Comment from cheyennewy

Exceptional

Hi Sue...I have read several of these naani poems tonight but this one is by far the best. It is a novel idea for this type poem and in three lines you have told an immense story. Well done....good luck in the contest...blessings....chey

 Comment Written 03-Dec-2008

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reply by the author on 03-Dec-2008

Chey, you just 'rocked my world'!!! Ha! So stoked because I hesitated to take the pepsi challenge on this contest. But, always wanting to grow, I did it. And to have your 6-star rating is AWESOME!!! They are, indeed, a precious commodity and I most certainly thank you for spending it on my work!

Your very kind words are most appreciated! And, again, I thank you.

Warmest regards,
Sue

Comment from Lois Delaney

Excellent

Excellent! This applies to me except on a writing sheet. Words and thoughts compare to writer's block. This refers to the same idea. Where do I begin?

This is a real good entry. I'm afraid there are some real good ones to battle, but I think you have a good chance. Blessing, dear one.

 Comment Written 03-Dec-2008

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reply by the author on 03-Dec-2008

Cher, thanks for sharing your own feelings about that pesky 'blank'. Ha! Indeed, there are some excellent entries in this contest and I'm just so glad I entered it....learning so many different forms of poetry. Very challenging. I thank you very much for your kind review and lovely comments. Warmest regards, Sue

Comment from debskatz

Excellent

Hey,

Now I really like this one! I can just feel the feelings of the canvass. It's really quite good. Good luck in the contest!

smiles,

deb

 Comment Written 03-Dec-2008

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reply by the author on 03-Dec-2008

Deb, thanks for saying so!! And for your great review. I'm glad you "knew" that canvas had a personality!! ha! Much appreciated, Sue

reply by debskatz on 03-Dec-2008

Well, I reviewed this poem for 3 reasons; 1) it's a great poem 2) it paid well 3) now that i've reviewed it, when I go to vote tomorrow it'll show up that i've reviewed it & won't have to go read all of them again! and since I can't vote for my own, i reckon i'll vote for yours! LOL

dang, gotta go to bed! Night!

deb

Comment from c_lucas

Excellent

Nothing can be more aggravating then a blank page, or canvass. Very well written with good cadence. It has good imagery and descriptive scheme.

 Comment Written 02-Dec-2008

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reply by the author on 03-Dec-2008

thanks for your review, lucas. Really appreciate it. And for your specific comments! With regards, Sue

reply by c_lucas on 03-Dec-2008

You're welcome, Sue. Charlie

reply by the author on 03-Dec-2008

Sorry for the Lucas. I'm learning so many people's names on here and "Charlie" dropped out of my brain! Ha!

reply by c_lucas on 03-Dec-2008

Hi Sue. "Lucas" is a variation of my middle name, "Luther" I plan to write under the names of Charles Lucas. Charlie

Comment from Nicnac

Excellent

Sue,
I love these different styles I'm seeing on FanStory. I love learning new things. :)
This is a fabulous poem. Funny - but your poem about the blank canvas is full of imagery. LOL

(You stated this poem has 22 syllables - but I counted only 21. LOL Maybe my southern accent?) ha ;)

Great job. Best wishes in the contest.
~Nic

 Comment Written 02-Dec-2008

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reply by the author on 02-Dec-2008

hmmmm. maybe it's the word "genius" - could be 'jee-nus' or 'jee-nee-us' (perhaps). I'd better go back and count! HA! Thanks so much for this great review and so glad you saw the humour in it all. With regards, Sue

Comment from adewpearl

Excellent

I feel this way about my notebook sometimes, as if it is either longing for me to pick it up or defying me to! LOL
This form does not allow you many words with which to express yourself, and you have packed every syllable with meaning - a great personification.

 Comment Written 02-Dec-2008

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reply by the author on 02-Dec-2008

Brooke, thanks for your comment about "personificatin". I really wanted to make that canvas be alive! (as your notebook speaks to you! -ha!)......Thanks so much for your great review...Yours, Sue

Comment from JoAnna Lee

Excellent

Very well done! This is one of the best of these I've read thus far. This could be a close contest!!! I wish you well. BRAVO!

Thanks for sharing,
Donna

 Comment Written 02-Dec-2008

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reply by the author on 02-Dec-2008

Ohhhh, I like photo-finishes! Ha!! I'm glad I entered this contest, as I had not heard of a Naani before. Loved the challenge. Thank you for our very kind review and words of encouragement! With regards, Sue

Comment from amada

Excellent

Very original work. I like the idea of the empty canvas and the blank sheet of paper that all we writers face. I wish you the best in the contest.

 Comment Written 02-Dec-2008

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reply by the author on 02-Dec-2008

amada, I'm so glad you enjoyed this piece. Thank you for your well-wishes and for your most generous review. With regards, Sue

Comment from starman

Excellent

That's an excellent Naani. I think as artistes, we're always looking for that elsuive moment of inspiration, and it can take a long time sometimes. lol. Nice work.

;)s

 Comment Written 02-Dec-2008

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reply by the author on 02-Dec-2008

Starman, thank you so much for reading this work. My first Naani (couldn't pass up the challenge!). Learning by the day here on fanstory with thanks to those like you offering encouraging words and constructive critique. And I thank you for your generous review. Most appreciated, Sue

Comment from mamaboots

Excellent

Hello Sixteezkid,
This is very cool! I am not familiar with this form, but according to the contest directions given, it follows the rules. If art mediums could talk, I think this is what they would say. I have no suggestions for this lovely poem. Good luck in the contest and have a wonderful day, mamaboots

 Comment Written 02-Dec-2008

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reply by the author on 02-Dec-2008

mamaboots, how kind of you to read my work and offer your encouraging words. I thank you for your generous review and specific critique. With regards, Sue