The Voyager
A poem describing myself143 total reviews
Comment from Rondeno
Okay, it's about wanting to live the Christian life, but despairing about ever getting the benefits. Maybe the idea isn't to expect paydirt? And I hope the Lord gives you some guidance on full stops (periods), because you're running riot with them.
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2013
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Okay, it's about wanting to live the Christian life, but despairing about ever getting the benefits. Maybe the idea isn't to expect paydirt? And I hope the Lord gives you some guidance on full stops (periods), because you're running riot with them.
Comment Written 11-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2013
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Thank you Rondeno.
Comment from MikoAmaya
I'm glad you were able to find peace within Jesus. I myself still struggle in this goal, but your poem has helped lighten my day. Thank you for sharing. ~ MikoAmaya
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I'm glad you were able to find peace within Jesus. I myself still struggle in this goal, but your poem has helped lighten my day. Thank you for sharing. ~ MikoAmaya
Comment Written 11-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2013
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Glad I could make your day better Miko. Thank you for your review.
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
If this is your experience. I feel very, very sorry for you. Praise God it wasn't my experience. Thank you for sharing your opinion my friend.
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If this is your experience. I feel very, very sorry for you. Praise God it wasn't my experience. Thank you for sharing your opinion my friend.
Comment Written 11-Oct-2013
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Thank you Poet.
Comment from Auroraboreal800
This is a very interesting biographical spiritual poem. Very well written, with a unique flow. I enjoyed the rhyme scheme.
GREAT job Justin!
:)
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This is a very interesting biographical spiritual poem. Very well written, with a unique flow. I enjoyed the rhyme scheme.
GREAT job Justin!
:)
Comment Written 11-Oct-2013
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Thank you Aurora.
Comment from nelliesellie
The world can make us feel alone. We can live in the same place for years and the world can change around us. It makes us feel like a stranger. We have to keep reaching out. Reach out to Jesus and his other creatures. We have to work at being part of his family. He is always there for us. We are not always there for him. Good work
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The world can make us feel alone. We can live in the same place for years and the world can change around us. It makes us feel like a stranger. We have to keep reaching out. Reach out to Jesus and his other creatures. We have to work at being part of his family. He is always there for us. We are not always there for him. Good work
Comment Written 11-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2013
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Thank you Nellie.
Comment from c_lucas
The Promise is "Ask and it shall be given unto you. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
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The Promise is "Ask and it shall be given unto you. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
Comment Written 11-Oct-2013
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Thank you lucas.
Comment from tbacha58
The world around me is changing
And in its transformation I can feel.
I'm losing touch with reality
And no longer distinguish what is false or what is real.
Justin, Your poem is sincere and beautifully written. Your honesty exists in your poem, and you are crying for Help. But from whom are you asking for Help, Jesus will help you, if you start by creating choices, nobody can help you, if you do not help yourself first.
You writing this poem, there must be many things in your actual life you don't like it, start by forcing yourself to eliminate what you don't like about your life, when you do that, choose to start feeling happy with what you have, and from here on, you will be thinking positive, and you will then realize that Jesus is helping you to choose how you want to live, with what and with whom.
Hope I helped. Terry. I am a mother and grandmother of 76 years old.
Take care, hold your life , and press it to your heart, as a good person with no remorse.
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2013
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The world around me is changing
And in its transformation I can feel.
I'm losing touch with reality
And no longer distinguish what is false or what is real.
Justin, Your poem is sincere and beautifully written. Your honesty exists in your poem, and you are crying for Help. But from whom are you asking for Help, Jesus will help you, if you start by creating choices, nobody can help you, if you do not help yourself first.
You writing this poem, there must be many things in your actual life you don't like it, start by forcing yourself to eliminate what you don't like about your life, when you do that, choose to start feeling happy with what you have, and from here on, you will be thinking positive, and you will then realize that Jesus is helping you to choose how you want to live, with what and with whom.
Hope I helped. Terry. I am a mother and grandmother of 76 years old.
Take care, hold your life , and press it to your heart, as a good person with no remorse.
Comment Written 11-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2013
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Thank you 58.
Comment from Tomes Johnston
This is an interesting poem that the author has created with this piece of writing. The writer tells the reader of a life-long journey in search of God.
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This is an interesting poem that the author has created with this piece of writing. The writer tells the reader of a life-long journey in search of God.
Comment Written 11-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2013
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Thanks Tomes.
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My pleasure.
Comment from Ben Colder
Baptism in the Holy Spirit normally solves this problem among young Christians. Paul as the group one time "Have you received the Holy Spirit since you first believe?" Those men received the Holy Spirit right then and was given strength to never face this poem's meaning. Very nicely done poet. It is only a suggestion if you have not yet received it.
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Baptism in the Holy Spirit normally solves this problem among young Christians. Paul as the group one time "Have you received the Holy Spirit since you first believe?" Those men received the Holy Spirit right then and was given strength to never face this poem's meaning. Very nicely done poet. It is only a suggestion if you have not yet received it.
Comment Written 11-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2013
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Thank you Ben.
Comment from Montrosem
Dear Justin, in principle some good ideas but there is insufficient euphony to drive it along. It is, essentially cut-up prose with the odd rhyme tossed in but poetry needs to be far more than that to carry the reader 'off on the wings of song' - which is what poetry should do. Music and dance are the oldest aphrodisiacs - translators of our Spirit - which it is poetry's job to harness to carry the reader beyond the meaning of the words. He should finish a verse not only 'changed' but moved out of himself by the poet's skill with words. Words are the tools of thought for prose but used with the magic of music and dance distil an alchemy far into The Spirit's Body. Try re-crafting it to sing and dance. Yours Margaret Montrose
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Dear Justin, in principle some good ideas but there is insufficient euphony to drive it along. It is, essentially cut-up prose with the odd rhyme tossed in but poetry needs to be far more than that to carry the reader 'off on the wings of song' - which is what poetry should do. Music and dance are the oldest aphrodisiacs - translators of our Spirit - which it is poetry's job to harness to carry the reader beyond the meaning of the words. He should finish a verse not only 'changed' but moved out of himself by the poet's skill with words. Words are the tools of thought for prose but used with the magic of music and dance distil an alchemy far into The Spirit's Body. Try re-crafting it to sing and dance. Yours Margaret Montrose
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Comment Written 11-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2013
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Thank you Margaret. By the way what is Euphony?
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Euphony; â??The quality of having a pleasant sound; the pleasing effect of sounds free from harshness: chiefly with reference to combinations of words in sentences, or of phonetic elements in spoken words. b.b In recent philological use often: The tendency to greater ease of pronunciation, as shown in those combinatory phonetic changes formerly ascribed to an endeavour after a pleasing acoustic effect". So says the Oxford English Dictionary the full 30 volumes of which I have on my hard drive when I am writing for constant reference - a vital tool for the effective Craft of Words.
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Thanks.