Football - A Novel
Viewing comments for Chapter 62 "Football Chapter 34 part 1"A mother faces life's struggles.
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Comment from Jay Squires
I know this'll be your toughest game try not to do anything too outlandish.[I know someone's already pointed out this sentence. I downloaded this much earlier and am just getting around to reading it. Anyway, you need to do something after "game"]
Everything else was perfect and quite entertaining, as usual.
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2021
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I know this'll be your toughest game try not to do anything too outlandish.[I know someone's already pointed out this sentence. I downloaded this much earlier and am just getting around to reading it. Anyway, you need to do something after "game"]
Everything else was perfect and quite entertaining, as usual.
Comment Written 21-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2021
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I added to game. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Gert sherwood
Melton Ivory approaches Katherine at the coffee shop.
Barb, chapter 34 in your novel looks like Melton has eyes for
Katherine. This line in your novel---when Gabriel asked
"Will there be any issues with the peck I gave Kate?" I'm wondering why he would bring it up?
Gert
It's good to know that your wrist is on the mend
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2021
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Melton Ivory approaches Katherine at the coffee shop.
Barb, chapter 34 in your novel looks like Melton has eyes for
Katherine. This line in your novel---when Gabriel asked
"Will there be any issues with the peck I gave Kate?" I'm wondering why he would bring it up?
Gert
It's good to know that your wrist is on the mend
Comment Written 21-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2021
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Because the school district has a morality clause and Gabriel has already been questioned about the model kissing him at the cross country meet. Thank you for the kind review.
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Thank you Barb for answering my question
Gert
Comment from Judy Lawless
I like this light-hearted chapter, Barbara, and Gabriel coming to Katherine's rescue. Nice that she accepted it graciously this time. Well done.
A couple of little spags: "Paul chucked(chuckled)."
"Did you two come in for a reason for(or) just to..."
"I know this'll be your toughest game try not to do anything too outlandish..." - there needs to be something between "game" and "try", either a period and new sentence, or something like "so" or "but"
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2021
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I like this light-hearted chapter, Barbara, and Gabriel coming to Katherine's rescue. Nice that she accepted it graciously this time. Well done.
A couple of little spags: "Paul chucked(chuckled)."
"Did you two come in for a reason for(or) just to..."
"I know this'll be your toughest game try not to do anything too outlandish..." - there needs to be something between "game" and "try", either a period and new sentence, or something like "so" or "but"
Comment Written 21-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2021
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I have made those corrections. Thank you for the catches. I appreciate the help.
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Excellent! That guy is a creep. Ever since you introduced him, I suspected him to be a hired hand for the evil in-laws--their goal to make her fall for him and have sex with him during which he'll take compromising photos. The more persistent he is, the stronger my suspicions. Then again, perhaps he's just a standard creep. I trust all will be revealed!
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2021
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Excellent! That guy is a creep. Ever since you introduced him, I suspected him to be a hired hand for the evil in-laws--their goal to make her fall for him and have sex with him during which he'll take compromising photos. The more persistent he is, the stronger my suspicions. Then again, perhaps he's just a standard creep. I trust all will be revealed!
Comment Written 21-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2021
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from RPSaxena
Hello Barbara.Wilkey,
Nice piece in continuation.
Impressive phraseology; captivating flow throughout from the beginning to the end; the story is flowing ahead in an enchanting way.
Interesting and worth enjoying, indeed!
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2021
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Hello Barbara.Wilkey,
Nice piece in continuation.
Impressive phraseology; captivating flow throughout from the beginning to the end; the story is flowing ahead in an enchanting way.
Interesting and worth enjoying, indeed!
Comment Written 21-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2021
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Thank you for the encouragement.
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Barbara.wilkey, Most Welcome!
With best wishes,
~ RP
Comment from Wendy G
Another fine chapter. Wondering if Melton has been hired by the ex-in-laws to cause trouble, provoke reactions in either Gabriel or Katherine which will stand against them. Well written. All the best for continued healing for your wrist.
Wendy
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2021
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Another fine chapter. Wondering if Melton has been hired by the ex-in-laws to cause trouble, provoke reactions in either Gabriel or Katherine which will stand against them. Well written. All the best for continued healing for your wrist.
Wendy
Comment Written 21-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2021
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Shirley McLain
A very nice, well-written chapter. I did not see any errors. You managed to put tension in the chapter with the coffee shop incident. You did a great job as usual. Have a great evening. Shirley
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2021
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A very nice, well-written chapter. I did not see any errors. You managed to put tension in the chapter with the coffee shop incident. You did a great job as usual. Have a great evening. Shirley
Comment Written 21-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2021
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from judiverse
I wish Gabriel would stop intervening in all of Katherine's problems. She needs to feel like she can handle them herself, and it looked like she could handle Melton without Gabriel stepping in. She was unsure of herself when she married Riley and won't have progressed beyond that if Gabriel keeps trying to control things for her. Just my thinking. Gabriel is certainly winning over the boys. Good strategy on his part there. Great characterization and the story's developing fine. judi
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2021
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I wish Gabriel would stop intervening in all of Katherine's problems. She needs to feel like she can handle them herself, and it looked like she could handle Melton without Gabriel stepping in. She was unsure of herself when she married Riley and won't have progressed beyond that if Gabriel keeps trying to control things for her. Just my thinking. Gabriel is certainly winning over the boys. Good strategy on his part there. Great characterization and the story's developing fine. judi
Comment Written 21-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2021
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Thank you for the kind review. Katherine will show her strength before long.
Comment from Anne Johnston
Thanks for sharing this new chapter. That must have been frustrating losing all the work you had done, but I am glad you were able to recover the manuscript. Computers are great but can be frustrating.
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2021
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Thanks for sharing this new chapter. That must have been frustrating losing all the work you had done, but I am glad you were able to recover the manuscript. Computers are great but can be frustrating.
Comment Written 21-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2021
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Thank you for the kind review. When I called one of my sons' for help, he said, "Mom, you're somebody who really shouldn't own a computer." HMMMM????
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You are welcome. I am having problems today with a program I use every month, but all of a sudden they have changed their whole format and I am lost.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Hope your wrist continues to improve, barbara.
-It almost seems like Melton could be the
one spying on Katerine, or maybe he and
Mr. Frost are in things together.
-Melton is certainly an obnoxious person,
but it is good Katherine has all the support she does.
-He had some nerve saying she called the gestapo.
-I like how Gabe handled the situation in the
coffee shop and also with Jordan.
-Jordan is definitely growing up when
he can appreciate that his mom is a looker
and the whole football team is signing
up for her class!!
-An enjoyable chapter.
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2021
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-Hope your wrist continues to improve, barbara.
-It almost seems like Melton could be the
one spying on Katerine, or maybe he and
Mr. Frost are in things together.
-Melton is certainly an obnoxious person,
but it is good Katherine has all the support she does.
-He had some nerve saying she called the gestapo.
-I like how Gabe handled the situation in the
coffee shop and also with Jordan.
-Jordan is definitely growing up when
he can appreciate that his mom is a looker
and the whole football team is signing
up for her class!!
-An enjoyable chapter.
Comment Written 21-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2021
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Thank you for the encouragement.
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You are welcome.