Football - A Novel
Viewing comments for Chapter 80 "Chapter 51"A mother faces life's struggles.
30 total reviews
Comment from judiverse
I suppose I should say "Oh, this is so sudden." But it really wasn't too much of a surprise. When Gabriel has an idea, he wants to get to work on it immediately. It'll be good for Katherine's state of mind if they get married. She'll have something to motivate her to get well. This will make a great ending for your novel. I wish Katherine's in-laws could be there to see the wedding. judi
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2022
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I suppose I should say "Oh, this is so sudden." But it really wasn't too much of a surprise. When Gabriel has an idea, he wants to get to work on it immediately. It'll be good for Katherine's state of mind if they get married. She'll have something to motivate her to get well. This will make a great ending for your novel. I wish Katherine's in-laws could be there to see the wedding. judi
Comment Written 20-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2022
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I doubt her in-laws would attend. Thank you for the kind review.
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You're very welcome. That's another thing about the wedding. It will put an end to the in-laws' attempts to gain custody of the children. judi
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Sure will.
Comment from royowen
A very sudden end, but I get the reason, it's all about where love truly exists, not in feelings, not in sexual fulfilment, but in promise, in covenant, Jesus affectively won a bride for Himself in the horror of the cross, not in the flurry of emotion, but in the commitment and sacrifice of love. Beautifully written Barbara, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2022
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A very sudden end, but I get the reason, it's all about where love truly exists, not in feelings, not in sexual fulfilment, but in promise, in covenant, Jesus affectively won a bride for Himself in the horror of the cross, not in the flurry of emotion, but in the commitment and sacrifice of love. Beautifully written Barbara, blessings Roy
Comment Written 20-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2022
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Yes, I like to portray unconditional love. Thank you for understanding.
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That?s great
Comment from Ben Colder
Bravo! well done and what a story that exposed real love to a well-deserving cast. Not many men that I know of would fit this coach's profile. Excellent, I have enjoyed the saga.
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2022
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Bravo! well done and what a story that exposed real love to a well-deserving cast. Not many men that I know of would fit this coach's profile. Excellent, I have enjoyed the saga.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2022
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He's perfect. LOL
Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from in777wr#
That was a beautiful ending to this story. Who wouldn't be touched by this. The build up to the marriage proposal, and acceptance was very good. I have enjoyed reading story. Nice job.
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2022
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That was a beautiful ending to this story. Who wouldn't be touched by this. The build up to the marriage proposal, and acceptance was very good. I have enjoyed reading story. Nice job.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2022
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Thank you for the kind review.
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You are welcome.
Comment from Annmuma
This is a wonderful, though heart-wrenching, chapter. It is like a Hallmark movie and I want it to have that kind of ending! I saw no spag and I loved every word. Good job. ann
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2022
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This is a wonderful, though heart-wrenching, chapter. It is like a Hallmark movie and I want it to have that kind of ending! I saw no spag and I loved every word. Good job. ann
Comment Written 20-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2022
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Begin Again
Hurrah, Barbara!
I am so glad I decided to check in to fanstory today for a few minutes. I wouldn't have wanted to miss the last chapter. It's a wonderful ending with a promising future for everyone. Good job!
Hugs, Carol
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2022
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Hurrah, Barbara!
I am so glad I decided to check in to fanstory today for a few minutes. I wouldn't have wanted to miss the last chapter. It's a wonderful ending with a promising future for everyone. Good job!
Hugs, Carol
Comment Written 20-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2022
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Thank you. I appreciate you.
Comment from Anne Johnston
I am so glad that you ended this on a happy note. I know getting married in the middle of chemo would not be very exciting. but this seems to be the best solution. Gabriel will be there for her, and the boys will have stability. Thank you for a great story.
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2022
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I am so glad that you ended this on a happy note. I know getting married in the middle of chemo would not be very exciting. but this seems to be the best solution. Gabriel will be there for her, and the boys will have stability. Thank you for a great story.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2022
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It is the most sensible thing to do under the circumstances. Thank you for the kind review.
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You are very welcome. I am sure you were glad to finish this story.
Comment from damommy
I'm so excited for them. It's time they married. After all, Gabriel is there for the long haul. He's right about setting an example for the boys. I'd love to see the wedding.
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2022
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I'm so excited for them. It's time they married. After all, Gabriel is there for the long haul. He's right about setting an example for the boys. I'd love to see the wedding.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2022
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Sankey
Ah, well, was this a bit short or what? Good reading and even though short I have to come up with enough review to get it accepted. Your personal experience helps with all this. Well done. Keep it coming.
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2022
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Ah, well, was this a bit short or what? Good reading and even though short I have to come up with enough review to get it accepted. Your personal experience helps with all this. Well done. Keep it coming.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2022
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from lancellot
Well done. I see the story is about to end. During post checks and touch-ups before sending it to publishers.
Katherine's hand flew over her mouth. "No!" After a moment, she continued, "But nothing happened."
- I'm just saying. Consider, she is shocked and says that can't happen again.
- This is the same woman, who after 76 days, wants Gabe to raise her children if she dies. And said yes to marrying him. (she would've said yes before she got sick)
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2022
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Well done. I see the story is about to end. During post checks and touch-ups before sending it to publishers.
Katherine's hand flew over her mouth. "No!" After a moment, she continued, "But nothing happened."
- I'm just saying. Consider, she is shocked and says that can't happen again.
- This is the same woman, who after 76 days, wants Gabe to raise her children if she dies. And said yes to marrying him. (she would've said yes before she got sick)
Comment Written 20-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2022
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He never asked before, so she couldn't have said yes. I've had some reviewers ask for an epilogue. I don't normally do them, but am considering it. Yes, I will do major editing.