Comment from jake cosmos aller

Good

cool ode to autumn my favorite time of the year. Perhaps because I am an October baby born just before Halloween, the autumn always seemed like a time of renewal for me.

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 Comment Written 17-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 18-Apr-2023

Thank you! :)

Comment from K.I. Betancur

Excellent

Wonderful work! Really embodies the spirit of autumn.

You've brought the memories of Autumn back to life in this rainy Spring.

Thank you for sharing!

 Comment Written 17-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 18-Apr-2023

Thank you very much!

Comment from shelley kaye

Excellent

nice autumn haiku
very imagistic word choices
and smooth flow

one suggestion i have is maybe try the brown background with an orange-ish font or a beige font... just a thought ;)


thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest
shelley :)

 Comment Written 17-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 18-Apr-2023

Thank you, Shelley! Truly appreciated

Comment from dragonpoet

Excellent

Hi,
This is a nice concise ode to Autumn. Pumpkins are a good sign of the season for they are used for Halloween, Thanksgiving and Christmas, in decorations and pies. I like the the color scheme matches the pumpkin theme. I also like that you include what looks like either cottonwood or dandelions seed fluffs,
Keep writing and stay healthy
Good luck in the contest.
Joan

 Comment Written 17-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 18-Apr-2023

Thank you, Joan!

reply by dragonpoet on 18-Apr-2023

You're welcome.
Joan

Comment from Sally Law

Excellent

I can hardly wait for autumn to come because of pumpkin spice coffee and pumpkin spice candles. I adore the scent and sometimes just bake a pie just so I can smell it. Marvelous poem in 5-7-5 form.

Sending you my best today is always, and my very best for the upcoming contest.
Sally :))

 Comment Written 17-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 18-Apr-2023

Thank you again, Sally!
Xoxo
Jess

Comment from Ulla

Excellent

I loved this ode to autumn. It's a wonderfully written 7-5-7 poem for the contest.
To be honest, autumn couldn't be further from my thought, spring being the dominant season here. Good luck. All best, Ulla:)))

 Comment Written 17-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 17-Apr-2023

Thank you, Ulla!

Comment from Kerry Foley

Excellent

Hello there my friend. I could smell the enticing sense of autumn in your words.

Fantastic job---
Great photo and fonts to add great splash!

good luck!


--- Kerry

 Comment Written 17-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 17-Apr-2023

Thank you so much, Kerry!

Comment from Heather Knight

Excellent

I love the alliterative title you've chosen for your poem, the presentation and the poem itself.
I can almost smell the pumpkin spice in the air.
Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 17-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 17-Apr-2023

Thank you very much, Heather!

Comment from Rosemary Everson1

Excellent

Your 5, 7, 5 poem is beautifully written. The image looks like tiny, crystallized snowflakes falling down. It is difficult to write about August when we are only in April.

 Comment Written 17-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 17-Apr-2023

Thank you, I appreciate your review!

Comment from Brandon Clark

Exceptional

Perfect for the prompt. As I read, I double checked the syllable count, ran it through an online syllable counter and looked up the words on Dictionary.com to ensure the syllables. You nailed it!!!

Just one consideration:

morning aroma
[fills the] air with pumpkin spice- (perfumes air with pumpkin spice-)
the scent of autumn

I try to critique contest entries as if I were voting. The above suggestion would make it standout a bit more, maybe slightly more unique.

I double-check the syllables on my suggestion as well, and it is 7 in that form.

Great job and I only wish you the very best in the contest!!
Brandon

 Comment Written 17-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 17-Apr-2023

Brandon, that's an excellent suggestion!! I will revise. Thank you so much for your insight and review!