Football - A Novel
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Comment from Pam (respa)
-Good choice of image
and story to go with it, Barbara.
-We see different sides of
some of the characters and the
nature of their relationships.
-Katherine is concerned about
Gabriel, and she and Angie have
a good discussion about it.
-About the same time, while
fishing, Bill and Gabriel have
a similar conversation.
-Finally, Gabriel's mom speaks
to him, as well, and the consensus
seems to be he and Katherine
make a good pair, but the
two of them need more time
to see if that is the case.
-The two boys also have a
good conversation, and we
learn a little bit about their dad.
-I would assume that is something
you will explore a little more
as the story progresses, along
with that of Katherine and Gabriel.
-Well done!
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2021
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-Good choice of image
and story to go with it, Barbara.
-We see different sides of
some of the characters and the
nature of their relationships.
-Katherine is concerned about
Gabriel, and she and Angie have
a good discussion about it.
-About the same time, while
fishing, Bill and Gabriel have
a similar conversation.
-Finally, Gabriel's mom speaks
to him, as well, and the consensus
seems to be he and Katherine
make a good pair, but the
two of them need more time
to see if that is the case.
-The two boys also have a
good conversation, and we
learn a little bit about their dad.
-I would assume that is something
you will explore a little more
as the story progresses, along
with that of Katherine and Gabriel.
-Well done!
Comment Written 25-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2021
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Thank you for the generous review.
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You are very welcome; it was well deserved.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Oh dear. I can see Gabriel and Katherine eventually being a couple, but they don't want parents and friends trying to 'help' them achieve it. Lol. There is obviously going to be lots of fights before that happens. And then there is Frost, he's bound to be entering the party soon. Another great chapter, Barbara. :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2021
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Oh dear. I can see Gabriel and Katherine eventually being a couple, but they don't want parents and friends trying to 'help' them achieve it. Lol. There is obviously going to be lots of fights before that happens. And then there is Frost, he's bound to be entering the party soon. Another great chapter, Barbara. :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 25-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2021
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Brilliant dialog kept me enthralled--you skillfully manage the nuances of relationships, which is the hallmark of a fine writer--characters and interactions are rich and real.
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2021
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Brilliant dialog kept me enthralled--you skillfully manage the nuances of relationships, which is the hallmark of a fine writer--characters and interactions are rich and real.
Comment Written 24-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2021
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Sankey
So glad to be getting to your wonderful writing again. All my favourite prose folks keep me going. FS was playing up earlier but glad that is fixed. Not a spag anywhere. Good work.
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2021
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So glad to be getting to your wonderful writing again. All my favourite prose folks keep me going. FS was playing up earlier but glad that is fixed. Not a spag anywhere. Good work.
Comment Written 24-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2021
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from BethShelby
This is a fun chapter. Nothing like parents trying to play matchmaker. I've never done that or had it done to me either. Sometimes you're better off finding your own mate. My son had a friend set him up and that seems to be working so far. I"m enjoying this story. Everyone in this town seems willing to help.
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2021
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This is a fun chapter. Nothing like parents trying to play matchmaker. I've never done that or had it done to me either. Sometimes you're better off finding your own mate. My son had a friend set him up and that seems to be working so far. I"m enjoying this story. Everyone in this town seems willing to help.
Comment Written 24-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2021
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from RPSaxena
Hello Barbara.Wilkey,
Nice piece of Fiction in continuation having lucid as well as perfectly matching the theme phraseology, captivating flow throughout from the beginning to the end, and beautifully depicting its theme with HOOK in the end.
The story with romantic flavor is moving forward in an interesting way.
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2021
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Hello Barbara.Wilkey,
Nice piece of Fiction in continuation having lucid as well as perfectly matching the theme phraseology, captivating flow throughout from the beginning to the end, and beautifully depicting its theme with HOOK in the end.
The story with romantic flavor is moving forward in an interesting way.
Comment Written 24-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2021
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Thank you for the kind review.
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Barbara.Wilkey, Most Welcome!
With best wishes,
~ RP
Comment from Jay Squires
As usual, meaningful movement forward toward a relationship. Good stuff. The few glitches I found, you probably have already had pointed out to you.
Katherine walked into living room avoided eye contact with Angie. [... walked into THE living room...]
After Katherine point to a place in the closet, [... Katherine POINTED to... These appear to be only oversights, like you were in a hurry to post.]
Dang it, I like Gabriel.
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2021
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As usual, meaningful movement forward toward a relationship. Good stuff. The few glitches I found, you probably have already had pointed out to you.
Katherine walked into living room avoided eye contact with Angie. [... walked into THE living room...]
After Katherine point to a place in the closet, [... Katherine POINTED to... These appear to be only oversights, like you were in a hurry to post.]
Dang it, I like Gabriel.
Comment Written 24-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2021
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Thank you for the kind review. I am hoping somebody likes Gabriel, a few do not.
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What?! I like Gabriel.
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Many people feel he's too pushy. But I see a soft side to him.
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Definitely a soft side. Especially since the reader is privy to what Katherine even isn't ... which is Gabriel's conversations with the other teachers. There is nothing duplicitous in his actions. He always does what he perceives is the best thing for Katherine.
Comment from judiverse
That background about Gabriel as a professional football player is excellent. It really explains a lot behind him. Not much is said about his reasons for returning to coach at the high school. Being near his parents seems a good reason, though. It seems like there's a lot of match-making going on. That might be enough to put Katherine off. I'll be eager to see how school goes, now that Katherine is getting settled. Great chapter. judi
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2021
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That background about Gabriel as a professional football player is excellent. It really explains a lot behind him. Not much is said about his reasons for returning to coach at the high school. Being near his parents seems a good reason, though. It seems like there's a lot of match-making going on. That might be enough to put Katherine off. I'll be eager to see how school goes, now that Katherine is getting settled. Great chapter. judi
Comment Written 24-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2021
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More on Gabriel will be learned as we go on. Also please remember he also had a career ending knee injury. That's already been said. Thank you for the kind review.
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You're welcome. I feel like I know a lot more about why Gabriel acts the way he does. judi
Comment from Ric Myworld
Well, although I could give you a six on every post, I give most of them to new writers who need the encouragement and motivation. But every now and then, I just like to give you a little of the well deserved appreciation. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2021
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Well, although I could give you a six on every post, I give most of them to new writers who need the encouragement and motivation. But every now and then, I just like to give you a little of the well deserved appreciation. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 24-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2021
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Thank you for the encouragement.
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Barb
You chapter in the book Football - A Novel
Football Chapter 10 part 2
I don't know what other reviewers are saying about this chapter.
I like the way your way of writing draws one to see what happens next. I'm looking froward to your next chapter to find out the match making is doing.
Gert
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2021
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Hello Barb
You chapter in the book Football - A Novel
Football Chapter 10 part 2
I don't know what other reviewers are saying about this chapter.
I like the way your way of writing draws one to see what happens next. I'm looking froward to your next chapter to find out the match making is doing.
Gert
Comment Written 24-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2021
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Thank you for the kind review. Rarely do I get a bad review, but I do get them.
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You are so welcome Barb
Gert