Revenge
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Comment from Gert sherwood
your chapter in the book Revenge
Revenge - Chap 19
Begin Again, I noticed where ( I believe Welcher attitude changed when he opened the envelope then looked at photos that grossed him out
I'm asking was it when Welche, read the note attached to the envelope or what he saw in the pictures
Gert
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2021
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your chapter in the book Revenge
Revenge - Chap 19
Begin Again, I noticed where ( I believe Welcher attitude changed when he opened the envelope then looked at photos that grossed him out
I'm asking was it when Welche, read the note attached to the envelope or what he saw in the pictures
Gert
Comment Written 13-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2021
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My apologies for responding with a thank you so late, but know I truly appreciate your time and the review.
Hugs, Carol
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Begin Again
You are most welcome
Gert
Comment from lyenochka
It was a timely visit for Garth to witness the pictures that Samantha sent. I wonder if the new starlet whose fingerprints that James has directed to be everywhere is Jaz? Hope Sam gets in touch with Garth and Hank soon.
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2021
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It was a timely visit for Garth to witness the pictures that Samantha sent. I wonder if the new starlet whose fingerprints that James has directed to be everywhere is Jaz? Hope Sam gets in touch with Garth and Hank soon.
Comment Written 13-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2021
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My apologies for responding with a thank you so late, but know I truly appreciate your time and the review.
Hugs, Carol
Comment from Wendy G
Wow, I admire the pace and complexity of this chapter, and the interactions of the various characters. I wondered why Welcher threw the photos all over the room though - I thought he would shred them. One assumes he picked them up again to dispose of them before anyone else saw them. Interesting, as always.
Wendy
Typos: "He added", not "I". Question mark needed at the end of "When will you learn about the wrath of a woman."
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2021
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Wow, I admire the pace and complexity of this chapter, and the interactions of the various characters. I wondered why Welcher threw the photos all over the room though - I thought he would shred them. One assumes he picked them up again to dispose of them before anyone else saw them. Interesting, as always.
Wendy
Typos: "He added", not "I". Question mark needed at the end of "When will you learn about the wrath of a woman."
Comment Written 13-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2021
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My apologies for responding with a thank you so late, but know I truly appreciate your time and the review.
Hugs, Carol
Comment from barbara.wilkey
This story gets better and better as the plot gets thicker and thicker. Good job.
When his visitor didn't get the hint, I added, "I'm working on a prostitution scam in the area. You heard anything while canvassing the area?" (he added, NOT I added)
Garth smiled, "Guess I hadn't noticed." (period needed after 'smiled.')
Once out of Garth's line of sight, Welcher dipped into an empty conference room, locking the door behind him. He spread the pictures across the table, cursing at each one. "You're going to pay for this bitch." With each image, he released his venom, louder and louder. "I'll find you, and when I do, you'll be starring in one of my friend's movies." His anger built like an erupting volcano, spewing obscenities as he flung the pictures in every direction.
Finally, he sunk into the chair, pulled his cell out of his pocket, and placed a call to the only friend he had. (You are in Garth's POV you have no clue what the sheriff is doing in that room.)
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2021
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This story gets better and better as the plot gets thicker and thicker. Good job.
When his visitor didn't get the hint, I added, "I'm working on a prostitution scam in the area. You heard anything while canvassing the area?" (he added, NOT I added)
Garth smiled, "Guess I hadn't noticed." (period needed after 'smiled.')
Once out of Garth's line of sight, Welcher dipped into an empty conference room, locking the door behind him. He spread the pictures across the table, cursing at each one. "You're going to pay for this bitch." With each image, he released his venom, louder and louder. "I'll find you, and when I do, you'll be starring in one of my friend's movies." His anger built like an erupting volcano, spewing obscenities as he flung the pictures in every direction.
Finally, he sunk into the chair, pulled his cell out of his pocket, and placed a call to the only friend he had. (You are in Garth's POV you have no clue what the sheriff is doing in that room.)
Comment Written 13-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2021
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My apologies for responding with a thank you so late, but know I truly appreciate your time and the review.
Hugs, Carol
Comment from Judy Lawless
This is another fast-paced chapter, Carol. Good dialogue and character building. Some questions begin to get answered while new ones arise. Well done.
A couple of minor spags: "When his visitor didn't get the hint, I(he) added,"
"I'm going to have (to) cut this short."
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2021
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This is another fast-paced chapter, Carol. Good dialogue and character building. Some questions begin to get answered while new ones arise. Well done.
A couple of minor spags: "When his visitor didn't get the hint, I(he) added,"
"I'm going to have (to) cut this short."
Comment Written 13-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2021
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My apologies for responding with a thank you so late, but know I truly appreciate your time and the review.
Hugs, Carol
Comment from royowen
Garth looks like he caught the sheriff in an extremely bad moment, so now he's probably not going to rest until he finds out what it might be, and must admit, I feel absolutely no sympathy for this nasty little character. Beautifully written dear Carol, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2021
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Garth looks like he caught the sheriff in an extremely bad moment, so now he's probably not going to rest until he finds out what it might be, and must admit, I feel absolutely no sympathy for this nasty little character. Beautifully written dear Carol, blessings Roy
Comment Written 13-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2021
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My apologies for responding with a thank you so late, but know I truly appreciate your time and the review.
Hugs, Carol
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Bless you
Comment from robyn corum
Carol,
Ouch. Annnndddd here's the twist. You really have to be careful in business - cannot trust so many of those bed partners - even before they become bed partners in the literal sense, as well. Great job!
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2021
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Carol,
Ouch. Annnndddd here's the twist. You really have to be careful in business - cannot trust so many of those bed partners - even before they become bed partners in the literal sense, as well. Great job!
Comment Written 13-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2021
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My sweet Robyn... You knew I couldn't be that blase with the story, right? Nothing can be simple or cut and dried. Just like my life... spinning like a top.
Thanks for reading and reviewing. I appreciate the support.
Hugs, Carol
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Gripping. As always, stunning and vivid--characters are richly drawn and interactions are compelling. The plot thickens--how much more until this wraps up?
typo: His [scowled=>SCOWL] said far more than his words.
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2021
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Gripping. As always, stunning and vivid--characters are richly drawn and interactions are compelling. The plot thickens--how much more until this wraps up?
typo: His [scowled=>SCOWL] said far more than his words.
Comment Written 13-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2021
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Already fixed that scowl (ed) but appreciate you pointing it out.
Thrilled you are still enjoying the story. I fear I will lose my "edge" with all that's going on so it's nice to know someone is watching for my slip ups. Thanks!
Hugs, Carol
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I'm amazed--and relieved--that you've kept the edge. I've feared that you are ready to jump off it.
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I stand at the edge and teeter back and forth... I thought it would be trying to keep up with five children but my rel probably comes from the disrespectful adults who believe it is my duty to financially and physcially care for all of them until it is fixed. Yes, I made meals for 1000s at a time, but I also got reimbursed for it. I shiver to add up how much food I use to feed 9 people daily and the gas to get five children to four schools and back again. Hugs, Carol
Comment from lancellot
Another well written chapter.
notes:
When his visitor didn't get the hint, {I added,} "I'm working on a prostitution scam in the area. You heard anything while canvassing the area?"
Garth's stomach churned as he fought to remain unattached from the sheriff's despicable view of women.
- Are you sure about this (character's view vs. Author's desire) someone of Garth's intelligence and experience would think this? The casting couch is well known. Some women have used sex for thousands of years to get what they need or wanted.
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2021
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Another well written chapter.
notes:
When his visitor didn't get the hint, {I added,} "I'm working on a prostitution scam in the area. You heard anything while canvassing the area?"
Garth's stomach churned as he fought to remain unattached from the sheriff's despicable view of women.
- Are you sure about this (character's view vs. Author's desire) someone of Garth's intelligence and experience would think this? The casting couch is well known. Some women have used sex for thousands of years to get what they need or wanted.
Comment Written 13-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2021
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And some men have exploited women as well. It can go either way, but I hope Garth (my charming hero) wouldn't think either side should use sex as a tool. (Probably reality says it's the author's desire - LOL)
Thanks for the pointers and the review. I always appreciate your honest thoughts about the story. Have a great day!
Always, Carol
Comment from prettybluebirds
This is a most interesting story. I did spot one small error. The word (scowled) should be (scowl). It is an easy fix and I'm sure with your expertise it was just a slight slip. I will watch for more of this story even though crime stories are really not my thing. Good work.
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2021
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This is a most interesting story. I did spot one small error. The word (scowled) should be (scowl). It is an easy fix and I'm sure with your expertise it was just a slight slip. I will watch for more of this story even though crime stories are really not my thing. Good work.
Comment Written 13-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2021
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Thanks for catching that error. It's fixed. I'm watching my five grandchildren today and concentration on writing is difficult. That's why I am thankful for all the help from my friends. This is the fourth in a series of crime stories. When I finish, I hope to polish them up and then self publish (something my mother and husband made me promise to do before they succumbed to terminal illnesses.)
Thank you for your support and kindness.
Hugs, Carol