CSP: A Collection of Poems
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Comment from Scarlettdreams
We cannot understand their world unfortunately. My heart goes out to you. The picture and the words in this piece capture well your feelings. Bravo
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We cannot understand their world unfortunately. My heart goes out to you. The picture and the words in this piece capture well your feelings. Bravo
Comment Written 25-Nov-2008
Comment from JoAnna Lee
I think your syllable choice in the last line is just fine.
Very well chosen words... you have described this condition well.
Thanks for sharing,
Donna
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I think your syllable choice in the last line is just fine.
Very well chosen words... you have described this condition well.
Thanks for sharing,
Donna
Comment Written 25-Nov-2008
Comment from mindseye
I like this poetic form, and I think you did a very good job for your first time! You chose very descriptive yet simple words to describe the disorder your daughter deals with everyday.
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I like this poetic form, and I think you did a very good job for your first time! You chose very descriptive yet simple words to describe the disorder your daughter deals with everyday.
Comment Written 25-Nov-2008
Comment from electroswiftword
I believe your offering is a good example of a tetractys.
Your artistic scheme and word choice born together to simply a rather complex disorder. Good job. Will
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I believe your offering is a good example of a tetractys.
Your artistic scheme and word choice born together to simply a rather complex disorder. Good job. Will
Comment Written 25-Nov-2008
Comment from kassey
Such a dreadful sickness for you to bear for your child and you described it well and simply in these few words.
I have done a tetractys and found it a nice simple way of expression. Excellent Kay
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Such a dreadful sickness for you to bear for your child and you described it well and simply in these few words.
I have done a tetractys and found it a nice simple way of expression. Excellent Kay
Comment Written 25-Nov-2008
Comment from Curt Mongold
Having had no children of my own, i can only imagine the unique challenges and joys raising an autistic child would bring. I don't think we can ever truly know what goes on in the mind of someone who does not interact or communicate with the world as we do, but that makes it no less special or equal to our own. In fact, they may have a "direct link" to a world we may never share.
Excellent presentation and artwork.
Sincerely,
Curt
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Having had no children of my own, i can only imagine the unique challenges and joys raising an autistic child would bring. I don't think we can ever truly know what goes on in the mind of someone who does not interact or communicate with the world as we do, but that makes it no less special or equal to our own. In fact, they may have a "direct link" to a world we may never share.
Excellent presentation and artwork.
Sincerely,
Curt
Comment Written 25-Nov-2008
Comment from madhilde
Hi Sixteezkid,
another nice poem. I like the other one better, I suppose because I could relate. I don't really have direct experience with autism, so it's a movie thing for me. Great picture choice.
Mad
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Hi Sixteezkid,
another nice poem. I like the other one better, I suppose because I could relate. I don't really have direct experience with autism, so it's a movie thing for me. Great picture choice.
Mad
Comment Written 25-Nov-2008
Comment from adewpearl
This is quite compelling - it so simply and directly confronts head-on the reality that is yours and your child's
The poetic form has served your subject well
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This is quite compelling - it so simply and directly confronts head-on the reality that is yours and your child's
The poetic form has served your subject well
Comment Written 25-Nov-2008
Comment from rmdelta
Sue,
Brilliant use of words. What a powerful writing of one of the illnesses in today's world that few can understand. I'm one who can't understand. Why children have to suffer when adults are better equiped for it. Yet, I have seen children take far more and still maintain their smile and love of life than can I.
Beautifully written, Sue and a job well done.
Reggie
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Sue,
Brilliant use of words. What a powerful writing of one of the illnesses in today's world that few can understand. I'm one who can't understand. Why children have to suffer when adults are better equiped for it. Yet, I have seen children take far more and still maintain their smile and love of life than can I.
Beautifully written, Sue and a job well done.
Reggie
Comment Written 25-Nov-2008
Comment from howaboutProust
I like this poem but I especially like the artwork that accompanies the poem. A brief description explaining the rules of a tetractys would be really helpful but thanks for including the link. It may be interesting to experiment with the layout of the words, for example centre them or stagger them and for me it would further improve the visual impact of the work. Obviously though that is just a personal preference :-)
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2008
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I like this poem but I especially like the artwork that accompanies the poem. A brief description explaining the rules of a tetractys would be really helpful but thanks for including the link. It may be interesting to experiment with the layout of the words, for example centre them or stagger them and for me it would further improve the visual impact of the work. Obviously though that is just a personal preference :-)
Comment Written 25-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2008
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Proust, what an excellent idea. I went straight to the editing room and added a 'blurb' about the art form of tetractys. (and kept the link for further info). THANK YOU!! It will be most helpful to the reader. And thank you for your most generous review and great comments! With warmest regards, Sue
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You're most welcome, I noticed that you have centred the words now - it looks good. I really enjoyed your post, it was a pleasure to review.
Jonathan