saying.... you have Pspa for Papa. I hope you accept 'editing' and are not offended. Not my intention. Looking forward to more of your writing.
Comment Written 02-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2024
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Thank you Jeano, I'm so glad you like it. Yes I will be writing more the one before this one is still active called, Crisis with the mortgage money. I think you'd like it. The first one was posted as first chapter for a contest.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I am guessing Lucille is pregnant but what will Grover think about this? I sure hope he isn't too disappointed. I do really like this story.
"Aunt Lucille do you have any cake for me?" (comma after 'Lucille,' she's being addressed)
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reply by the author on 02-Feb-2024
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I am guessing Lucille is pregnant but what will Grover think about this? I sure hope he isn't too disappointed. I do really like this story.
"Aunt Lucille do you have any cake for me?" (comma after 'Lucille,' she's being addressed)
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Comment Written 02-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2024
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Thank you Barbara, I really appreciate the review and comments. I'm sure Glover was shocked when he found out but what could he do?
Comment from Begin Again
Wow! The scenes you paint with your words are so vivid, Beth. I can see it all unfolding. You are doing so well with revealing your story and it's enjoyable to read. Well done!
Smiles, Carol
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reply by the author on 02-Feb-2024
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Wow! The scenes you paint with your words are so vivid, Beth. I can see it all unfolding. You are doing so well with revealing your story and it's enjoyable to read. Well done!
Smiles, Carol
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Comment Written 02-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2024
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Thank you Carol, I appreciate you saying that. I'm trying to bring back to like those things I heard from my mother. She tended to be very dramatic with the stories she told.
Beth
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You've done a terrific job!