CSP: A Collection of Poems
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Comment from tony bronk
I know a few people with autism and the parents are just wonderful people. It takes great strength and loads of love and a big heart to stay commited and loving. I applaud you for being as loving to your child as you certainy appear to be. Your art is lovely. tony
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I know a few people with autism and the parents are just wonderful people. It takes great strength and loads of love and a big heart to stay commited and loving. I applaud you for being as loving to your child as you certainy appear to be. Your art is lovely. tony
Comment Written 25-Nov-2008
Comment from Mrs. KT
Hello!
I was so thrilled to see "tetractys" as it is one of my favorite forms of poetry. Yours is well-stated and conceptualized. However, the syllabic count is as follows: 1,2,3,4,10. If you were to count the syllables in the last line, there are eleven in your offering. I believe the confusion may rest with dif/fer/ent. Two suggestions: change different to unique or post a note that you have chosen to use the less common/alternative syllablic pronunciation of different and cite a well-recognized source. Tetractys are really lovely centered on the page as well. Hope this helps.
diane
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2008
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Hello!
I was so thrilled to see "tetractys" as it is one of my favorite forms of poetry. Yours is well-stated and conceptualized. However, the syllabic count is as follows: 1,2,3,4,10. If you were to count the syllables in the last line, there are eleven in your offering. I believe the confusion may rest with dif/fer/ent. Two suggestions: change different to unique or post a note that you have chosen to use the less common/alternative syllablic pronunciation of different and cite a well-recognized source. Tetractys are really lovely centered on the page as well. Hope this helps.
diane
Comment Written 25-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2008
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I was WONDERING if anyone might find that ambiguous syllable! Ha! Thank you SO much for your very helpful idea on "justifying" the more common pronunciation of DIF-FRENT. Ha! But, as you noted, it should be posted. I didn't realize you could center the lines. I REALLY wanted to! Going to go do that right now. Your review is very generous, but more importantly, taking the time to help! Much appreciated and with warm regards, Sue
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Mrs. K.T. - I have made all your suggested changes and it is GREAT! The centering of the lines "makes it"!!!! And I did pen a note for reader regarding the word 'different'. Most helpful and I am honored you read and liked my poem!
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Hello! Oh...the centering really makes your poem shine. And your explanation of "different" tells the world that you are in command of your offering! Will change my rating, and now...try a multiple tetractys...just for fun!!! Be Well...diane
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You can BET that I'll be doing more tetractys! LOVE IT! It suits me so well. Just like the other day I tried a haiku for the first time. Love that, also.
I like the challenge of getting an image in my mind and having that strict discipline to conjure it all up into VERY few words. I have always liked to be succinct anyway. So, I guess it's right up my alley!
Again, thank you so kindly for your help. I am MOST pleased at how it presents now with the centering. And thanks for the Bonus upgrade! HA!!
Warmest regards,
Sue
P.S. Do you have any in your profile??
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Hello Sue!
Comment from desertpoem
good read here..so few words on such a topic..which i feel is getting in front of the public more and more...nice work..fg
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good read here..so few words on such a topic..which i feel is getting in front of the public more and more...nice work..fg
Comment Written 25-Nov-2008
Comment from JeffreyStone
Where have you been? I am glad I discovered your poetry. This one is succinct and profound. You used the perfect visual to frame your enigma. Best Regards, JeffreyStone.
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Where have you been? I am glad I discovered your poetry. This one is succinct and profound. You used the perfect visual to frame your enigma. Best Regards, JeffreyStone.
Comment Written 25-Nov-2008
Comment from Josipher32
For those unfamiliar with the tetractys format, you may want to add in your author's notes what a tetractys is, so reader's can rate accordingly and fairly. Not just providing a link that noone really has the time to look up.Just a thought. Not trying to be negative.
I have forgotten the rules of a tetractys poem, therefore, I cannot rate on technicality, bit it seems like a very good subject matter, nonetheless.
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For those unfamiliar with the tetractys format, you may want to add in your author's notes what a tetractys is, so reader's can rate accordingly and fairly. Not just providing a link that noone really has the time to look up.Just a thought. Not trying to be negative.
I have forgotten the rules of a tetractys poem, therefore, I cannot rate on technicality, bit it seems like a very good subject matter, nonetheless.
Comment Written 25-Nov-2008
Comment from Penpal
This piece is very well conceived. Keeping to the basics it actually overwhelms the reader with the same question in the end. Nicely done, and what a marvelous piece of art.
Penpal
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This piece is very well conceived. Keeping to the basics it actually overwhelms the reader with the same question in the end. Nicely done, and what a marvelous piece of art.
Penpal
Comment Written 25-Nov-2008
Comment from Charles Keith
Hi Six,
I worthy poem, and a very good question. I hope you can get folks to think about this.
I recently read a prize winning book about a boy suffering from asperge syndrom from his POV.
it is called 'The Curious Incident Of The Dog In The Night'
I goes a long way to help folks understand the difficulties of autism.
Best Wishes
Keith
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2008
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Hi Six,
I worthy poem, and a very good question. I hope you can get folks to think about this.
I recently read a prize winning book about a boy suffering from asperge syndrom from his POV.
it is called 'The Curious Incident Of The Dog In The Night'
I goes a long way to help folks understand the difficulties of autism.
Best Wishes
Keith
Comment Written 25-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2008
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Now THAT was a fascinating book and funny as all get-up! Funny (ha ha) and Funny (strange)! My daughter has a great sense of humor. She can talk a bit, but only if she chooses. But when something strikes her funny, she will let you know about it. Ha! I have found that writing this poem and doing that painting has helped me express some very deep feelings about it all. Much needed, I guess. I thank you so much for your very generous review and comments. Most sincerely, Sue
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
This is very well done autism I feel is a different world to us they see all that we see but with innocence they are very lovable children and a gift well done on this piece regards Fuller
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This is very well done autism I feel is a different world to us they see all that we see but with innocence they are very lovable children and a gift well done on this piece regards Fuller
Comment Written 25-Nov-2008
Comment from c_lucas
A very well written poem about a sad subject. It has good imagery and descriptive scheme. I think you might find neuroplasticity helpful. There has been some success with altruism.
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A very well written poem about a sad subject. It has good imagery and descriptive scheme. I think you might find neuroplasticity helpful. There has been some success with altruism.
Comment Written 25-Nov-2008
Comment from Brandenpaul
So much said with so little written. I haven't seen this kind of writing before-I like it. Thanks for the link, I don't know much about autism, but know more now.
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So much said with so little written. I haven't seen this kind of writing before-I like it. Thanks for the link, I don't know much about autism, but know more now.
Comment Written 25-Nov-2008