2023 Gypsy's Tanka
Viewing comments for Chapter 69 "~ In Your Absence ~"-
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Comment from lyenochka
Beautiful way to portray yearning and missing someone. I like how you chose the sky for the eyes and the sensation of touch of the wind and the sea as substitutions for the absent one.
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2023
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Beautiful way to portray yearning and missing someone. I like how you chose the sky for the eyes and the sensation of touch of the wind and the sea as substitutions for the absent one.
Comment Written 08-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2023
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Thank you, big sister. I appreciate your kind and helpful review.
Love,
Marival
Comment from Alexandra Trovato
This is excellent! I think that is beautiful, whatever you added or cut, I wouldn't know if I hadn't read your Note. It flows well and it expresses authentic feelings of longing, but it also holds hope.
Best wishes,
Alexan
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2023
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This is excellent! I think that is beautiful, whatever you added or cut, I wouldn't know if I hadn't read your Note. It flows well and it expresses authentic feelings of longing, but it also holds hope.
Best wishes,
Alexan
Comment Written 08-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2023
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Thank you, Alexan, I appreciate that you took the time to read and review my poem. Have a wonderful day (*=*)
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Wendyanne
What a truly beautiful piece of well written poetry. You have used some vividly descriptive imagery throughout this tanka and the presentation is stunning!!!
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What a truly beautiful piece of well written poetry. You have used some vividly descriptive imagery throughout this tanka and the presentation is stunning!!!
Comment Written 08-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2023
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Thank you, Wendy (*=*) you are very kind.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from shelley kaye
that last pic is cool - love the reflection! and it goes great with your well-chosen words.
great imagery and smooth flow
thank you for sharing
shelley :)
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that last pic is cool - love the reflection! and it goes great with your well-chosen words.
great imagery and smooth flow
thank you for sharing
shelley :)
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Comment Written 08-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2023
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Thank you, Shelley, I appreciate that you took the time to read and review my poem. Have a wonderful day (*=*)
Gypsy hugs
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Yearning for a lost lover makes for great poetry. The words you chose are perfect for evoking this emotion. I could feel it in my heart. Once again, a perfect presentation.
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Yearning for a lost lover makes for great poetry. The words you chose are perfect for evoking this emotion. I could feel it in my heart. Once again, a perfect presentation.
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Comment Written 08-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2023
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Thank you, Barbara, I appreciate that you took the time to read and review my poem. Have a wonderful day (*=*)
Gypsy hugs
