CSP: A Collection of Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 52 "Embracing the Light"A collection of poetry
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Comment from Perp Ihebom
Nice poem, well worded. The underlying message in the poem is the need to have and hang unto hope no matter how bleak life looks. Good thythm and rhymes too. kudos
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2009
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Nice poem, well worded. The underlying message in the poem is the need to have and hang unto hope no matter how bleak life looks. Good thythm and rhymes too. kudos
Comment Written 13-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2009
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Perp, yes...hope no matter what others around say. As there are many who give up or are negative. Thanks very much for your review. Sue
Comment from Hitcher
Subconsciously you made the right decision friend, people who wallow in self pity are not much fun to kick around with now are they? You my friend are a treat! Great poem, as always, guess that's why you are at Number 3 Sue!
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2009
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Subconsciously you made the right decision friend, people who wallow in self pity are not much fun to kick around with now are they? You my friend are a treat! Great poem, as always, guess that's why you are at Number 3 Sue!
Comment Written 12-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2009
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Yeah, can't hang around negativity for too long, Hitch. People will drag your butt down! Thanks so much for your very encouraging review! Sue
Comment from Joan E.
Your poem is a great lesson in one's ability to break the "nurture" syndrome. Your rhymes are very strong and the ensemble makes an excellent contest entry. I also enjoyed your alliteration in stanza one and the picture you chose. You are a "lighthouse"--leading the way as a unique, enlightened role model.
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2009
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Your poem is a great lesson in one's ability to break the "nurture" syndrome. Your rhymes are very strong and the ensemble makes an excellent contest entry. I also enjoyed your alliteration in stanza one and the picture you chose. You are a "lighthouse"--leading the way as a unique, enlightened role model.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2009
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Joan, thanks for your lovely words. I am living proof we can carve our own way in this life and does not have to mimic those around us. Thanks for your very kind review and pointing out the stanza you liked. Always a help. With warmest regards, Sue
Comment from adewpearl
a strong rhyming poem that has good meter and follows the life lessons rule of the contest by discussing how your family lived with negativity which you made a decision to break away from. To toss aside self-inflicted wounds - that sure is one great way to move on. Well-written. Brooke
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2009
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a strong rhyming poem that has good meter and follows the life lessons rule of the contest by discussing how your family lived with negativity which you made a decision to break away from. To toss aside self-inflicted wounds - that sure is one great way to move on. Well-written. Brooke
Comment Written 12-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2009
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Thanks much for your review, Brooke. And for your compliments. :-) Sue
Comment from amada
Your words are so bright and cheerful that is a pleasure to write your work. Here I am touched by "Subconsciously, I must have told myself Self-pity was not what I would embrace." I experienced this: I told myself: I will be entirely the other way.
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2009
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Your words are so bright and cheerful that is a pleasure to write your work. Here I am touched by "Subconsciously, I must have told myself Self-pity was not what I would embrace." I experienced this: I told myself: I will be entirely the other way.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2009
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Very cool to meet a fellow survivor of negativity in our midst, yet overcoming. Thanks for sharing that. And for your very generous review. Much appreciated, Sue
Comment from bluefly
Hi Sue,
This is a well written poem with good rhyming (especially liked see/family) and a clear, well stated lesson, one that people are much better off to have learned.
Best of luck in the voting booth.
Scott
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2009
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Hi Sue,
This is a well written poem with good rhyming (especially liked see/family) and a clear, well stated lesson, one that people are much better off to have learned.
Best of luck in the voting booth.
Scott
Comment Written 12-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2009
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bluefly, thank you for your very kind compliments and review. Really appreciate it. Sue
Comment from Domino
This is SO positive, Sue.
Sonnet structure but ABCB rhyme scheme allows you freeer expression, and you express so well. This attitude is the right attitude, though easier said than done for many, of course. You, for sure, seem ta be a survivor and a winner.
Wonderful rhyme, meter and content.
Love, Ray xx
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2009
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This is SO positive, Sue.
Sonnet structure but ABCB rhyme scheme allows you freeer expression, and you express so well. This attitude is the right attitude, though easier said than done for many, of course. You, for sure, seem ta be a survivor and a winner.
Wonderful rhyme, meter and content.
Love, Ray xx
Comment Written 12-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2009
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Yes, that's why I wrote "subconsciously". Hell, I don't know what made me decide at a young age not to go in that ugly direction. But, I learned so much from it. Thanks so much for your great critique and review. Big hugs, Sue
Comment from joan marie
Somebody showed me about using a ' if you think the syllable count will be counted in two different ways. I did it with camera/cam'ra. Family is pronounced with two syllables but I count pronounced not written. I guess some don't, just a tip I learned and it helps. Great write. Standing tall does help us see the big picture. joan marie
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2009
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Somebody showed me about using a ' if you think the syllable count will be counted in two different ways. I did it with camera/cam'ra. Family is pronounced with two syllables but I count pronounced not written. I guess some don't, just a tip I learned and it helps. Great write. Standing tall does help us see the big picture. joan marie
Comment Written 12-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2009
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Yeah, I do that if the word is definitely not "legally" right. But since family is pronounced both ways, I'm legal. LOL! That's why I put the dictionary quote there. Thanks for your comments, though and your very kind review. Sue
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I know we are not all degreed in creative writing but people need to think and learn. Be flexible. I agree with you. It is easier I guess to us the notes than explain to those calling you on it. jm
Comment from rmdelta
sue, well, it certainly looked alright to me and being the expert, I give it 5 stars. I wish you all the luck in the world in the contest, my friend. I think it is a great poem. But then, that's just me.
Reggie
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2009
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sue, well, it certainly looked alright to me and being the expert, I give it 5 stars. I wish you all the luck in the world in the contest, my friend. I think it is a great poem. But then, that's just me.
Reggie
Comment Written 12-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2009
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Reggie, Thanks so much for your well-wishes and your great review. Glad you liked it! :-)) Sue
Comment from jeslaf
Sue this follows the contest challenge perfectly and I especially like your choice of moral lesson learned, because it applies to all of us, even if it's not our family's influence/negativity, it's all around, everywhere, and we must all choose to rise above. Good one! :)
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Sue this follows the contest challenge perfectly and I especially like your choice of moral lesson learned, because it applies to all of us, even if it's not our family's influence/negativity, it's all around, everywhere, and we must all choose to rise above. Good one! :)
Comment Written 12-Feb-2009