Darren's Story. part 1
A story of love and devotion6 total reviews
Comment from JudyE
I enjoyed reading about Darren. I'm sure it must have been very hard at times. I also know that Downs Syndrome children are very loving and bring great pleasure to their family, as Darren did to yours. Thank you for sharing such a personal story with us.
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2019
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I enjoyed reading about Darren. I'm sure it must have been very hard at times. I also know that Downs Syndrome children are very loving and bring great pleasure to their family, as Darren did to yours. Thank you for sharing such a personal story with us.
Comment Written 06-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2019
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No worries Judy, all the best. Cheers, Kev.
Comment from Roxanna Andrews
I am so sorry about Darren's passing. I know that had to be very hard. Years ago I had a Downs Syndrome boy in the Sunday School class I taught. He always called me his girlfriend and would hug and kiss my arm. He was very cute and well loved by the people in my church. I don't know how he is today, he must be about 40 by now. He didn't seem to have any health problems, but I'm not sure.
This is really interesting and I enjoyed reading about Darren's life.
There are a few edits needed, like it is all run together no separation of paragraphs, that happens when you paste from Word. It is also very long so many not get as many reviews as it deserves. People now days want fast reads. You may want to consider breaking it up into parts. Of course that takes more posting money. But I'm sure more people would read and enjoy it if it were in shorter parts.
Anyway, I do hope it was helpful in your grieving to write it. Bless you and your family. Rox
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2019
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I am so sorry about Darren's passing. I know that had to be very hard. Years ago I had a Downs Syndrome boy in the Sunday School class I taught. He always called me his girlfriend and would hug and kiss my arm. He was very cute and well loved by the people in my church. I don't know how he is today, he must be about 40 by now. He didn't seem to have any health problems, but I'm not sure.
This is really interesting and I enjoyed reading about Darren's life.
There are a few edits needed, like it is all run together no separation of paragraphs, that happens when you paste from Word. It is also very long so many not get as many reviews as it deserves. People now days want fast reads. You may want to consider breaking it up into parts. Of course that takes more posting money. But I'm sure more people would read and enjoy it if it were in shorter parts.
Anyway, I do hope it was helpful in your grieving to write it. Bless you and your family. Rox
Comment Written 03-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2019
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Thanks so much for your review and kind words, I appreciate the feedback. I will take on board your suggestions of breaking it down some what. You are right copy and paste from word, seems to put all your work in a kilter. Thanks again and have a lovely day.
I was somewhat dubious about actually posting this memior of Darren as it brought back so many memories whilst reading and writing this piece. Cheers, Kev.
Comment from Sandra Ludwick
Thank you for sharing this story. I know that at times it must have been difficult for you. But sometimes a work such as this is very therapeutic. Content is good, but there are many grammatical errors.
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2019
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Thank you for sharing this story. I know that at times it must have been difficult for you. But sometimes a work such as this is very therapeutic. Content is good, but there are many grammatical errors.
Comment Written 03-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2019
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Thanks Sandra, I got a bit too emotional whilst trying to proof read but I will edit it. Cheers, Kev.
Comment from Badger_29
Dear waytogokevs,
This caught my eye because not only is my name Derek, I still at the same way. As I started reading, I found some similarities to start with I was born on 4/20 and he passed away on what event would have been my 39th birthday. I found this to be a very enjoyable read about your promises of your son and I would like to express my sincere condolences for his loss. Having Downs, I believe he was a child of God to start with therefore I am certain that that's where he went is with God up in heaven. I enjoyed your interaction with him, I was sad to hear that you had so many sorows. I also enjoyed reading about his eccentricities, he seemed to have
excessive compulsive disorder like me.
I don't like dust germs I don't like to get my hands on my clothes dirty. He seemed to have an intimate connection to the animals and I enjoyed the interaction with horses that you described. I would not have anything to add to this, it seems very complete and it seemed a very good writing about your history with a special child.
This is my prayer that the Lord bless you as abundantly, as He has me .
I thank you for entering this very prolific and weepy essay.
Blessings,
Brother Badger cull
Darren
P.S. this deserved 6, and when I have sex I will change it
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2019
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Dear waytogokevs,
This caught my eye because not only is my name Derek, I still at the same way. As I started reading, I found some similarities to start with I was born on 4/20 and he passed away on what event would have been my 39th birthday. I found this to be a very enjoyable read about your promises of your son and I would like to express my sincere condolences for his loss. Having Downs, I believe he was a child of God to start with therefore I am certain that that's where he went is with God up in heaven. I enjoyed your interaction with him, I was sad to hear that you had so many sorows. I also enjoyed reading about his eccentricities, he seemed to have
excessive compulsive disorder like me.
I don't like dust germs I don't like to get my hands on my clothes dirty. He seemed to have an intimate connection to the animals and I enjoyed the interaction with horses that you described. I would not have anything to add to this, it seems very complete and it seemed a very good writing about your history with a special child.
This is my prayer that the Lord bless you as abundantly, as He has me .
I thank you for entering this very prolific and weepy essay.
Blessings,
Brother Badger cull
Darren
P.S. this deserved 6, and when I have sex I will change it
Comment Written 03-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2019
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Thanks Brother Badger, much obliged for your review and kind words.
Cheers, Kev.
Comment from robyn corum
Kev,
I'm so glad you have recorded all of this - not just as a catharsis for yourself but to have as a memory and record of a precious and amazing, unique life. I'm also very proud that you and your wife were able and willing to take this troubled baby home when so many others might have given up. Good on you!
This would be easier reading if you had spaces between paragraphs, and broke it up into smaller sections. I hope more people will read. Thanks - and hugs--
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2019
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Kev,
I'm so glad you have recorded all of this - not just as a catharsis for yourself but to have as a memory and record of a precious and amazing, unique life. I'm also very proud that you and your wife were able and willing to take this troubled baby home when so many others might have given up. Good on you!
This would be easier reading if you had spaces between paragraphs, and broke it up into smaller sections. I hope more people will read. Thanks - and hugs--
Comment Written 03-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2019
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Thank-you Robyn, for your kind thoughts and review, much appreciated and I will endeavour to edit it. Thanks, again and have a wonderful day. Cheers, Kev.
Comment from mvbrooks
I don't know if our remember "Dear Abby," but in a column she once wrote that having a Downs Syndrome baby was like planning a trip to Italy and reading about the cuisine and events and getting on a plane expecting to land in Italy. But, instead you land in Holland. At first, you're disappointed because Holland was not what you expected or planned for. It's life at a slower pace than Italy. But, once you experience Holland, you appreciate it for its beauty and what it has to offer. Seems she could have been writing about your experience.
Thank you for sharing this heart-warming story and for taking us inside the family's view.
Have you considered writing this as a longer piece, perhaps like Darren's memoir through his family's eyes? The story holds the reader's interest and the topic is still very timely.
Editing suggestion:
In the sentence: "Darren life as a baby was not the filled with hardship and heart-ache,"
--change the placement of the word "the" from before "filled" and place it before 'hardship" to it reads: Darren's life as a baby was not filled with the hardship and heart-ache"
--add an apostrophe to Darren (Darren's) to show ownership -- he owned the life you're describing.
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2019
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I don't know if our remember "Dear Abby," but in a column she once wrote that having a Downs Syndrome baby was like planning a trip to Italy and reading about the cuisine and events and getting on a plane expecting to land in Italy. But, instead you land in Holland. At first, you're disappointed because Holland was not what you expected or planned for. It's life at a slower pace than Italy. But, once you experience Holland, you appreciate it for its beauty and what it has to offer. Seems she could have been writing about your experience.
Thank you for sharing this heart-warming story and for taking us inside the family's view.
Have you considered writing this as a longer piece, perhaps like Darren's memoir through his family's eyes? The story holds the reader's interest and the topic is still very timely.
Editing suggestion:
In the sentence: "Darren life as a baby was not the filled with hardship and heart-ache,"
--change the placement of the word "the" from before "filled" and place it before 'hardship" to it reads: Darren's life as a baby was not filled with the hardship and heart-ache"
--add an apostrophe to Darren (Darren's) to show ownership -- he owned the life you're describing.
Comment Written 03-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2019
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Thanks for your review and kind words of encouragement, much appreciated. I never seem to have enough hours in the day, to edit properly but I will take on board your advice. Cheers and thanks again. Kev.