Love Long Distance
Viewing comments for Chapter 5 "Come Home to Me - Chapter 5"A Wartime Romance
19 total reviews
Comment from Lu Saluna
A very intense chapter. To be so close to death because of an accident. I was reading with such anticipation to what was going to happen next. You have left this chapter a real page turner. I look forward to reading the next one.
Just one little thing:
You also told me ( ) he and his father were the first father... - remove "that"
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2020
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A very intense chapter. To be so close to death because of an accident. I was reading with such anticipation to what was going to happen next. You have left this chapter a real page turner. I look forward to reading the next one.
Just one little thing:
You also told me ( ) he and his father were the first father... - remove "that"
Comment Written 30-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2020
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Hi Lu! We really appreciate you following along. So glad Chapter 5 filled you with such anticipation. Thank you so much for reading it. We currently have 21 chapters posted on FanStory, and Chapter 22 is in the works. Our desire is to make every chapter end in a page turner! Wishing you a wonderful Sunday and upcoming week. God Bless.
Respectfully with Admiration,
Bill and Cathy
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
I so hope he lives. Onto the next chapter. What a great story about the military and what they do. And I love the story about Cathy and her home life. Thank you for writing this wonderful chapter.
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2019
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I so hope he lives. Onto the next chapter. What a great story about the military and what they do. And I love the story about Cathy and her home life. Thank you for writing this wonderful chapter.
Comment Written 17-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2019
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Hi Rosemary! Yes, let's hope he lives! We are thrilled you are enjoying this. Glad you found this chapter wonderful. Thank you so much for reading and reviewing it.
God Bless,
Bill & Cathy
Comment from estory
I liked the hospital scene in this chapter the best; the frantic effort to save the soldier boy, came through in crisp dialogue and we feel the desperation of the young man fighting to give that last note to his love and stay alive. The poems from the wife to husband and husband to wife gave us a bit of a personal view into these private hearts, but they were a bit long. I think you could pare them down a bit and try to make them a little more personal, a little less cliché romantic. estory
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2019
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I liked the hospital scene in this chapter the best; the frantic effort to save the soldier boy, came through in crisp dialogue and we feel the desperation of the young man fighting to give that last note to his love and stay alive. The poems from the wife to husband and husband to wife gave us a bit of a personal view into these private hearts, but they were a bit long. I think you could pare them down a bit and try to make them a little more personal, a little less cliché romantic. estory
Comment Written 19-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2019
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Hi There! Thank you so much for coming back again to read Chapter 5 of Love Long Distance. We are glad you are following along with the story and appreciate your detailed comments. Moving forward, we will take into consideration your suggestion about the poetry. Good thought! Chapter 6 is in the works and coming soon.
God Bless,
Bill & Cathy
Comment from Artasylum
Tootie... what a beautiful love story I've been privy to played out in verse and words... this is a beautiful insight into you relationship and determination.. yours, Diana
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2019
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Tootie... what a beautiful love story I've been privy to played out in verse and words... this is a beautiful insight into you relationship and determination.. yours, Diana
Comment Written 19-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2019
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Hi Diana!
Thanks so much for reading and reviewing Chapter 5 of Love Long Distance. So glad you found our story to be beautiful. Chapter 6 is in the works and coming soon--we hope you continue to follow along!
God Bless,
Bill & Cathy
Comment from Diana L Crawford
One can clearly see how much these two love each other. And their poems to one another are excellent in themselves! So many lovers have to endure the pain of separation when war is at hand! Truly is sad but necessary thing in life for if we don't have those that will help to protect our country, then it is our loved ones who eventually suffer. I am definitely going back to read the prior chapters and look forward to future ones
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2019
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One can clearly see how much these two love each other. And their poems to one another are excellent in themselves! So many lovers have to endure the pain of separation when war is at hand! Truly is sad but necessary thing in life for if we don't have those that will help to protect our country, then it is our loved ones who eventually suffer. I am definitely going back to read the prior chapters and look forward to future ones
Comment Written 18-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2019
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Thank you so much for stopping by to read and review Chapter 5 of Love Long Distance. Awesome heartfelt comments! So glad you can see and feel the love they have for each other in this novel. Thank you also for going back to read and review the previous chapters.
God Bless,
Bill & Cathy
Comment from barkingdog
Oh, how terribly sad. They are so in love.
I'm still pulling for him. Hope he makes it in the next chapter.
You really captured the heartbreak of being apart and living with the fear of death every moment.
I saw no corrections ... edits.
Best of luck with your novel.
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2019
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Oh, how terribly sad. They are so in love.
I'm still pulling for him. Hope he makes it in the next chapter.
You really captured the heartbreak of being apart and living with the fear of death every moment.
I saw no corrections ... edits.
Best of luck with your novel.
Comment Written 18-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2019
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Hi There! So glad you found no errors. Thank you so much for reading and reviewing Chapter 5. Your comments are great! Thank you also for the good luck as we continue to write this novel. Chapter 6 is in the works and coming soon.
God Bless,
Bill & Cathy
Comment from Roxanna Andrews
Oh no! Bill is in trouble, but obviously he lives. So that good news. I found no errors and enjoyed reading it. Looking foward to the next chapter. Rox
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2019
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Oh no! Bill is in trouble, but obviously he lives. So that good news. I found no errors and enjoyed reading it. Looking foward to the next chapter. Rox
Comment Written 18-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2019
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Hi Rox! Thank you so much for reading and reviewing Chapter 5 of Love Long Distance. Also, for your continued support. We're happy to know that you are looking forward to the next chapter. It is being worked on now and will be posted soon.
God Bless,
Bill & Cathy
Comment from Robert Zimmerman
Well Tootie: You caught me with the previous chapter and it's pretty clear you will catch me with the next chapter. Before I turn the page (figuratively) I'm pulling for Bill. I want to compliment you for the quality of the poetry included in the story. Anyone who can write poetry like Bill needs to write more of it. :) -Robert-
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2019
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Well Tootie: You caught me with the previous chapter and it's pretty clear you will catch me with the next chapter. Before I turn the page (figuratively) I'm pulling for Bill. I want to compliment you for the quality of the poetry included in the story. Anyone who can write poetry like Bill needs to write more of it. :) -Robert-
Comment Written 17-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2019
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Well, Robert, we are very happy you enjoyed Chapter 5 of Love Long Distance. Thank you so much for reading and reviewing it. Cathy is pulling for Bill also. She can't imagine her world without him! She also agrees with you that his poetry is awesome! Glad you are following along. Thank you again! Chapter 6 is in the works and coming soon.
God Bless,
Bill & Cathy
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I'm paying attention. :)
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This is beautifully written and quite moving. It flowed wonderfully start to finish. The poetry was splendid and so sincere one could truly believe they were written by two lovers. The ending made my eyes tear up but I am sure they will one day be united in paradise. Thank you very much for sharing it.
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2019
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This is beautifully written and quite moving. It flowed wonderfully start to finish. The poetry was splendid and so sincere one could truly believe they were written by two lovers. The ending made my eyes tear up but I am sure they will one day be united in paradise. Thank you very much for sharing it.
Comment Written 17-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2019
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We really appreciate you stopping by to read and review Chapter 5 of Love Long Distance. Thank You! So glad you enjoyed it and it caused such emotion. Yes, no matter what happens next, there's no doubt they will be united in paradise. We hope you come back for Chapter 6--coming soon!
God Bless,
Bill & Cathy
Comment from Brenda Henderson
I love the poetry sprinkled within the prose. The formatting appears to have some challenges which proved somewhat distracting. I like the story and I'm interested to see where you will take your readers. Good work.
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2019
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I love the poetry sprinkled within the prose. The formatting appears to have some challenges which proved somewhat distracting. I like the story and I'm interested to see where you will take your readers. Good work.
Comment Written 16-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2019
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Welcome to FanStory! On this site, it is the general rule to award 5 stars (or higher) for a posting unless it needs work. If lower than a 5 star rating, the reviewer should also make some suggestion(s) for improvement. Can you explain how to improve on this? As for the formatting, it is not off. Because it is fully justified, like most book are, the extra spacing you are seeing happens. We're sorry that distracted you. Thank you so much for reading and reviewing this chapter. We hope you continue to follow along. Chapter 6 is in the works and coming soon.
God Bless,
Bill & Cathy