Revenge
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Comment from Wendy G
Totally unscrupulous is James/Vito. Satanic. No-one gets in his way and he is destroying many for his vengeance. Fortunately Marian is on the scene to help Tiffany - and she has seen enough. But will she be believed? Dramatic and exciting chapter, and well-written.
Wendy
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2021
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Totally unscrupulous is James/Vito. Satanic. No-one gets in his way and he is destroying many for his vengeance. Fortunately Marian is on the scene to help Tiffany - and she has seen enough. But will she be believed? Dramatic and exciting chapter, and well-written.
Wendy
Comment Written 20-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2021
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Of course, life is tugging me down and I am getting far behind on my thank yous. Please know I always appreciate reading and knowing your thoughts...even though I fall behind is telling you.
Carol
Comment from Gert sherwood
Begin Again,
There is plenty of action in Revenge - Chap 24
The fake blood mixed with spaghetti sauce. And new actress,
The sharp knife and to top it all, a hidden room.
I will say, will make a movie to be seen.
Gert
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2021
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Begin Again,
There is plenty of action in Revenge - Chap 24
The fake blood mixed with spaghetti sauce. And new actress,
The sharp knife and to top it all, a hidden room.
I will say, will make a movie to be seen.
Gert
Comment Written 20-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2021
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Of course, life is tugging me down and I am getting far behind on my thank yous. Please know I always appreciate reading and knowing your thoughts...even though I fall behind is telling you.
Carol
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Begin Again
I understand what you are saying
Gert
Comment from royowen
So, as I suspected, it was a setup to fool the star struck, desperate girl to look like she's murder the man on the bed, but in the process she flesh, and being strangled when caught by Lenny, Marian flattens him with a replica gun, and pulls Tiffany to safety, well done, good scribing Carol, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2021
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So, as I suspected, it was a setup to fool the star struck, desperate girl to look like she's murder the man on the bed, but in the process she flesh, and being strangled when caught by Lenny, Marian flattens him with a replica gun, and pulls Tiffany to safety, well done, good scribing Carol, blessings Roy
Comment Written 20-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2021
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Of course, life is tugging me down and I am getting far behind on my thank yous. Please know I always appreciate reading and knowing your thoughts...even though I fall behind is telling you.
Carol
Comment from Lloyd T. Okoko
The objective correlative of the story reminisces a director at work in a dry run of a film/video shooting session.
The work highlights the dreadful and imposing disposition of director on the actors and how this intimidating nature of his eventually afforded the push to a successful dry run devoid of hitches.
The work earns its texture through the effective use of imagery and anecdotes.
Excellent work. Bravo.
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2021
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The objective correlative of the story reminisces a director at work in a dry run of a film/video shooting session.
The work highlights the dreadful and imposing disposition of director on the actors and how this intimidating nature of his eventually afforded the push to a successful dry run devoid of hitches.
The work earns its texture through the effective use of imagery and anecdotes.
Excellent work. Bravo.
Comment Written 20-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2021
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I appreciate your time and thoughts regarding my story. I am glad you enjoyed it and I hope you continue to follow.
Always, Carol
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Remain Blessed.
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Brutally brilliant. How much longer until the wrap up? Just curious--be assured, I've been thoroughly engaged throughout!
Paralyzed in fear, she listened, [praying. In=>praying that in] their rush, they hadn't heard her.
I don't think someone can gurgle whilst being choked.
(make a hollow bubbling sound like that made by water running out of a bottle)
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2021
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Brutally brilliant. How much longer until the wrap up? Just curious--be assured, I've been thoroughly engaged throughout!
Paralyzed in fear, she listened, [praying. In=>praying that in] their rush, they hadn't heard her.
I don't think someone can gurgle whilst being choked.
(make a hollow bubbling sound like that made by water running out of a bottle)
Comment Written 20-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2021
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I am 172 reviews behind, and I feel terrible about it. I find myself feeling safer dealing with my murderous characters than dealing with my family. I hope everyone understands that I appreciate them very much, but I simply am struggling to keep my head above water. Each person deserves a big thank you for their time and effort... I hope my thanks and hugs will suffice for now.
(((Hugs))) Carol
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
OMG! I couldn't breathe while I read this, that poor girl! Thank goodness Marian was there and managed to take control. This will really upset Charles and James not knowing what happened to Tiffany. This was an amazing chapter, Carol, exciting doesn't quite cover it! Well done, my friend!!!! Love and hugs, Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2021
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OMG! I couldn't breathe while I read this, that poor girl! Thank goodness Marian was there and managed to take control. This will really upset Charles and James not knowing what happened to Tiffany. This was an amazing chapter, Carol, exciting doesn't quite cover it! Well done, my friend!!!! Love and hugs, Sandra xxx
Comment Written 20-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2021
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Well, thank you...That's the response I hoped for the reader to feel. I can't wait (much like James) to see how people react as he sets up Jasmine and Allie. And, of course, Garth's love for Allie might make him lose track of who he is. Thank heavens for writing... I just pray I am still doing the story justice.
Smiles and hugs-- love you, Carol
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I am glad Marion is helping Tiffany. Now, what about Jasmine. So James is after Allie. Just gets better and better.
Tiffany took a needed breath and muttered, And now, you toss me aside and give my role to someone else." (Missing beginning quotation marks in front of "And...)
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2021
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I am glad Marion is helping Tiffany. Now, what about Jasmine. So James is after Allie. Just gets better and better.
Tiffany took a needed breath and muttered, And now, you toss me aside and give my role to someone else." (Missing beginning quotation marks in front of "And...)
Comment Written 20-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2021
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Fixed... Thanks for the review and the suggestion. Appreciate it very much. The unexpected turn of events in the last two days is making my life continue to be a confusing mess. I am forever thankful that you continue you follow the story and I hope I am doing it justice.
Carol
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You are and just a reminder. I continue to pray.
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Thank you...
Comment from BethShelby
What a horrible thing to turn an actress into a murderer. I hope the secret room is enough of an excape plan to keep Tiffany hidden away until she can excape. I wonder how Lenny being knocked out will be explained. I always enjoy your chapters, but I'm amazed you can write so well with all the other things going on in your life.
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2021
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What a horrible thing to turn an actress into a murderer. I hope the secret room is enough of an excape plan to keep Tiffany hidden away until she can excape. I wonder how Lenny being knocked out will be explained. I always enjoy your chapters, but I'm amazed you can write so well with all the other things going on in your life.
Comment Written 20-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2021
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The devious plan to destroy Allie is about to unfold, and I hope Samantha and Marian don't get tangled in the weave. Vito has had eight long years to plan it, and he is raring to see Allie suffer.
Thanks Beth
Carol
Comment from Jasmine Girl
What a series of action in this chapter. You did well for the movie scene and the escape. It's funny that they still had fake blood even though the knife was real but Tiffany didn't know about it. I'm so glad she escaped with help of Marian, whom I thought has dementia.
Well done.
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reply by the author on 20-Nov-2021
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What a series of action in this chapter. You did well for the movie scene and the escape. It's funny that they still had fake blood even though the knife was real but Tiffany didn't know about it. I'm so glad she escaped with help of Marian, whom I thought has dementia.
Well done.
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Comment Written 20-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2021
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They were looking for the shock value in the video, and if Tiffany didn't hit enough, the blood would still splatter everywhere. Anything for the sake of the film. LOL Thanks so much.
Carol
Comment from Carol Clark2
What a diabolical plan by James and Charles! Poor Tiffany. I'm glad Marian is there to rescue her. One small fix: She took a need(ed) breath.... So, the Sheriff is also in on this plan. The detectives have quite a mess to sort out. Great chapter!
I hope things are returning to normal for you. Blessings.
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reply by the author on 20-Nov-2021
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What a diabolical plan by James and Charles! Poor Tiffany. I'm glad Marian is there to rescue her. One small fix: She took a need(ed) breath.... So, the Sheriff is also in on this plan. The detectives have quite a mess to sort out. Great chapter!
I hope things are returning to normal for you. Blessings.
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Comment Written 20-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2021
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The plan is about to draw Garth and Allie into the plot. Hold your breath and hope they fail, but Vito has had eight long years to think it through. He's a very sinister man. Thanks so much.
Carol
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Yes, I'm holding my breath till the next chapter. Lol! Have a blessed day.