Steve's Poems for Kids
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Comment from expressions9
Pets? A plane of her own? Holidays whenever? Even dolls living in luxury? This child is truly spoilt. Well written poem. Very amusing!! :)
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2012
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Pets? A plane of her own? Holidays whenever? Even dolls living in luxury? This child is truly spoilt. Well written poem. Very amusing!! :)
Comment Written 24-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2012
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Poor little rich girl - I wanna be her!
Thanks for the kind words.
Steve
Comment from Hollyhock
Certainly a different view on the effect of spoiling.
This fairly bounces along, it has what I call a "jolly" rhythm and tone. Not meant to be taken too seriously, but to be enjoyed.
Must say I was not expecting the last two lines.
Entertaining write.
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reply by the author on 27-Sep-2012
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Certainly a different view on the effect of spoiling.
This fairly bounces along, it has what I call a "jolly" rhythm and tone. Not meant to be taken too seriously, but to be enjoyed.
Must say I was not expecting the last two lines.
Entertaining write.
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Comment Written 24-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2012
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Thank you - I generally try to anticipate what others will write and go in the opposite direction so I deliberately steered away from the spoilt brat gets a comeuppance story.
Steve
Comment from visionary1234
Oh Steve you always crack me up with your wit, and this one's no exception! love:
"Annabel's dolls had a house of their own
with a sauna, a lounge and a loo."
And your last verse was WONDERFUL - She can be a spoilt little brat and still live to 105, no worries! :) Sharyn
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reply by the author on 27-Sep-2012
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Oh Steve you always crack me up with your wit, and this one's no exception! love:
"Annabel's dolls had a house of their own
with a sauna, a lounge and a loo."
And your last verse was WONDERFUL - She can be a spoilt little brat and still live to 105, no worries! :) Sharyn
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Comment Written 24-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2012
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Yeah, wanted to teer away from the moralistic 'spoilt brat comes to sticky end' story.
Thanks for thr kind words.
steve