Echoing Memories of Regret
Free Verse: When You and I Were We47 total reviews
Comment from Blue Hendrix
Wonderful job on this piece. It flowed with perfection. Word choices were also great and your subject was good as well. Can't say I found one thing wrong with this poem. Great piece!
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2018
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Wonderful job on this piece. It flowed with perfection. Word choices were also great and your subject was good as well. Can't say I found one thing wrong with this poem. Great piece!
Comment Written 16-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2018
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Hello Friend,
So pleased you enjoyed my poem.
Thank you for your excellent rating and complimentary review!
diane
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
This is truly beautiful, my friend. It starts off with such an amazing closeness and asoften occurs in life with all of its stresses, grow apart. So sad this has to happen. Best wishes in the contest~Debbie
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2018
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This is truly beautiful, my friend. It starts off with such an amazing closeness and asoften occurs in life with all of its stresses, grow apart. So sad this has to happen. Best wishes in the contest~Debbie
Comment Written 15-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2018
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Hello Debbie,
So pleased you enjoyed.
Thank you for your excellent rating and review.
It didn't fare very well at all in the contest, but I surely enjoyed writing it...
diane
Comment from Oatmeal
The poem flowed well. Chosen explanations are made very clear and descriptive.
The arrangement is understandable and effective. Emotional reflections are insightful and impressive.
I did locate one typo. Nothing to worry about at all. It will be a quick fix.
(compasses) of certitude
*compass
Everything else looks terrific.
The words you chose worked well.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2018
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The poem flowed well. Chosen explanations are made very clear and descriptive.
The arrangement is understandable and effective. Emotional reflections are insightful and impressive.
I did locate one typo. Nothing to worry about at all. It will be a quick fix.
(compasses) of certitude
*compass
Everything else looks terrific.
The words you chose worked well.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
Comment Written 15-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2018
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Hello Oatmeal!
I so appreciate your stopping by and your thoughtful review.
Actually, "compasses" is what I intended as I am writing about two sisters who were the compasses of certitude for the speaker.
Thank you again for your excellent rating and review.
Comment from Zue65
The feeling of loneliness when two lovers are no longer in love can be a devastating and a sorrowful emotion. I really enjoy reading free verse because the message can flow freely throughout the lines from beginning to end. You did well here, God bless and thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2018
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The feeling of loneliness when two lovers are no longer in love can be a devastating and a sorrowful emotion. I really enjoy reading free verse because the message can flow freely throughout the lines from beginning to end. You did well here, God bless and thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2018
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Hello Susan,
Thank you for your excellent rating and complimentary review.
So pleased you enjoyed.
diane
Comment from Angela Post
I like the metaphor of the ship and diverging paths. I enjoyed the third stanza with the kaleidoscope of memories. There is such a range of experiences among the memories mentioned.
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2018
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I like the metaphor of the ship and diverging paths. I enjoyed the third stanza with the kaleidoscope of memories. There is such a range of experiences among the memories mentioned.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2018
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Hello Angela,
So pleased you enjoyed!
Thank you for your excellent rating and complimentary review...
diane
Comment from F Scott Hafner
This seems really good on many levels. I submit stuff doing my best but it pales to things such as this. What makes a good writer? Can poor writers, me, even recognize good stuff? In how it provokes thoughts and emotions, yes. Maybe like singers, but there how good one is, does not often correlate to thoughts and emotions evoked. No matter, keep up the good work!
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2018
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This seems really good on many levels. I submit stuff doing my best but it pales to things such as this. What makes a good writer? Can poor writers, me, even recognize good stuff? In how it provokes thoughts and emotions, yes. Maybe like singers, but there how good one is, does not often correlate to thoughts and emotions evoked. No matter, keep up the good work!
Comment Written 15-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2018
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Hello Frank,
I am so very honored by your exceptional rating and thoughtful review.
I just write from my heart...That is all I know how to do...
Thank you so very much...I will keep trying!
diane
Comment from Winslow
Dear Poet,
Once your compass now your sister has sailed away leaving cherished memories when you two were closely bonded. How did it happen you know not but it did and the ship sailed away.
Good luck in the contest a worthy entry.
Happy Spring,
Winslow
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2018
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Dear Poet,
Once your compass now your sister has sailed away leaving cherished memories when you two were closely bonded. How did it happen you know not but it did and the ship sailed away.
Good luck in the contest a worthy entry.
Happy Spring,
Winslow
Comment Written 15-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2018
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Thank you ever so much, Winslow!
Not one...but two...So it goes...
Thank you for your excellent rating and best wishes!
Comment from William Ross
A very good write on the emotions of loosing a love even if its a ship or the sea. Nicely done, good luck on this, reads and flows so nicely along.have a great day.
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2018
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A very good write on the emotions of loosing a love even if its a ship or the sea. Nicely done, good luck on this, reads and flows so nicely along.have a great day.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2018
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Hello William!
So pleased you stopped by.
Thank you for your excellent rating and complimentary review...
Comment from Ulla
Hi there, first of all, I want to say that your poem left me with a deep impression. Your words really hit a core within me. Beautifully written, and I wish you good luck. All the best. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2018
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Hi there, first of all, I want to say that your poem left me with a deep impression. Your words really hit a core within me. Beautifully written, and I wish you good luck. All the best. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 15-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2018
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Hello Ulla!
So pleased my poem resonated with you!
Thank you for your excellent rating and complimentary and thoughtful review...
Comment from Sugarray77
Beautiful! I like how you developed the thought of changes. We all grow and change in relationships and you recounted your story well. Your flow of thought was good as was your descriptions. Well done.
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2018
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Beautiful! I like how you developed the thought of changes. We all grow and change in relationships and you recounted your story well. Your flow of thought was good as was your descriptions. Well done.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2018
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Hello Suggarray77!
So pleased you enjoyed!
Thank you for your excellent rating and thoughtful review...