The Return
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Comment from alexisleech
Yippee! The toe-rag has been shut-up at last, but sadly, not before he'd spilled the beans. As always, your visuals are superb. I particularly like 'his puffed-out cheeks turned the same colour as his purple bulbous nose.' That certainly created a grotesque image in my head. So, what next? The tension is building, and we know Meg/Margot will now be in danger.
I can't wait to read on to find out!
Alexis xxx
reply by the author on 24-May-2022
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Yippee! The toe-rag has been shut-up at last, but sadly, not before he'd spilled the beans. As always, your visuals are superb. I particularly like 'his puffed-out cheeks turned the same colour as his purple bulbous nose.' That certainly created a grotesque image in my head. So, what next? The tension is building, and we know Meg/Margot will now be in danger.
I can't wait to read on to find out!
Alexis xxx
Comment Written 24-May-2022
reply by the author on 24-May-2022
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Aw, thank you so much, Alexis, I'm so over the moon that you enjoyed this part. It's all heading to the big one!! A few chapters to go, but not many!! Thank you for the golden star, my lovely friend. Sending you a humongous hug!! Chat later. xxxx Sandra xxx
Comment from dmt1967
For some reason, Richard didn't feel the slightest bit in awe of the man towering above him. Instead, he forced his leaden arm to move, pick up his glass, and (take) a sip. (took)
Before he could put his glass back on the table, Lord Brandon grabbed the front of Richard's (shirt), and pulled him out of his chair, causing Richard's brandy to splosh down his (shirt). Overuse. Makes sentence sound jerky. (Garment) or change one to another name for shirt.
It hadn't registered at the time--it did (no) Think you mean (now.)
Another great page turner and thank you for sharing. Have a great weekend.
reply by the author on 24-May-2022
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For some reason, Richard didn't feel the slightest bit in awe of the man towering above him. Instead, he forced his leaden arm to move, pick up his glass, and (take) a sip. (took)
Before he could put his glass back on the table, Lord Brandon grabbed the front of Richard's (shirt), and pulled him out of his chair, causing Richard's brandy to splosh down his (shirt). Overuse. Makes sentence sound jerky. (Garment) or change one to another name for shirt.
It hadn't registered at the time--it did (no) Think you mean (now.)
Another great page turner and thank you for sharing. Have a great weekend.
Comment Written 24-May-2022
reply by the author on 24-May-2022
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Hi Jackie, thanks so much for this helpful review. I think the end of the, where is stopped at no... was where I had made some edits and copied and pasted over with the end missing! I'm so pleased you spotted it. And the other two you picked up on, I've changed the tense in take to took. That last one, I've changed the sentence to take out one 'shirt' to read...
Before he could put his glass back on the table, Lord Brandon grabbed the lapels of Richard?s jacket, and pulled him out of his chair causing Richard's brandy to splash down his shirt.
Thanks, my friend, I really appreciated the help. Warm hugs, Sandra xx
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
I enjoy the read, over the years, your novel is becoming a pleasant read, I enjoyed the reading of this chapter 21, curiosity continues with ending of this chapter; Richard remembered before losing consciousness; he remembered her strange face smiling at him at the dinner table, but how could he forget the other mystery; well said, well done, write, write and post more, share god speed more; encourage positively, forgive errors, b a theist good (rare) author-litterateur, love FS; UG Sick; MT u H; Alcreator Litt Dear (DR)
reply by the author on 24-May-2022
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I enjoy the read, over the years, your novel is becoming a pleasant read, I enjoyed the reading of this chapter 21, curiosity continues with ending of this chapter; Richard remembered before losing consciousness; he remembered her strange face smiling at him at the dinner table, but how could he forget the other mystery; well said, well done, write, write and post more, share god speed more; encourage positively, forgive errors, b a theist good (rare) author-litterateur, love FS; UG Sick; MT u H; Alcreator Litt Dear (DR)
Comment Written 23-May-2022
reply by the author on 24-May-2022
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Thank you so much for another great review, Alcreator Litt Dear, I really appreciate your input. Have a lovely day, my friend. :)) Sandra xx
Comment from rspoet
Hello Sandra,
Another marvelous chapter in the story.
It seems the line between Margot and Meg is blurring with each chapter.
And the letter, well, some things are more important than a mere letter
upon which the future depends. LOL
Richard won't be missed. :) Now the real evil one is clearly Gwendolyn.
Plus Lord Brandon, of course. So many villains to choose from.
One question. Exactly where is Meg while Margot steal Miles away from her.
Great chapter. Agatha would be pleased.
Best wishes.
Robert
reply by the author on 24-May-2022
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Hello Sandra,
Another marvelous chapter in the story.
It seems the line between Margot and Meg is blurring with each chapter.
And the letter, well, some things are more important than a mere letter
upon which the future depends. LOL
Richard won't be missed. :) Now the real evil one is clearly Gwendolyn.
Plus Lord Brandon, of course. So many villains to choose from.
One question. Exactly where is Meg while Margot steal Miles away from her.
Great chapter. Agatha would be pleased.
Best wishes.
Robert
Comment Written 23-May-2022
reply by the author on 24-May-2022
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Thank you so much for another lovely review, Robert, and for this golden star. Now, cast your mind back to when Veronica was taken back in time to live in Mrs Humphries' body and first met Mildred. Mrs Humphries was still alive when Veronica was placed inside her and vaguely aware of Veronica's pressence. In this book, Meg will keep the relevent memories that Margot has got up to, but she won't know she'd been taken over by someone from another timeline. I think I must have been time traveler, even Eric's books take him to different times and places. :))
Gwendolyn isn't really a villian, she was just someone who had been abused by the two main men in her life. Now she's free! Good on her!! Lol
The rest of the mystery will unravel soon. I love how you liken me to Agatha!!! Lol. Thanks again, my friend, for this great review. Warm hugs, Sandra xx
Comment from write hand blue
Hi Sandra, I haven't read much of your writings recently so I can only comment on the little I've read here. The scene is well set in the drawing room, with characters that interact with one another as the story advances.
Then poor Richard is poisoned. Well written, showing tons of promise.
Mel xx
reply by the author on 23-May-2022
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Hi Sandra, I haven't read much of your writings recently so I can only comment on the little I've read here. The scene is well set in the drawing room, with characters that interact with one another as the story advances.
Then poor Richard is poisoned. Well written, showing tons of promise.
Mel xx
Comment Written 23-May-2022
reply by the author on 23-May-2022
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Thank you so much for reading this chapter, Mel, that is so nice of you. I don't think too many people will miss Richard. He wasn't a nice man. I'm glad you enjoyed this part. Warm hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra
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My pleasure...
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this post with us. I enjoyed reading. You have done another great job of writing. I really like the story line.
After the waiter had left them, Richard continued. 'I've just learnt that my dear sister, (comma after 'continued')
reply by the author on 23-May-2022
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Thank you for sharing this post with us. I enjoyed reading. You have done another great job of writing. I really like the story line.
After the waiter had left them, Richard continued. 'I've just learnt that my dear sister, (comma after 'continued')
Comment Written 23-May-2022
reply by the author on 23-May-2022
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Thanks so much, Barbara, for this lovely review, and the six stars. I'm so pleased you enjoyed it. And thanks for pointing that error our. I'll sort it now before I go to bed. Warm hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra
Comment from Ric Myworld
Oh, no, has Richard been poisoned at dinner? Not a great place to die, rather than enjoying all those sumptuous delights. LOL. Thanks for sharing another outstanding chapter.
reply by the author on 23-May-2022
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Oh, no, has Richard been poisoned at dinner? Not a great place to die, rather than enjoying all those sumptuous delights. LOL. Thanks for sharing another outstanding chapter.
Comment Written 23-May-2022
reply by the author on 23-May-2022
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He should have been a nicer husband!! Lol. Now Gwendolyn can enjoy her life. Perhaps with the butler?? :))
Thanks so much for this lovely review, my friend, I really appreciate you. :) Sandra xxx
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I sure like the way you think! LOL. Your writing is always a pleasure, along with your comments. :-)
Comment from nancy_e_davis
Oh my, it looks like Richard is done for. At least he can rest easy in the fact he got his licks in and stirred up a lot of trouble in Lord Brandon's life and unhappiness in the lives of Meg and Miles. Well done, Sandra! Nancy XXX
reply by the author on 23-May-2022
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Oh my, it looks like Richard is done for. At least he can rest easy in the fact he got his licks in and stirred up a lot of trouble in Lord Brandon's life and unhappiness in the lives of Meg and Miles. Well done, Sandra! Nancy XXX
Comment Written 23-May-2022
reply by the author on 23-May-2022
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Yes, Richard has been taken out of the 'who dunnit?' mystery. Not many chapters left, Nancy, it's all starting to come together now. Thank you so much for another fabulous review and for the lovely golden star!! Love and hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx
Comment from K.L. Rockquemore
Love the ending, very dramatic. This is well written and creatively descriptive. As with all previous chapters, the dialogue reads authentically and has a smooth flow. Looking forward to what comes next.
reply by the author on 23-May-2022
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Love the ending, very dramatic. This is well written and creatively descriptive. As with all previous chapters, the dialogue reads authentically and has a smooth flow. Looking forward to what comes next.
Comment Written 23-May-2022
reply by the author on 23-May-2022
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Thank you so much, Kitty, for this really lovely review. You really make my head swell!!! Lol. Have a lovely week, my friend. Warm hugs, Sandra xxx
Comment from Sanku
A wonderful job, this chapter. Gwendolin will grieve in public but rejoice in private .so one person,Richard is gone..The story is moving to the last stages remarkably. I am curious to know what will happen to Maggot?
reply by the author on 23-May-2022
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A wonderful job, this chapter. Gwendolin will grieve in public but rejoice in private .so one person,Richard is gone..The story is moving to the last stages remarkably. I am curious to know what will happen to Maggot?
Comment Written 23-May-2022
reply by the author on 23-May-2022
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Thank you, Sanku, for your lovely review. You'll find out what happens to Margot in the last chapter. Not too far away now. As you noticed, it's moving into the last stages. There will be some fireworks before that!! Thanks for all your wonderful support, my friend. Warm hugs. Sandra xxx