The Late Arrival
a 150-word story19 total reviews
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
This is a great little story Bill. I think it is perhaps the post of yours that I have enjoyed reading the most. Certainly it has all the elements of exquisite Flash Fiction - I salute you !
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2021
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This is a great little story Bill. I think it is perhaps the post of yours that I have enjoyed reading the most. Certainly it has all the elements of exquisite Flash Fiction - I salute you !
Comment Written 19-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2021
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Thank you, Katherine, for the exceptional review. Bill
Comment from Wendy G
A sad twist at the end. You crafted your story with skill and care, leading into the last sentence very well. This is an excellent entry for the Flash Fiction contest, so sending my best wishes.
Wendy
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2021
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A sad twist at the end. You crafted your story with skill and care, leading into the last sentence very well. This is an excellent entry for the Flash Fiction contest, so sending my best wishes.
Wendy
Comment Written 19-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2021
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Thank you, Wendy, for the positive and encouraging review.
Comment from nomi338
I guess that you can say that some trips home are inevitable. You can either return to the scene of the crime or be returned involuntarily. There will undoubtedly be tears, tales and at the very end TAPS.
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2021
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I guess that you can say that some trips home are inevitable. You can either return to the scene of the crime or be returned involuntarily. There will undoubtedly be tears, tales and at the very end TAPS.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2021
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Thanks, nomi, for giving this a look.
Comment from lyenochka
Sad but meaningful. It seems like he returned home but not alive. Hopefully, he kept in touch so they have lots to share at the memorial. Best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2021
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Sad but meaningful. It seems like he returned home but not alive. Hopefully, he kept in touch so they have lots to share at the memorial. Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2021
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Thank you, lyenochka
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is an eerie story Bill and you sent shivers down my spine with your tale of the return here. At least this guy lived life to the full before his end, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2021
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This is an eerie story Bill and you sent shivers down my spine with your tale of the return here. At least this guy lived life to the full before his end, love Dolly x
Comment Written 18-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2021
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Thank you, Dolly,
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Oh so sad. You did a great job with this poignant contest entry. Your words are well thought out and create a great picture for readers. The ending is unexpected and heartbreaking, too.
Best wishes in the contest.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2021
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Oh so sad. You did a great job with this poignant contest entry. Your words are well thought out and create a great picture for readers. The ending is unexpected and heartbreaking, too.
Best wishes in the contest.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 18-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2021
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Thank you, Jan, for the great review.
Comment from kahpot
My mind has many theories, did he atone for his past by joining the military and gave his life, or was he captured because of his past, hearse or paddy wagon? very well written and best wishes for your contest****kahpot
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2021
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My mind has many theories, did he atone for his past by joining the military and gave his life, or was he captured because of his past, hearse or paddy wagon? very well written and best wishes for your contest****kahpot
Comment Written 18-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2021
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Thank you, kahpot. Interment should be the give-away. : )
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I was busy looking that up, all clear now
Comment from SHABAMO
Our mystery character is clearly in a state of contemplation after having what we know must have been a very checkered life! Good use of limited words!
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reply by the author on 18-Sep-2021
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Our mystery character is clearly in a state of contemplation after having what we know must have been a very checkered life! Good use of limited words!
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Comment Written 18-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2021
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Thank yu, Shabamo.
Comment from damommy
Omigosh! The vehicle was a hearse, wasn't it? That's why he's returning after all those years. How sad there was no one to see him off and no on to greet him when he arrived.
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reply by the author on 18-Sep-2021
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Omigosh! The vehicle was a hearse, wasn't it? That's why he's returning after all those years. How sad there was no one to see him off and no on to greet him when he arrived.
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Comment Written 18-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2021
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Yes, Yvonne. A bad penny turns up for last rites. Thanks for giving this a look.
