Comment from Katie Mae Dead

Excellent

I'm sure you've shamed more than 1 woman on this site Paul. Sorry for your predicament if this is a true story.

Excellent pentameter even though a sentace or two have more than 10 syllables in it.
I have a feeling EBB would have been delightfully amused.
Great job and very creative.
Luv&stuff,
Katiemaedead

 Comment Written 25-Oct-2023

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reply by the author on 25-Oct-2023

Thanks for the review, Katie Mae. I changed the offending line with the extra beat. The Lady MacBeth line has the proper number of beats, but it is a little awkward. Not a true story for me, but I'm sure it is true for some.

Comment from Navada

Excellent

I thoroughly enjoyed this! Kudos for combining your chosen poetic form with a nice dose of humour, complete with Shakespearean references for good measure. The final couplet, in particular, made me smile. Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 25-Oct-2023

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reply by the author on 25-Oct-2023

Thanks, Navada. The love in this poem is the love of money.

Comment from karenina

Excellent

Oh man... This love accrues a lot of interest! Liz Browning didn't have to worry about Experian scores etc.

Clever parody...

Smart of you to take a different tact on the "Love Poem!"

Karenina

 Comment Written 24-Oct-2023

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reply by the author on 25-Oct-2023

Thanks, Karenina. I look for really good results or really bad results.

reply by karenina on 25-Oct-2023

Let's hope for the good!

Comment from Douglas Goff

Excellent

Ha! Bitter much, Paul. Probably should not have, but I did laugh at this.

My ex ran up so many credit cards behind my back. It was brutal when the divorce court ordered me to pay them and gave her all the things she had bought so.... Been there done that!

Pretty girl in the picture by the way.
D

 Comment Written 24-Oct-2023

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reply by the author on 25-Oct-2023

Sorry for your loss, Doug.

reply by Douglas Goff on 25-Oct-2023

Just stuff, my friend.

Comment from Alexandra Trovato

Excellent

This is excellent and creative writing for the challenge. It's unique and clever. Your presentation is very good. You use expressive words and colorful imagery that will draw in a readers to your work.

Best wishes,

Alexandra

 Comment Written 24-Oct-2023

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reply by the author on 25-Oct-2023

Thanks, Alexandra. I hope I don't get accused of plagiarism.

Comment from Pearl Edwards

Excellent

Yes, it is very humourous Paul, it gave me a few chuckles. Certainly a different topic for the love poem challenge. I must say all that shopping was tiring, LOL.
Well written,
Valda

 Comment Written 24-Oct-2023

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reply by the author on 25-Oct-2023

Thanks, Valda. Glad I could give you a few chuckles.

Comment from dragonpoet

Excellent

Hi Paul,
This is a nicely told short story using MacBeth as a base to put the story in modern day terms. This is a woman who married for money and not for love. I don't see why he just didn't divorce her and also write her out of his will.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Good luck in the contest.
Have a good rest of the week.
Joan

 Comment Written 24-Oct-2023

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reply by the author on 24-Oct-2023

Thanks, Joan. You know how some women are. She was probably very good at pulling the wool over his eyes in the beginning, before he caught on to what she was up to.

reply by dragonpoet on 24-Oct-2023

You're welcome, Paul. I sometimes wonder if there are men like this, too. There must be some that marry for money or power and not love.
Joan

Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose

Excellent

Interesting entry for the Love Poem Poetry Contest.

It sounds like the lady only loves money. That's terrible and very superficial. It's nothing like the original poem by Elizabeth Barrett Browning.

 Comment Written 24-Oct-2023

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reply by the author on 24-Oct-2023

Thanks for the review, Gypsy. Liz is probably turning over in her grave.

reply by Gypsy Blue Rose on 25-Oct-2023

LoL

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

Oh my! No wonder you apologize to Elizabeth Barrett Browning. This seems to be more of an Anti-Love poem and the addressee certainly does not know what love is and is rightfully excluded from the will and hopefully knows this to protect the narrator's life.

 Comment Written 24-Oct-2023

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reply by the author on 24-Oct-2023

Thanks for the review, Helen. EBB will probably have a few words for me when we meet in the afterlife.

reply by lyenochka on 24-Oct-2023

I'm sure she is smiling.

Comment from Mary Vigasin

Excellent

I enjoyed this clever parody of Elizabeth Barrett Browning's poem. Great job. Of course, in her time, if credit cards were around, her writing may be different.
What makes this so good is that it is so much different than an expected love poem.
Good luck in the contest.
Best wishes,
Mary

 Comment Written 24-Oct-2023

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reply by the author on 24-Oct-2023

Thanks, Mary. Hopefully this little twist on the prompt will get some attention.