Finding Annie
A little girl lost31 total reviews
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
What a sad story. Poor baby. I was confused so I read it twice. So the baby is in a jar? How scary for you. The end was surprising... good twist. Well done!
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2023
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What a sad story. Poor baby. I was confused so I read it twice. So the baby is in a jar? How scary for you. The end was surprising... good twist. Well done!
Comment Written 11-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2023
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The baby is in the jar. Thank you for your review and kindness.
Best wishes,
Mary
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Very nicely done. Good, error-free writing.
I read it twice trying to figure out whether Annie is the baby in the jar, or a seven year old 5th child.
Yet another very good reason for me not to drink. (Dad's manner of telling things to kids too young.)
Best wishes.
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2023
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Very nicely done. Good, error-free writing.
I read it twice trying to figure out whether Annie is the baby in the jar, or a seven year old 5th child.
Yet another very good reason for me not to drink. (Dad's manner of telling things to kids too young.)
Best wishes.
Comment Written 10-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2023
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Annie is the baby in the jar and would have been the fifth child.
I was seven and believed what my mother's friend told me.
Thank you Wayne, I appreciate you review.
My best wishes,
Mary
Comment from pome lover
Good heavens, what a sad story. You did fool me into thinking she was alive, but for some reason, her Pa wouldn't let her go outside to play, then, the next thing I knew, I thought she had (somehow) been put in a jar as a specimen. I have to say, this is indeed, an original way to write what happened.
Katharine
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2023
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Good heavens, what a sad story. You did fool me into thinking she was alive, but for some reason, her Pa wouldn't let her go outside to play, then, the next thing I knew, I thought she had (somehow) been put in a jar as a specimen. I have to say, this is indeed, an original way to write what happened.
Katharine
Comment Written 10-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2023
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Thank you Katharine for your review and kind words. I thought by using Annie's "voice" it would be better story than just lying out what happened to a stillborn baby.
Best wishes and regards,
Mary
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Wow, such a sad story with a sad ending. I got the story totally wrong until I've read your notes. Sorry for your loss, time might attenuate the pain, but they will be both remembered.
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2023
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Wow, such a sad story with a sad ending. I got the story totally wrong until I've read your notes. Sorry for your loss, time might attenuate the pain, but they will be both remembered.
Comment Written 10-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2023
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Thank you. I appreciate your review and kind words.
Best wishes
Mary
Comment from jim vecchio
Thank you so much for taking a very tender and tragic situation and "writing it out". Very sad. Perhaps the saddest sight i have ever seen was the burial of a tiny infant. May God Bless you in your writing!
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2023
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Thank you so much for taking a very tender and tragic situation and "writing it out". Very sad. Perhaps the saddest sight i have ever seen was the burial of a tiny infant. May God Bless you in your writing!
Comment Written 10-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2023
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Thank you, Jim. I truly appreciate your kindness and blessings.
Blessings,
Mary
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And Blessings back to you!
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And much Blessings to you!
Comment from Teri7
This is a very well written story you have penned. You used very good descriptive words and very good imagery with your words too. It made me feel sad as I read about little Annie. Thank you for your notes! love and blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2023
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This is a very well written story you have penned. You used very good descriptive words and very good imagery with your words too. It made me feel sad as I read about little Annie. Thank you for your notes! love and blessings, Teri
Comment Written 10-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2023
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Thank you Teri, I appreciated your kind words and review.
My very best wishes,
Mary
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You are so much my friend! love and blessings, Teri
Comment from JSD
Oh, such a sad tale. Written with sensitivity and tenderness. Quite painful for the reader but I hope that it helped you to write it. Thank you.
John
"Seeing through a glass darkly."
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2023
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Oh, such a sad tale. Written with sensitivity and tenderness. Quite painful for the reader but I hope that it helped you to write it. Thank you.
John
"Seeing through a glass darkly."
Comment Written 10-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2023
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Thank you John for your review and kindness. It is appreciated.
Best wishes,
Mary
Comment from Paul Manton
Dear Mary, I read this unsettling poem along with your notes, in a kind of amazed shock - but I was left uncertain as to the cause and manner of the death of the baby: I assume that this wasn't infanticide - but has she died at birth, or was the mother pregnant at the time, Annie being a post-mortem delivery? Either way, the story is very tragic - and the last two lines are at least macabre - if not, horrifying.
I am confused even more by the names you give - if Annie is telling this story, is 'little Annie' the same person? The narrative seems to switch around, so if you read it again carefully, check for ambiguities and possible misunderstandings, in case you could clarify it a little.
But it is a striking piece of writing - especially the ending, which will give people nightmares for some time to come.
Thank you.
Paul
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2023
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Dear Mary, I read this unsettling poem along with your notes, in a kind of amazed shock - but I was left uncertain as to the cause and manner of the death of the baby: I assume that this wasn't infanticide - but has she died at birth, or was the mother pregnant at the time, Annie being a post-mortem delivery? Either way, the story is very tragic - and the last two lines are at least macabre - if not, horrifying.
I am confused even more by the names you give - if Annie is telling this story, is 'little Annie' the same person? The narrative seems to switch around, so if you read it again carefully, check for ambiguities and possible misunderstandings, in case you could clarify it a little.
But it is a striking piece of writing - especially the ending, which will give people nightmares for some time to come.
Thank you.
Paul
Comment Written 10-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2023
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The baby was stillborn from lack of oxygen. My mother suffered a massive stroke from eclampsia which endangers pregnant women. The baby was full-term. The story is all told by Annie.
Thank you for your review.
Best wishes,
Mary
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Thank you for clearing that up, Mary.
Think about including those facts in your notes, to help people understand the poem.
You said this was a fiction? If not, what a terrible tragedy.
I am so sorry.
Paul
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I said it was fiction because I have the fetus as the story teller.
Mary
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Thank you, Mary. You are very brave.
Comment from GWHARGIS
This story was so heart-rending and beautiful. I got chills reading it, but almost cried when I read the author notes. So very sad. I did like the first person view. I could feel her more. Knew her wants and thoughts. Very moving. Gretchen
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2023
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This story was so heart-rending and beautiful. I got chills reading it, but almost cried when I read the author notes. So very sad. I did like the first person view. I could feel her more. Knew her wants and thoughts. Very moving. Gretchen
Comment Written 09-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2023
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Thank you Gretchen for the review and your kindness.
I am grateful for the six stars.
Best wishes,
Mary
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
I never saw this ending coming! What an incredible story you tell, based on real life but, of course, fictional. I could find nothing of fault here, either in your story or grammatical.
Very nicely done, and the picture is perfect.
Pam
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2023
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I never saw this ending coming! What an incredible story you tell, based on real life but, of course, fictional. I could find nothing of fault here, either in your story or grammatical.
Very nicely done, and the picture is perfect.
Pam
Comment Written 09-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2023
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Thank you Pam for your review and the six stars. I am truly grateful.
Best wishes,
Mary