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Revenge

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Evil stalks the dynamic crime team

22 total reviews 
Comment from Wendy G
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Fortunately the readers know her sister isn't dead- but unfortunately Allie doesn't and the shock and grief will be horrendous. I can already see lots of twists and turns before they solve this one - and it's unlikely to be pretty! Great writing. Always enjoyable to read.
Wendy

 Comment Written 17-Oct-2021


reply by the author on 20-Oct-2021
    Thank you for taking the time to read, enjoy and review my story. It means a great deal to me and I truly appreciate it.

    Smiles and hugs, Carol
Comment from Ric Myworld
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Seems like I haven't seen your name in a day or two. But that could be my memory that isn't what it used to be not so long ago. LOL. But it's good to see your story today. :-)

 Comment Written 17-Oct-2021


reply by the author on 20-Oct-2021
    Thank you for taking the time to read, enjoy and review my story. It means a great deal to me and I truly appreciate it.

    Smiles and hugs, Carol
Comment from Ulla
Exceptional
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Hi Carol, It's getting worse by the minute, and how they are going to break the new to Allie is a tough one, indeed. I can understand why a shot of whiskey in the coffee may be needed. I'm getting more and more into the story. I really like it. Well done. Ulla:)))

 Comment Written 17-Oct-2021


reply by the author on 20-Oct-2021
    Thank you for taking the time to read, enjoy and review my story. It means a great deal to me and I truly appreciate it.

    Smiles and hugs, Carol
Comment from royowen
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I think I met have read these out of order, I already know the proceeding chapter. But at least now why the episodes jumped a missing hurdle, so I'm glad I read the other one, beautifully written dear girl, blessings Roy

 Comment Written 17-Oct-2021


reply by the author on 20-Oct-2021
    Thank you for taking the time to read, enjoy and review my story. It means a great deal to me and I truly appreciate it.

    Smiles and hugs, Carol
Comment from Judy Lawless
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Tears are going to flow again, I can see, Carol. Poor Allie, and Garth having to tell her. You are doing a good job of keeping our interest. Well done.

 Comment Written 17-Oct-2021


reply by the author on 17-Oct-2021
    I hope I can make the reader see and feel how difficult it is for Garth to be the one to tell Allie about Jaz. Thanks for reading.

    Smiles, Carol
reply by Judy Lawless on 17-Oct-2021
    You certainly succeeded! 😀
Comment from LJbutterfly
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So far, we can imagine what things will have to happen and the anticipation is unsettling. There are so many moving parts, but I have become familiar with your writing style and know you will have a few unexpected surprises for us to keep us on our toes. Things are never cut and dry, so I'll sit back and enjoy the ride. This was a great continuing introductory episode.

 Comment Written 17-Oct-2021


reply by the author on 17-Oct-2021
    Thanks, Lorraine. I truly appreciate your comments and the fact that you understand where my writing style comes from. I am thrilled that you are enjoying the story and hope you will continue to do so.

    Smiles and hugs, Carol
Comment from BethShelby
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I can tell this is going to be another very exciting book. You always keep adding more elements to the mystery as you go along. I'm sure Garth would be really dreading what he has to relate to Allie. I'm glad it isn't her sister that is dead but will she know the difference. What will the tattoo tell her? She might not know if her sister had a tattoo since she's not seen her for a while.

 Comment Written 17-Oct-2021


reply by the author on 17-Oct-2021
    Thanks, Beth. I am hoping Garth will be able to pick up the pieces and get Allie moving forward again, but one never knows how some will react. I am thrilled you are enjoying the story.

    Smiles, Carol
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
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Devastating. Brilliant narration--intense dialog is spot-on for the dreadful circumstances--as always, you leave us tantalized for the next--I shudder to contemplate Allie's reaction. Fine work!

 Comment Written 17-Oct-2021


reply by the author on 17-Oct-2021
    I've just finished writing Allie and Garth's conversation and hope I did it justice. Going to read it over again and make sure it comes across with the emotions I intended. Thank you so much for your thoughts and the review. Smiles, Carol
Comment from barbara.wilkey
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I like this story an I like seeing this part of Garth.

"Sorry, Garth. I wish I'd had better news for you." Ortiz shook his head. (you can leave off 'for you' for a tighter sentence.)

 Comment Written 17-Oct-2021


reply by the author on 17-Oct-2021
    Fixed the suggestions!

    The next chapter has me scared because I hope everyone will see another side of Garth... It's going to rip him apart to tell Allie the terrible news.

    Smiles, Carol
Comment from Eunice Amero
Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level

Being a cop or sheriff is can be a very tough job. Im not one but something like this would be hard then having to tell a loved you. You did a swell job with this story. I'd love to be that good. I even felt l was there. It felt so real. Thank you so much for sharing. You are a very good writer.

 Comment Written 17-Oct-2021


reply by the author on 17-Oct-2021
    Thank you so much Eunice for the review but more importantly for your kind words. I really appreciate it very much. And thank you for the stars!!!

    Always, Carol
reply by Eunice Amero on 17-Oct-2021
    You are so very welcome.
reply by Eunice Amero on 17-Oct-2021
    You are so very welcome.
reply by Eunice Amero on 17-Oct-2021
    You are so very welcome.
reply by Eunice Amero on 17-Oct-2021
    You are so very welcome.
reply by Eunice Amero on 17-Oct-2021
    You are so very welcome.
reply by Eunice Amero on 17-Oct-2021
    You are so very welcome.
reply by Eunice Amero on 17-Oct-2021
    You are so very welcome.
reply by Eunice Amero on 17-Oct-2021
    You are so very welcome.
reply by Eunice Amero on 17-Oct-2021
    You are so very welcome.