Football - A Novel
Viewing comments for Chapter 43 "Football Chapter 22 part1"A mother faces life's struggles.
26 total reviews
Comment from amahra
That is so messed up; usually, when your son or daughter dies, the parents of the deceased gravitate to the kids because that's all they have of the dead parent; but the Rileys don't give a hoot about these kids. Nice chapter, Barbara.
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2021
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That is so messed up; usually, when your son or daughter dies, the parents of the deceased gravitate to the kids because that's all they have of the dead parent; but the Rileys don't give a hoot about these kids. Nice chapter, Barbara.
Comment Written 11-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2021
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We'll see. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Judy Lawless
Oh, I like this chapter, Barbara. There is plenty of great dialogue showing confrontation, emotions and possibly the people responsible for the photographer. Very well done. Can't wait for the next chapter.
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2021
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Oh, I like this chapter, Barbara. There is plenty of great dialogue showing confrontation, emotions and possibly the people responsible for the photographer. Very well done. Can't wait for the next chapter.
Comment Written 11-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2021
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from lancellot
Hmm, a lot of things are happening. And it all is as confusing to your characters as it is to us. The problems Katherine is facing from, now, multiple sides are strange. It is hard to tell why it is all happening. We need more clues.
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2021
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Hmm, a lot of things are happening. And it all is as confusing to your characters as it is to us. The problems Katherine is facing from, now, multiple sides are strange. It is hard to tell why it is all happening. We need more clues.
Comment Written 11-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2021
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I promise more clue and it will get a lot worse. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-I was wondering what the
boarding school image was, barbara.
-This is a very good chapter that
shows the true colors of Katerine's
in-laws and probably why her
ex-husband was the way he was.
-I like how Gabe handled it all.
-They even had the nerve to
upset the boys, and that was uncalled for.
-Gabe had a good idea to go
to his parents farm, let the boys
be out with nature, and let him
and Katherine see what his parents know.
-She sure gets it from a lot of sides,
but one of these times, I am
betting on them changing for the better!
-Well done.
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2021
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-I was wondering what the
boarding school image was, barbara.
-This is a very good chapter that
shows the true colors of Katerine's
in-laws and probably why her
ex-husband was the way he was.
-I like how Gabe handled it all.
-They even had the nerve to
upset the boys, and that was uncalled for.
-Gabe had a good idea to go
to his parents farm, let the boys
be out with nature, and let him
and Katherine see what his parents know.
-She sure gets it from a lot of sides,
but one of these times, I am
betting on them changing for the better!
-Well done.
Comment Written 11-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2021
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I agree. Thank you for the kind review.
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You are very welcome.
Comment from Jay Squires
Well, that's an interesting development, isn't it? Were her inlaws trying to build a case for incompetency against Katherine? To develop a case against Katherine and Gabriel's alleged goings-on? But that doesn't make any sense if they don't even like the kids (and kids can detect those things). I guess I'll just have to let you finish your story, LOL.
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2021
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Well, that's an interesting development, isn't it? Were her inlaws trying to build a case for incompetency against Katherine? To develop a case against Katherine and Gabriel's alleged goings-on? But that doesn't make any sense if they don't even like the kids (and kids can detect those things). I guess I'll just have to let you finish your story, LOL.
Comment Written 11-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2021
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I sure hope you do finish the story. LOL There's a lot more going to happen. Thank you for the kind review.
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Do you think I could even leave now?
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I sure hope not. LOL I need your words of wisdom.
Comment from BethShelby
I enjoyed reading this. These inlaws are out to cause problems. Since they have never shown much interest in the children, I'm not sure what they hope to gain by interferring. Gabriel did a good job of putting them in thier place, but what he said may have made things worse for Katherine.
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2021
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I enjoyed reading this. These inlaws are out to cause problems. Since they have never shown much interest in the children, I'm not sure what they hope to gain by interferring. Gabriel did a good job of putting them in thier place, but what he said may have made things worse for Katherine.
Comment Written 11-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2021
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Sankey
This, again, was an excellent chapter. Noticed the formal title the boys gave their Grandmother. No love there for sure. My inlaws call each other by their first names no "terms of endearment" unless privately they do?
Just a couple of spags. be no problem switching banks.(")
( Gabriel cut in.)"Jordan, can I borrow your mom for a few minutes?"
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2021
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This, again, was an excellent chapter. Noticed the formal title the boys gave their Grandmother. No love there for sure. My inlaws call each other by their first names no "terms of endearment" unless privately they do?
Just a couple of spags. be no problem switching banks.(")
( Gabriel cut in.)"Jordan, can I borrow your mom for a few minutes?"
Comment Written 11-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2021
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Thank you for the catch. I appreciate the help.
Comment from Ric Myworld
Sometimes, even the size of your vehicle creates a dilemma when dealing with a family or group situation. LOL. But there's nothing that makes more life-long memories. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2021
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Sometimes, even the size of your vehicle creates a dilemma when dealing with a family or group situation. LOL. But there's nothing that makes more life-long memories. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 11-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2021
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So true, I remember when my husband realized his MG Midget wasn't a family cat. LOL Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from royowen
I think Gabriel could be right, that Katherine's in-laws are part of the ptoboem and could well be connected to the Frost dilemma, and, of course, the private eye, but Gabe fixed their wagon and Katherine affectively threw them out. Beautifully written again Barbara, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2021
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I think Gabriel could be right, that Katherine's in-laws are part of the ptoboem and could well be connected to the Frost dilemma, and, of course, the private eye, but Gabe fixed their wagon and Katherine affectively threw them out. Beautifully written again Barbara, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 11-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2021
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Thank you for the kind review and understanding.
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Bless you
Comment from judiverse
The Rileys are quite a pair. It was interesting that the boys could see through them. They caught on that they really weren't interested in them and would send them to boarding school if they did get custody. They should realize that with their son being dead, they belong with their mother. Gabriel used the right tone in speaking to them. I'm curious as to what is behind the Rileys' sudden interference. Maybe Gabriel's parents will have some idea about what they're up to. Excellent characterization. Just a thought--as you continue to work on this, you might think of having Katherine's husband being dead for more than six months. judi
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2021
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The Rileys are quite a pair. It was interesting that the boys could see through them. They caught on that they really weren't interested in them and would send them to boarding school if they did get custody. They should realize that with their son being dead, they belong with their mother. Gabriel used the right tone in speaking to them. I'm curious as to what is behind the Rileys' sudden interference. Maybe Gabriel's parents will have some idea about what they're up to. Excellent characterization. Just a thought--as you continue to work on this, you might think of having Katherine's husband being dead for more than six months. judi
Comment Written 11-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2021
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The six months will come in handy later. Thank you for the kind review.
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You're very welcome. I'll be curious to see how that plays out. judi