Comment from Thomas Bowling

Excellent

This is an excellent poem. It's a great entry in the Repetition Poetry contest. You should do very well. Maybe even win. I never do, but it's fun to compete.

 Comment Written 21-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 21-Jul-2018

Thank you..I've won a few before but not this one😏. Thanks so much for taking the time to read and review.

Comment from LynnetteOK

Excellent

I really enjoyed reading this. You expressed young (or not) people who have no idea what to do with their lives very well, and with humor.
Best of luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 21-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 21-Jul-2018

Thank you for such a nice review. The contest ended and I didn't win😕 but the one that did was awesome. Thanks for taking time to read and review.

Comment from flylikeaneagle

Excellent

Mystery writer: quite an imagination. Looks like you better get
your booty working... laying on the sofa smoking weed and eating
ice cream. Maybe, exercise and become a fitness trainer. Could
work at a grocery store. They have tasty food there. Yes, funny write.
Good entry. What's a guy to do??? flylikeaneagle

 Comment Written 20-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 20-Jul-2018

Thank you for taking time to read and review. I really appreciate it.

Comment from Cindy McIntyre

Excellent

I loved your choice of repetition. This was a great response to this writing prompt and contest. Your sense of humor came through and your rhyming pattern throughout flowed so well. Good luck in this contest.

 Comment Written 20-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 20-Jul-2018

Thank you for this great review, I really appreciate it. :)

Comment from Lady Jane

Excellent

Haha, that's funny. Watering plant, who knew? ;-) Well, maybe a hobo, riding the rails, or a circus act...who knows, I guess we'll see. This is choice. I love the repetition and fun the writer had with the subject...good luck in the contest.
Janelle

 Comment Written 20-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 20-Jul-2018

Thank you so much, your review made my day!

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A very well-written repitition poem about our thoughts that sometimes doesn't work out as we dream about it. We dream to become someone special in society, but we only become part of a struggling family.

 Comment Written 20-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 20-Jul-2018

Thank you for this wonderful review, I appreciate it.

Comment from Gloria ....

Excellent

This is a cute poem with the protagonist happen stancing through any number of "careers" before finally settling in on the friend's couch.

It could be worse. lol.

Great job with the repetition prompt and best of luck to you in the contest.

Gloria

 Comment Written 20-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 20-Jul-2018

Thank you for taking time to read and review.I always love hearing from fellow writers.

Comment from meeshu

Excellent

a new, and more accurate perhaps, for dreamers. wouldn't it be great if we could just snap our fingers when things get tough. 'everything will be fine, if I could just get a loan'. Great..

 Comment Written 20-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 20-Jul-2018

Thanks for reading, it's always nice to hear from you.

Comment from AprilViolet

Excellent

Excellent poem! It flows nicely and I enjoyed the comedic aspect of it! Sounds like that guy is having a bit of a rough time but he always seems to face things head on! Thank you for sharing! Good luck on your contest!

 Comment Written 19-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 20-Jul-2018

Thank you for such a nice review.

Comment from Sandra Elizabeth Williams

Excellent

Oh dear, much more than dreaming is required here, I'll say!

Good poetry piece, I love the rhymes and the repetitious line. It is also quite humorous.

Best of luck in the competition.

 Comment Written 19-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 20-Jul-2018

Thank you so much for this kind review.