Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

Making friends crosses all age boundaries and it sounds like this lady and you had a special bond. A fine poem, well rhymed and metered and I enjoyed the sentiments here, good luck with the contest, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 14-Sep-2023

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reply by the author on 14-Sep-2023

Thank you Dolly, She was someone I'll never forget. We did have a special bond.

Comment from Boogienights

Excellent

This is one of the best and most uplifting friendship poems that I've read. How wonderful that you found a friend that needed you and who came when you needed her. This one has my vote.

 Comment Written 14-Sep-2023

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reply by the author on 14-Sep-2023

Thank you so much for this excellent review. I really appreciat you kind words. I'm glad you like the poem.

Comment from Paul Manton

Excellent

This is an absolutely delightful poem from a grown up little girl, who had such an important friendship with a lovely old lady who became a 'family friend'.
I remember as a young man finding old ladies totally fascinating - for the wonderful tales they would tell. They were my first true historians - several of my mother's elderly sisters, but also 'maiden aunts' when on holiday in a variety of hotels. All of them genteel and charming - probably smelling of lavender too.

Rhyming couplets in quatrains using iambic tetrameter. Perfect. [Worth removing the word 'with' in v.2 line 2, to make it scan] The verse moves along effortlessly and is a complete delight as a story.

Thank you for this lovely memory.

Paul

 Comment Written 14-Sep-2023

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reply by the author on 14-Sep-2023

Thank you Paul. I see what your mean about the line. It had a extra syllable. I glad you like my poem and It seems we have something in common as you found older ladies made good friends.

reply by Paul Manton on 14-Sep-2023

You're welcome.
Best wishes, Paul

Comment from Douglas Goff

Excellent

I think this is quite wonderful. The elderly have much to offer to children. Just ask grandparents!

The color, font, and picture were splendid. This piece just makes the reader feel good. Thanks for sharing this!
D

 Comment Written 13-Sep-2023

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reply by the author on 14-Sep-2023

Thank you Douglas. I really appreciate the review. I'm glad you like it.

Comment from walk.write.reflect

Excellent

It warms my heart to imagine the special bond between the sweet little girl and her older friend. Their connection is truly something unique and beautiful. Thank you for sharing this heartwarming poem.
Best wishes in the contest.
Beat Regards.


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 Comment Written 13-Sep-2023

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reply by the author on 13-Sep-2023

Thank you for the nice review. I'm so glad you like the poem. She was a great friend when we both could use a friend.

Comment from JSD

Excellent

'They're in town'? 'I knew I'd have'? The first might have been intentional.

But your rhyme and rhythm are immaculate. This is sweet and gentle and such a happy poem. You tell your tale with innocence and light. It should win, surely.

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 Comment Written 13-Sep-2023

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reply by the author on 13-Sep-2023

Thank you so much, John. I appreciate you seeing the spots that needed work. This is an excellent review. I'm glad you like my poem.