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CSP: A Collection of Poems

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A collection of poetry

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Comment from sara-beth
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I like this, the biting and consuming references give a feeling that winter is gobbing up the other seasons and taking over for a while,......cool imagery.

 Comment Written 24-Nov-2008

reply by the author on 24-Nov-2008
    Sara-beth, I was so pleased to find those words deep inside; to feel the winter's boldness (how dare he!) to take over from the autumn. I really appreciate your most kind comments and review! With regards, Sue
Comment from nancyjam
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Your words paint a lovely picture
in the mind of the reader. i love
the line "Winter's bite blanches"
very fresh and original. Good Job.

 Comment Written 24-Nov-2008

reply by the author on 24-Nov-2008
    Nancy, thank you so much for your most kind words and generous review. And thank you for highlighting the words that you felt. With warmest regards, Sue
Comment from Eternal Muse
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I absolutely adore this haiku, and what a great picture! Excellent metaphor use. Loved "Winter's bit blanches". Good satori (moment of insight) in the last line. A very strong contender for the Haiku contest, good luck with that! I enjoyed the write.

 Comment Written 24-Nov-2008

reply by the author on 24-Nov-2008
    Yeltel, I am so humbled by your words. My first haiku and have learned so much from it! Thank you for letting me know what satori means! HA!! I love this site. Learning so much and great people here. Your generous review is so much appreciated. Warmest regards, Sue
Comment from Charles Keith
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Hi Six,
Definitely a good haiku, about nature and the ravages of the winter and its dormancy. I definitely had the image of winter wasteland in mind.

Good luck

Keith

 Comment Written 24-Nov-2008

reply by the author on 24-Nov-2008
    Keith, I really appreciate your very kind words and most generous review. So glad you enjoyed it! With regards, Sue
Comment from electroswiftword
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A very unique expression with an exceptional artistic scheme. I am impressed that so much can be expressed in such a short way with art. Bravo Sixteezkid.
Will

 Comment Written 24-Nov-2008

reply by the author on 24-Nov-2008
    Will, thank you so very much for your review and uplifting comments! I was also very surprised how much imagery can fill so few words. My first haiku and I will try more! Warmest regards, Sue
Comment from kassey
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A good Haiku is generally about nature and the seasons and you have managed to bring three of the four seasons into this short work. Very well done, the descriptions are great.
Excellent work Kay

 Comment Written 24-Nov-2008

reply by the author on 24-Nov-2008
    Kassey, I really appreciate your most generous review and your specific comments. So happy you liked the way the 3 seasons were in there. Much appreciated and with best regards, Sue
Comment from starman
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Great picture, the cold, penetrating grayness of the vision is really echoed through your excellent haiku. Well done. Loved it.

;)s

 Comment Written 24-Nov-2008

reply by the author on 24-Nov-2008
    Starman, thank you for your most generous review. Glad you like the pic. Says it all, huh? Now we're in it for the long-haul here in the Midwest! Yikes!
    So glad you enjoyed the piece. Much appreciated and with regards, Sue
Comment from skye
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The dreariness of the gray, black and white picture is repeated in your lines, and both are stronger for this partnership.
Great haiku, with depth and chill.
Well done.

 Comment Written 24-Nov-2008

reply by the author on 24-Nov-2008
    Skye, thank you so much for your very generous review and specific comments. Most appreciated and with regards, Sue
Comment from honeytree
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"Winter's bite blanches,
consuming autumn's colors.
The ground waits for spring."

Frozen food fields
colors of autumn
earth wanting springtime.

The picture was excellent and the words likewise.

honeytree.

 Comment Written 24-Nov-2008

reply by the author on 24-Nov-2008
    Honeytree, thank you so much for your very generous review and very uplifting comments. Love your response in your own poem! Lovely! With warmest regards, Sue
reply by honeytree on 24-Nov-2008
    I am glad you likedthe review.All the best. Honeytree.
Comment from NightWriter
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"Warmth Lies Dormant" is a well written, beautifully told poem. The ground isn't the only thing waiting for spring. Poem reads smooth, with perfect rhythm from beginning to end.

 Comment Written 23-Nov-2008

reply by the author on 23-Nov-2008
    NightWriter, thank you for your lovely comments and most generous review! So glad you liked it. You're not kidding about wanting it to be Spring! With best regards, Sue